Who's Online Now
19 registered members (Gavin Sinclair, couchgrouch, Calvin, Dave Rice, Everett Adams, beechnut79, Colin Ward, 9ne, Harriet Ames, 2 invisible), and 241 guests, and
Key: Admin, Global Mod, Mod
Shout Box
Member Spotlight
Richard Scott
Richard Scott
bossier city, LA. USA
Posts: 2,899
Joined: January 2003
Show All Member Profiles 
What's Going On
Turning 60
by Gavin Sinclair. 07/21/18 04:16 PM
Hometown Refugee
by Gavin Sinclair. 07/21/18 04:10 PM
One More Chance
by Janice & Bud. 07/21/18 02:32 PM
Rocked to the Bones
by Gavin Sinclair. 07/21/18 02:02 PM
So Where Does Your Song Rank On Ourstage?
by Gavin Sinclair. 07/20/18 06:54 PM
Miracle Pill
by Dave Rice. 07/20/18 12:39 PM
How To Cover A Dylan Song
by Sue Rarick. 07/20/18 12:06 PM
Stock Footage
by Sue Rarick. 07/20/18 12:02 PM
Wounds that Time Won't Heal
by Travis david. 07/20/18 05:45 AM
Five Hundred Miles [Cover]
by Douglas Murphy. 07/19/18 07:17 PM
I Can't Stand Still
by 9ne. 07/19/18 03:14 PM
top ten songwriters of the last fifty years.
by beechnut79. 07/19/18 01:21 PM
Race to the Bottom
by Gavin Sinclair. 07/19/18 12:40 PM
My Name Is Death
by Calvin. 07/19/18 12:40 PM
Been on My Mind Too Long
by beechnut79. 07/19/18 11:58 AM
Yes I really do care
by beechnut79. 07/19/18 11:56 AM
Grace, Healing, Wonder and Love
by beechnut79. 07/19/18 11:52 AM
Throw Another Brick On Me
by beechnut79. 07/19/18 11:50 AM
Chatham NYer Just won GRAND PRIZE on OurStage!
by winfilm. 07/19/18 09:07 AM
Can't Love No-One But Her
by Gavin Sinclair. 07/18/18 07:45 PM
Letters From Alcatraz
by couchgrouch. 07/18/18 07:42 PM
I Remember Autumn
by Douglas Murphy. 07/18/18 07:22 PM
Many Years Ago
by Douglas Murphy. 07/18/18 07:16 PM
How Many Writers Do You Need...AND why
by Martin Lide. 07/18/18 05:24 PM
new digital single-"Holiday"
by markus-ky. 07/18/18 03:12 PM
Dancing Horses 2
by lane1777. 07/18/18 11:52 AM
Smoke And Mirrors
by Gavin Sinclair. 07/18/18 11:24 AM
Far From My One True Love
by Ricki E. Bellos. 07/18/18 09:08 AM
Last Place I Looked
by Michael LeBlanc. 07/17/18 11:40 AM
An Innocent Man
by RainyDayMan. 07/16/18 06:18 PM
Top Posters(All Time)
Calvin 19,524
Travis david 10,936
Kevin Emmrich 10,539
Jean Bullock 10,330
Kaley Willow 10,240
Two Singers 9,571
Joice Marie 9,186
Mackie H. 8,835
glynda 8,574
Mike Dunbar 8,574
Tricia Baker 8,318
Colin Ward 7,893
Corey 7,357
couchgrouch 7,327
Dave Rice 6,741
Wyman Lloyd 6,578
Mark Kaufman 6,434
Joe Wrabek 6,402
ben willis 6,092
Lynn Orloff 5,788
Louis 5,725
Vicarn 5,689
Linda Sings 5,604
niteshift 5,390
KimberlyinNC 5,210
Derek Hines 4,893
DonnaMarilyn 4,618
Blake Hill 4,528
Neil Cotton 4,365
Bob Cushing 4,351
Bill Osofsky 4,199
Cindy Miller 4,178
Tom Shea 4,173
TamsNumber4 4,029
Roy Cooper 3,999
nightengale 3,965
Caroline 3,865
Kolstad 3,782
Dan Sullivan 3,710
MFB III 3,687
Dottie 3,427
joewatt 3,411
beechnut79 3,391
Bill Cooper 3,279
John Hoffman 3,199
E Swartz 3,133
Skip Johnson 3,027
Pam Hurley 3,007
Terry G 3,005
PopTodd 2,885
Harriet Ames 2,869
Nigel Quin 2,806
MidniteBob 2,706
Nelson 2,562
Tom Tracy 2,558
Polly Hager 2,526
Jerry Jakala 2,524
Al Alvarez 2,499
Eric Thome 2,448
Hummingbird 2,401
Stan Loh 2,263
Sam Wilson 2,241
Judy Hollier 2,232
Erica Ellis 2,202
Wendy D 2,182
TrumanCoyote 2,096
Marty Helly 2,012
DukeWill 1,984
floyd jane 1,947
Clint Anglin 1,904
cindyrella 1,888
David Wright 1,866
maccharles 1,859
Clairejeanne 1,851
Cindy LaRosa 1,824
Ronald Boyt 1,675
Iggy 1,626
Noel Downs 1,620
Rick Heenan 1,577
Cal 1,574
Jack Swain 1,554
Pete Larsen 1,537
Ann Tygart 1,529
Tom Breshers 1,487
Janice & Bud 1,464
RogerS 1,461
Tom Franz 1,452
Ralph Blight 1,440
Chuck Crowe 1,435
Kenneth Cade 1,429
Rick Norton 1,428
bholt 1,411
Letha Allen 1,406
in2piano 1,404
Stan Simons 1,402
mattbanx 1,384
Jen Shaner 1,373
Charlie Wong 1,347
GocartMoz 1,341
KevinP 1,324
Vondelle 1,316
Tom W. 1,313
Jan Petter 1,301
scottandrew 1,292
DakLander 1,265
Ian Ferrin 1,230
PeteG 1,228
Glen King 1,212
IdeaGuy 1,209
AaronAuthier 1,177
Diane Ewing 1,158
summeoyo 1,085
Gerry 1,084
joro 1,077
BobbyJoe 1,075
S.DEE 1,040
yann 1,037
Tony A 1,016
lane1777 1,015
Martin Lide 1,006
argo 986
peaden 984
Wolvman 960
IronKnee 930
Jak Kelly 912
krtinberg 890
Drifter 886
Petra 883
RJC 845
Brenda152 840
Nadia 827
Juan 797
TKO 784
frahmes 781
teletwang 762
90 dB 745
tbryson 737
Andy K 734
Andy Kemp 733
ant 732
Jackie444 722
3daveyO3 704
Dayson 703
9ne 703
Dixie 701
Joy Boy 695
Knute 686
Lee Arten 678
Deej56 655
Katziis 652
R.T.MOORE 638
quality 637
CG King 622
douglas 621
Mel 614
NaomiSue 601
Pat Hardy 599
Irwin 589
Shandy 589
Ria 587
TAMERA64 583
qbaum 570
nitepiano 565
pRISCILLA 556
Tink2 553
musica 539
Moosesong 530
deanbell 528
RobertK 527
BonzaiWag 523
Roderic 522
BB Wilbur 511
goodfolks 499
Fdemetrio 492
Zeek 487
Stu 486
Steve P. 481
R&M 463
KathyW 462
allenb 459
MaxG 458
Philjo 454
fanito 448
trush48 448
dmk 442
arealrush 437
DGR 436
avweek 435
Stephen D 433
Emmy 431
Rob L 426
marquez 422
kit 419
Softkrome 417
kyrksongs 415
RRon 408
Laura G. 407
VNORTH 407
Debra 407
eb 406
cuebald 399
EdPerrone 399
Dannyk1 395
Hobart 395
Davyboy49 393
Smile 389
GJShades 387
Ezt 384
tone 380
Marla 380
Cecilee 379
iggyiggy 378
coalminer 377
java 374
spidey 371
sweetsong 370
danny 367
Jim Ryan 360
papaG 353
Alek 352
Z - man 350
John K 348
JamesDF5 347
Jaden 344
ddreuter 341
TheBaz 340
Steggy 339
leif 339
tonedeaf 336
rickwork 334
Eddie Ray 332
Johnboy 328
Bob Lever 328
Helicon1 327
lucian 326
Muskie 321
kc 319
Z. Mulls 318
ptondreau 313
ONOFFON 312
Chris B. 310
trush 304
ed323 297
Ellen M 293
lizzorn 291
nicnac49 290
pomeranj 289
Char 286
ktunes 285
markus-ky 280
Register Today!
Welcome to the Just Plain Folks forums! You are currently viewing our forums as a Guest which gives you limited access to most of our discussions and to other features.

By joining our free community you will have access to post and respond to topics, communicate privately with our users (PM), respond to polls, upload content, and access many other features. Registration is fast, simple, and absolutely free; so please join our community today!
Previous Thread
Next Thread
Print Thread
Rate This Thread
#1139598 - 04/13/18 01:09 AM Tell Me Everything (Mix 2 033018)  
Joined: Jun 2009
Posts: 251
ejlawrence Offline
Top 500 Poster
ejlawrence  Offline
Top 500 Poster

Joined: Jun 2009
Posts: 251
Greater Los Angeles
I wrote a scratch-track of this tune (piano/vocal) about a year ago. This is an in-progress studio track with much more production. Looking to get the track into music libraries for film/TV placement. Please give a listen and let me know what you think. Thanks in advance.

BTW: I wrote this song from a title, so no cryptic or hidden personal relationship messages intended or included! Lyrics are below.
Emmanuel Lawrence
Copyright 2017

Verse 1
I'm in no mood for lies
Let the truth tumble from your lips
Help me understand what happened
And how we've come to this

Chorus
Tell me everything
Tell me how we went wrong
Go ahead, tell me about your fling
And how he came along
There's not a lot you could say
That might keep me from leaving
But won't you tell me, tell me, tell me?
Tell me everything (2x)

Verse 2
I need to know, was it his eyes?
Was it his touch?
Was it his voice, his laughter?
Why did you need him so much?

Repeat Chorus

Bridge
The truth matters
And love is a matter of trust
But now our trust is broken
And there's no more need for us

Verse 3
Well, the damage is done
Now, heartbreak is my name
The rising suns of all my tomorrows
Will never be the same

Repeat Chorus & Outro

https://www.reverbnation.com/emmanuellawrence/song/29419946-tell-me-everything-mix-2-033018

Last edited by ejlawrence; 04/13/18 08:38 PM.
#1139607 - 04/13/18 06:19 AM Re: Tell Me Everything (Mix 2 033018) [Re: ejlawrence]  
Joined: Jun 2011
Posts: 10,936
Travis david Online content
Top 10 Poster
Travis david  Online Content
Top 10 Poster

Joined: Jun 2011
Posts: 10,936
Kendal, Cumbria .UK
Hi Emmanual
Lovely song sad poignant great vical too.
All the best with it
Travis


We are all in the gutter, but some of us are looking at the stars. Oscar Wilde
#1139618 - 04/13/18 11:20 AM Re: Tell Me Everything (Mix 2 033018) [Re: ejlawrence]  
Joined: Feb 2005
Posts: 6,741
Dave Rice Online content
Top 40 Poster
Dave Rice  Online Content
Top 40 Poster

Joined: Feb 2005
Posts: 6,741
Texas
Hi EJ:

I enjoyed this song very much. You list it as a "work in progress" but I think you've done everything it needs except for getting it pitched and recorded by a big name artist. (Nothing wrong with using Music Libraries... depending on their status and reputation.) This one is a real "heart-breaker" and I think it will do well in your final cut or demo... if you choose to go that way. Thanks so much for sharing it with us and I saw several more songs on your "Reverb Page" and will do my best to get back and listen ASAP. I'm grinding away at one in my little studio right now... so, I hope you understand.

I forgot to mention what a really good vocal you have.

All the best, ----Dave

Last edited by Dave Rice; 04/13/18 11:21 AM. Reason: Clarity
#1139630 - 04/13/18 03:44 PM Re: Tell Me Everything (Mix 2 033018) [Re: ejlawrence]  
Joined: Dec 2016
Posts: 11
Bob_Dietrich Offline
Casual Observer
Bob_Dietrich  Offline
Casual Observer

Joined: Dec 2016
Posts: 11
Los Angeles
You’ve done a good job tackling a tough topic. The one question that was not answered that might add to your song is: why do you need to know?
Good Luck, Bob

#1139634 - 04/13/18 05:07 PM Re: Tell Me Everything (Mix 2 033018) [Re: ejlawrence]  
Joined: Jul 2013
Posts: 1,947
floyd jane Offline
Top 200 Poster
floyd jane  Offline
Top 200 Poster

Joined: Jul 2013
Posts: 1,947
Tampa
A nice song, ej. A really nice melody. A good listen.

Your vocal is nice. It seems a little "dry" - which makes it "sit on top" a little. I think some additional reverb would set it in the mix a bit.

Enjoyed this.

fj

#1139638 - 04/13/18 05:35 PM Re: Tell Me Everything (Mix 2 033018) [Re: ejlawrence]  
Joined: Apr 2002
Posts: 19,524
Calvin Online content
Top 10 Poster
Calvin  Online Content
Top 10 Poster

Joined: Apr 2002
Posts: 19,524
Okeechobee, Florida U.S.A.

#1139661 - 04/14/18 12:08 AM Re: Tell Me Everything (Mix 2 033018) [Re: ejlawrence]  
Joined: Dec 2016
Posts: 655
Deej56 Offline
Top 500 Poster
Deej56  Offline
Top 500 Poster

Joined: Dec 2016
Posts: 655
Emmanuel,

I think I recall hearing your “scratch” version of this some time back. Boy, you’ve done a wonderful job bringing this to the next level. Love the melody here, and your vocal accentuates it’s every move. Nice use of percussion throughout for emphasis. Liked this one from start to finish.

Well done!

Regards,

Deej

#1139742 - 04/14/18 10:46 PM Re: Tell Me Everything (Mix 2 033018) [Re: ejlawrence]  
Joined: Jun 2009
Posts: 251
ejlawrence Offline
Top 500 Poster
ejlawrence  Offline
Top 500 Poster

Joined: Jun 2009
Posts: 251
Greater Los Angeles
Travis, Dave, Bob, Floyd, Dee and Calvin-
Thanks for listening and feedback. All much appreciated.

Dave, re: lyric "I need to know": Thoughtful point about the lyrics. I think in a situation like this, a quest for closure and need for understanding still remains. Even among the strongest people, unanswered questions can be silently haunting.

#1139757 - 04/15/18 11:07 AM Re: Tell Me Everything (Mix 2 033018) [Re: ejlawrence]  
Joined: Feb 2013
Posts: 1,464
Janice & Bud Offline
Top 200 Poster
Janice & Bud  Offline
Top 200 Poster

Joined: Feb 2013
Posts: 1,464
Georgia, USA
Nice...it definitely has a cinematic feel.

Enjoyed the listen!

Best to you with the libraries.

J&B

PS I agree with fj that some more reverb on the vocal would help it sit fuller in the mix. FWIW.

Last edited by Janice & Bud; 04/15/18 11:08 AM.

Never grow up...it's a trap!
All our songs feature BiaB
J&B YouTube Sampler
J&B SoundCloud Page
J&B Website
#1139769 - 04/15/18 11:55 AM Re: Tell Me Everything (Mix 2 033018) [Re: ejlawrence]  
Joined: Apr 2008
Posts: 1,015
lane1777 Offline
Top 500 Poster
lane1777  Offline
Top 500 Poster

Joined: Apr 2008
Posts: 1,015
south of the mason,dixon line
nice work EJ really nice vocal in this, and the production. sounds finished to me. but thats just me..really a nice listen ej Lane

Last edited by lane1777; 04/15/18 11:55 AM.

"Grace always pours from a closing wound"
#1139787 - 04/15/18 09:31 PM Re: Tell Me Everything (Mix 2 033018) [Re: ejlawrence]  
Joined: Jun 2010
Posts: 2,562
Nelson Offline
Top 200 Poster
Nelson  Offline
Top 200 Poster

Joined: Jun 2010
Posts: 2,562
Baltimore, MD
Emmanual this is simply beautiful.
Love the story and the pain in the lyric and also your expressive vocals
That sax sprinkled throughout is a nice touch.
The arrangement is perfect.

Well Done


"Dig my imaginary...... Baaand Maaan"
#1139905 - 04/19/18 09:27 PM Re: Tell Me Everything (Mix 2 033018) [Re: ejlawrence]  
Joined: Jun 2009
Posts: 251
ejlawrence Offline
Top 500 Poster
ejlawrence  Offline
Top 500 Poster

Joined: Jun 2009
Posts: 251
Greater Los Angeles
Janice & Bud, Lane and Nelson-
Thanks for listening and feedback. All much appreciated!

#1139948 - 04/20/18 08:51 PM Re: Tell Me Everything (Mix 2 033018) [Re: ejlawrence]  
Joined: Apr 2008
Posts: 6,682
Ricki E. Bellos Offline
Top 40 Poster
Ricki E. Bellos  Offline
Top 40 Poster

Joined: Apr 2008
Posts: 6,682
Wisconsin
Yep...maybe a little reverb on the vocal...otherwise, it sounds great to me. Well done, Emmanuel.

Ricki

#1139955 - 04/20/18 09:42 PM Re: Tell Me Everything (Mix 2 033018) [Re: ejlawrence]  
Joined: Feb 2013
Posts: 1,341
GocartMoz Offline
Top 200 Poster
GocartMoz  Offline
Top 200 Poster

Joined: Feb 2013
Posts: 1,341
Florida
Really great melody. Love the dynamics in it as well. Some really nice builds. Agree with others that vocals need to be a bit wetter. Really nice job. Good luck with it.

Dave

#1139971 - 04/21/18 12:50 AM Re: Tell Me Everything (Mix 2 033018) [Re: ejlawrence]  
Joined: Jun 2009
Posts: 251
ejlawrence Offline
Top 500 Poster
ejlawrence  Offline
Top 500 Poster

Joined: Jun 2009
Posts: 251
Greater Los Angeles
Ricki and Dave, thanks for listening. More reverb is a common recommendation I'm hearing. Appreciate the feedback.

#1139993 - 04/21/18 12:16 PM Re: Tell Me Everything (Mix 2 033018) [Re: ejlawrence]  
Joined: Feb 2005
Posts: 589
Irwin Offline
Top 500 Poster
Irwin  Offline
Top 500 Poster

Joined: Feb 2005
Posts: 589
Georgetown,Guyana,South Americ...
Hi Emmanuel,

Nice song you have here. It as a very smooth melody makes me wants to listen to the end. That being said I must let you know that I am not a fan of your voice in the way you have presented it in the song. I think you could have done better ( Please don't use what I've said about your voice back on me in the future because I myself doesn't have a good singing voice, yours are better than mine)

The lyric is conversational and that is a good thing. I read the lyrics first before I listen to the audio. I am saying this because I had already stated in my mind it was a well-written lyric so, it came as no surprise when I heard the song I was like...I know this melody at to be good.

The Song is very clever and sounds commercials too.

I wish you all the best.

Irwin

#1139997 - 04/21/18 02:38 PM Re: Tell Me Everything (Mix 2 033018) [Re: ejlawrence]  
Joined: Jun 2009
Posts: 251
ejlawrence Offline
Top 500 Poster
ejlawrence  Offline
Top 500 Poster

Joined: Jun 2009
Posts: 251
Greater Los Angeles
Irwin, thanks for listening and the feedback.


Support Just Plain Folks

We would like to keep the membership in Just Plain Folks FREE! Your donation helps support the many programs we offer including Road Trips and the Music Awards.


Membership
Join Just Plain Folks
to receive the free
JPNotes Newsletter!
*this is separate from
message board registration*

Newest Members
winfilm, Liburan_Lombok, azmaster, Johnevans, aliciahess
21057 Registered Users
Forum Statistics
Forums116
Topics118,154
Posts1,113,396
Members21,058
Average Posts Daily29
Most Online1,506
Mar 16th, 2017
Just Plain Quotes
"Sharing in your success is the payback to those who shared in your failure." -Brian Austin Whitney
Today's Birthdays
Dennis song lyrics (43), Dennis Wright (43)
Popular Topics(Views)
Powered by UBB.threads™ PHP Forum Software 7.6.0