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Another Time Another Day Anthony Thaxton ©March 14, 2018 https://soundclick.com/share.cfm?id=13705187I don’t hear you anymore your words are empty and void everything you used to say to me then don’t leave me upset and annoyed It used to be I built my world around every charming line you had to say But that was another place another time another day I don’t see you anymore your memories are cloudy and blurred everything I thought I seen in you then now seem so foolish and absurd I was blinded by your innocent smile and the beautifully romantic games you’d play But that was another place another time another day Its funny how the same old sun can rise Bring a brand-new day And suddenly make everything that’s broken Feel ok its ok I don’t need you anymore your love is distant and cold Everything I thought I felt for you then now only seams so useless and old there was a time I thought you’d always be here and I knew that you would always stay But that was another place another time another day
Last edited by the_lyricwriter; 04/19/18 09:14 PM. Reason: Updated recording and lyric
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Anthony,
Really like the lyrics here and the melody--got into the song the more and more I listened. I'm the last person to comment on production type things--there are others on this board that can provide more insight in that regard--but there's some tightening that can be done to make this more polished, to my novice ear at least. But, boy, this is great write and inviting tune; something to be proud of. Enjoyed my listen a lot.
All the best,
Deej
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Yes i liked this too Anthony lyrically and all round Travis
We are all in the gutter, but some of us are looking at the stars. Oscar Wilde
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Hi Anthony:
This seems like one of those songs that works well in several genres... as well as "Country." That, my friend... is a real good thing. Recording and vocal technique can be difficult to learn and eventually master. I don't know your "set-up" or gear involved but I enjoyed my listen. My advice is to do as much research about recording and vocals "on-line" if you don't have a personal "guru" you can depend upon. I don't know your musical objectives but there are alternatives in just about any direction for you to choose from.
I began my less than illustrious career as a lyricist. Even now, my objective is to find better artists to do "covers" of my catalogue. Performing is not something I would care to pursue. During my "other life" I had to travel extensively and living out of a suitcase is less than glamorous to me... LOL!
Best of luck with your music... ----Dave
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Hi Lyricwriter. You have all the bones here. Maybe a few too many words and too many gaps, maybe not. Just needs tidying up.
Vic
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I was thinking you had too many words in lines 2 and 3 of each verse. Enjoyable listen that needs a bit more polish. Best of luck! -Mike
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Hey Anthony,
I liked your song. I would have wished your vocal was a little more up front in the mix but you did included the lyric. In your B section, I liked how you had that unexpected chord over the words "Bring a brand new day"...seemed quite appropriate.
Germain
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Thanks For the listen and the important feedback Anthony
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I often heard persons said a good song is a good song and I am saying it right now, This is a good song. It has its place in its own rights.
Who could not like this song. Even if you didn't like it from the beginning this is the type of song make you like the song. ( Meaning it is the song that make you like the song) I hope you do understand what I've said?
This song don't need any introduction, explaining or nothing but having an audience to listen
I would proudly recommend.
Irwin
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Thank you for the kind words
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Anthony,
I enjoyed that. Rolls along nicely. Some nice chord movements.
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We're suckers for heartfelt writes and vocals (with a hefty dose of soul).
You delivered!
And we much enjoyed it.
J&B
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Enjoyed the song,Anthony.A nice write. Mike
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Hey Anthony,
Just bring the vocals a little more up front. You have a nice melody going on. I'd experiment with finding another word than "funny," which is a "trite" expression we all use, but its not really funny of course, so look for a realistic expression that really feels more dramatically on point.......maybe something about "waking up" to a bran new day? Of course, JMO.
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Anthony, I like the melody and playing. Your lyrics are visual and conversational. I think you have room to expand the melodic range of chorus and make stand out a little more. I'd look at your lyrics a little to simply and keep them even more conversational and honest Lots of possibilities here. Thanks for sharing.
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Thank you Emmanuel you are very correct my verses and bridges and chorus do all sound very similar in about every write I do I stuggle with thatas well as getting a good mix I listened to some of you stuff and will continue you have some nice songs
Anthony
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nice voice Anthony, and good lyric, singer/songwriter genre always a "fav of mine..I think it always brings you a little closer to the artist. Lane
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Very cool song Anthony. Lovely lyrics and nice vocal performance.
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