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Mutlu
by Gary E. Andrews - 04/15/24 07:08 PM
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Leafs
by Gary E. Andrews - 04/05/24 01:49 PM
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https://soundclick.com/share.cfm?id=13455939Work in progress.worth pursuing? SWEET DREAMS TONIGHT V A crowded pathway leading up to where my secrets are kept dreaming about her and wanting her, every night that I've slept Trying hard to get over that I'll never see her again night by night pain turns to nightmares, it's always the same...it's always the same C Please send me sweet dreams tonight, only those sweet dreams tonight pick me up, carry me away to wherever she might be when my head touches the pillow carry me to sweet dreams carry me..carry me... carry me V Wondered many times does she miss me like I keep on missing her? Parting as friends only makes things harder knowing she might still care Even if we did fall out of love I know that we could try again after all that time together, I can't believe it's the end. Br I called on her today to wish her happiness Told her how I missed our times... she said "me too I guess" She said "I dreamed of you last night. I hoped that you would call. Maybe we could meet for Coffee or something?" Chorus
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The music is outstanding.....The lyrics could use a boost though in terms of content.
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Thanks for the listen and comments Travis
We are all in the gutter, but some of us are looking at the stars. Oscar Wilde
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Hi Travis and Mimmo:
I enjoyed my listen and read the lyric as the song progressed. Sounded like theatrical material to me... and yes, as written probably favors a female vocalist. Mimmo did a great job with the music and the vocal as well... and I saw nothing to criticize in the lyric. Thanks for sharing. Maybe Adele will be listening and scoop it up for her next album? ----Dave
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Hi Dave Thanks for your thumbs up and comments. Much appreciated Travis
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Hi Travis. Is this a repost from a year or two ago? I seem to have heard it before.
Musically sounds fine but I feel the verses are saying the same. Maybe try changing it in the last verse to say he really has gone. Not sure
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Mimmo has done a lot of work on the music. Yes reposted but with added instrumentation all round It's still work in progress for my co writer. Thanks for your comments Vic Travis
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Problems with the song i initially posted so replaced it with this work in progress number. Completely different but by the same crew Travis
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