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Mutlu
by Gary E. Andrews - 04/15/24 07:08 PM
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Travis sent me his lyric. I made a few alterations but kept with his idea. A simple song about breaking up. Comments welcome. Vic https://soundclick.com/share.cfm?id=13703953https://soundcloud.com/vic-arnold/her-share-of-the-blameHer share of the blame © 2018 J. Vaughan & V. Arnold V1 I read her note. The lies that she wrote, Too long a message by far. She told me it's over and then like a joke, the reason she needed the car. V2 So hard to read. So hard to believe Demanding her share and so on She said that for years she'd been wanting to leave and felt now the right time had come Pre ch. Only in anger she used my full name and there in the note, Jim became James. Chorus Got what she wanted and took what I needed. All that she left was her share of the pain Called me a failure. It's true she'd succeeded to leave me with all of her share of the blame V3 I re-read ten times, still searching for signs but she thought her words carefully through she didn't admit she'd met someone online, just "I've got somewhere to go to". Pre ch. A life on two pages, over and done. Living and loving you learn how to run Chorus
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Are you trying to make me quit the guitar!!!! Great job again.
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Hey Vic, the vocals...especially the harmonies are SO good. Is it you singing both parts?
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High Steve. I'm just a strummer but I do like to strum.
Thanks for listening.
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Simple yes but nicely written. Simple is good - and hard to do  Perfect music for the story - and cool vocals and guitar, as always, Vic. Scott
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Hi Germain.
Yes, for my sins it is all me on the vocals.
Thanks for the approval.
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Hi Vic and Travis: (JPF's Song-writing Machine)
I really enjoyed listening to this one. Read the lyrics as you sang and played, Vic... and once again, "That Team from Wales" has done it once more!" Travis wrote this one for all those guys sitting in the Bars and Saloons out here on the plains... lifting a long-neck beer and wondering what went wrong! I thought your guitar "solo break" really worked well.
Send more, soon... guys! Thanks, ----Dave
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Travis & Vic,
An excellent write - strong, start to finish.
"I read her note. The lies that she wrote,
Too long a message by far.
She told me it's over and then like a joke,
the reason she needed the car. "
... exceptional!
Nice production and vocal - really shows this off.
Easily one of your best.
fj
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Thank you Scott.
Yes, you're right. Simple doesn't have to be stupid or bland.
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Hi guys, Wow, I'm impressed. Beautiful delivery & I really liked this part........ Only in anger she used my full name and there in the note, Jim became James. Calvin http://www.soundclick.com/bands/0/calvinstewart
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Thanks for the listen Steve
Travis
We are all in the gutter, but some of us are looking at the stars. Oscar Wilde
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Thanks for your thumbs up Germain
Travis
We are all in the gutter, but some of us are looking at the stars. Oscar Wilde
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What a beautiful over all production.
Really balanced and perfectly arranged.
I'd love to hear a tiny bit more volume on the violin.
I don't know what or if you're doing anything different but this sound extraordinarily beautiful.
The write itself is just lovely...
"Only in anger she used my full name
and there in the note, Jim became James."
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Thanks for your ears Scott.Travis
We are all in the gutter, but some of us are looking at the stars. Oscar Wilde
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Thank you Dave.
Glad it turned out well.
Vic
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Hi Dave
Thanks for your support once more.
Always good to hear your views
John
We are all in the gutter, but some of us are looking at the stars. Oscar Wilde
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Hey Vic
Very good music...
Malin
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Thanks for your comments Floyd and taking a listen
Travihs
We are all in the gutter, but some of us are looking at the stars. Oscar Wilde
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Thank you Floyd.
Those lines are 50% mine and 50% Travis'.
They do work well together I think.
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Hi Calvin.
Travis came up with most of that.
Thanks for the visit.
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Thanks Nelson.
Upped the fiddle a little on the Soundcloud version.
Am I doing anything different? Probably. I learn a little more each day.
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Thanks Malin.
That's a plus. :-)
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"I read her note. The lies that she wrote,
Too long a message by far.
She told me it's over and then like a joke,
the reason she needed the car. "
Great setup for the story.
Production wise...everything you needed and nothing you didn't.
The mix is nice and open and ideal for the heartfelt lyric and vocal.
Nice!
J&B
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Hi Calvin
Great to know you liked it
Travis
We are all in the gutter, but some of us are looking at the stars. Oscar Wilde
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Hi J&B.
Thanks as always for your encouraging words.
Floyd likes the same part.
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Thanks Nelson that line about Jim/ James was based on a couple i knew many years ago
What do they say, write about things you know!
Thanks for your feedback and yes Vic did another great job
Travis
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Well done all around Gents...the music blends nicely with the lyrics and the band is really sounding tight. Ricki
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Thanks Ricki.
I have complete control of that motley crew. :-)
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Vic, John,
Really nice. I just loved these lyrics, some really great poignant lines, and the music fits them like a glove Vic......well done mates!
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Hi Malin
Thanks for comments and taking a listen
Travis
We are all in the gutter, but some of us are looking at the stars. Oscar Wilde
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Really well written, the lyrics really paint the picture and a lovely hook in the chorus. Very nice melodies too and left me wanting more ( which is a good thing!).
Well done, Kevin
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Hi J&B thanks again for your support comments and ears
Travis
We are all in the gutter, but some of us are looking at the stars. Oscar Wilde
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Hi Ed. Thankyou.
Much appreciated.
Vic
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Hi Ricki
Thanks for your thumbs up and comments for another song
Cheers
Travis
We are all in the gutter, but some of us are looking at the stars. Oscar Wilde
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Cheers Ed we always appreciate your comments
John
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Thank you Kevin.
Good to hear.
Vic
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Vic and Travis,
Well, well done--beautiful lines, and, of course, the great production, vocals and harmony. Awesome listen!
My best to both of you,
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I love the lyric a great little song here
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Thank you Deej.
Appreciated.
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Thanks Kevin pleased you liked the song
Travis
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Hi Lyricwriter.
Thanks for the thumbs up.
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Thanks Deej
Appreciate your comments and likes
Travis
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Thanks LW
Pleased you enjoyed this one.
Thanks for stopping by
Travis
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