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#1133777 - 12/17/17 12:24 PM Santa Muerta Station  
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Santa Muerta Station ©2017 Robert George BMI

I remember feeling half asleep
On my first night working here
I guess I was used to working days
Early on in my career
Though I’m not sure why they transferred me
Life is loss and sacrifice
Now I’ve grown accustomed to this job
And it feels like paradise

Someone always greets the passengers
Near their final destination
Strangers often need a friendly guide
At the Santa Muerta Station

We are high up on a mountainside
Where the pine tops kiss the moon
Sheets of grey fog settle over us
Ev’ry afternoon
There’s a grove of crosses on a slope
Past the gate behind the church
Ravens watch the midnight train roll in
From a roof top perch

Someone always greets the passengers
Near their final destination
Strangers often need a friendly guide
At the Santa Muerta Station

People laugh and claim how fortunate they’ve been,
How they lived through accidents that they’d been in
Climbers fall from cliffs and hikers get bit by vipers way down south
They step off the train so happy they’re alive,
Asking me in whispers how they managed to survive
One poor vet was sure that pistol had been in his mouth

I inform them all they need to know
Tell them this is just a whistlestop
Come the dawn there’ll be a winding walk
To the mansion on the mountaintop
It’s a bit confusing right at first
And it’s awkward to explain
I was sure a truck had crushed my Ford
That night I stepped off the train

But someone always greets the passengers
Near their final destination
Strangers often need a friendly guide
At the Santa Muerta Station


Last edited by couchgrouch; 12/19/17 01:35 PM.

Nashville demos etc:

https://www.soundclick.com/bands3/default.cfm?bandID=431939

other demos:

https://soundcloud.com/wabash-cannibal

Amazon Kindle books by Robert George you may enjoy:

1) Americana

2) Teenage Graceland

3) The Will to Be

4) Fort Mystery

5) Wheel Sea

6) My One True Love
#1133832 - 12/19/17 01:04 PM Re: Santa Muerta Station [Re: couchgrouch]  
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I loved this . . . Very cool concept and portrayal. I just have a couple little things two are in the what I think is the bridge and one is in the second verse. Bridge: First, in the 3rd line, I would suggest using the word bitten instead of bit as it reads a little more clearly. Second, the last line doesn't work for me as a conclusion and seems kind of out of place. To me the 5th line should be the last one and if you moved the "vet" line to follow the 3rd it reads better to me and makes sense and ties it together. The last thing is if you wanted to make the last lines of the verses match better with syllables you could change the last line of the 2nd verse to read: From the roof-top where they perch. Really liked this a lot and would love to hear it and even play it myself!

#1133838 - 12/19/17 03:36 PM Re: Santa Muerta Station [Re: couchgrouch]  
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Thanks Earl.

I don't have any objection to "bitten" in that line. It should've read "get bit", which I fixed.

The bridge is structured so that lines one and two are vague but line three is more specific. The second half is the same...lines four and five are vague as they set up line six which is even more specific than line three and is the punch line for the bridge while setting up the final verse. It would mess up the symmetry and continuity to rearrange the lines in the bridge.

Thanks again for your comments, Earl. smile

Last edited by couchgrouch; 12/19/17 03:37 PM.

Nashville demos etc:

https://www.soundclick.com/bands3/default.cfm?bandID=431939

other demos:

https://soundcloud.com/wabash-cannibal

Amazon Kindle books by Robert George you may enjoy:

1) Americana

2) Teenage Graceland

3) The Will to Be

4) Fort Mystery

5) Wheel Sea

6) My One True Love
#1137390 - 02/18/18 04:02 PM Re: Santa Muerta Station [Re: couchgrouch]  
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Another well told story I'm very impressed.


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