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#1136616 - 02/09/18 02:03 PM THAT FAR BEFORE  
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THAT FAR BEFORE

V
There were times when i needed a friend
times i wondered when this pain would end
With hearts that seemed like closed doors
I'd been down, but not gone that far before

C
I got on my knees and prayed, please give me a sign
that i'm not talking to myself each time
Something to believe in for evermore
been down but never gone that far before


V
There were times when I've seen such anguish
why do some have to suffer like this?
Hungry, helpless from war after war
sure this world hasn't gone this far before
B
It's never gone this far before
for the weak, weary abused and the poor
Lord it's never gone this far before.

Music

C

--------------------------------------------------

IT'S NEVER GONE THIS FAR BEFORE

V
There were times when i just  needed a friend
 times i wondered when this pain would  end
 Seemed everywhere i tried they closed their doors
  I've been down, but never gone this far before

 B
   I got on my knees and  prayed,  please give me a sign
    that i'm not talking to myself each time

  V  
      There were times when I've witnessed such anguish
       why  do some have to suffer like this?
       Hungry, helpless from war after war
        sure this world hasn't gone this far before

B2
           It's never gone this far before
         for the  weak, weary abused and the poor
       Lord it's never gone this far before.

Music

Repeat B1

Music outro
          
  

Last edited by Travis david; 02/10/18 06:29 AM.

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#1136643 - 02/09/18 07:34 PM Re: IT'S NEVER GONE THIS FAR BEFORE [Re: Travis david]  
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A rewrite on this one and a change of structure
Travis


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#1136652 - 02/10/18 12:41 AM Re: IT'S NEVER GONE THIS FAR BEFORE [Re: Travis david]  
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surely we've never gone this far before.

sorry but the structure is weird. Don't know what to make of it.

#1136655 - 02/10/18 03:19 AM Re: IT'S NEVER GONE THIS FAR BEFORE [Re: Travis david]  
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Lol. I've tried moving the structure around it sang OK but it needed a chorus as well so it's been changed plus a slightly different title
Cheers


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#1136854 - 02/12/18 01:05 AM Re: IT'S NEVER GONE THIS FAR BEFORE [Re: Travis david]  
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Travis,

I really like the opening. I actually like that you keep it introspective in the first verse; the second verse is more a view of the state of the world, and while justified, I think the lyric loses momentum. I guess I'm suggesting that you stay with the condition and prospects of the singer, rather than the world as a whole, which comes off less authentic. Not sure if that makes sense, but for what it's worth. As always, feel free to ignore--like most times in life, I'm more often wrong than right!

All the best,

Deej


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