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For 2018 I redone this song and I say I'll post it to have some feedback. I hope you guys like it. http://www.soundclick.com/bands/page_songInfo.cfm?bandID=495672&songID=13682545Below is my first post.This is a piano melody of this song I've compose, your criticisms I will not be taken personally I will only see it as a person wanting to help. Do you think that after listening to this (the way it is) A singer can sing this song? http://www.soundclick.com/bands/page_songInfo.cfm?bandID=495672&songID=13439581LOVE ©2016 Irwin Abrigo (1st Verse) Sometimes I realize Like a miracle I’m cured inside That’s how I’m feeling Right now Some people Never fell in love Yet they look you In the face and say This world Is a crazy place That’s what they say They can feel Nor understand What is love They would know Nor understand What I’m talking about It is love (Chrous) I’m Not the guy Who will lay down And die I’m willing To fight To survive And If love Don’t work out right The first time I will Give love A second Try (2nd Verse) They say Love breaks your heart So I’d stayed away Without a doubt Wanted To find a way out Met someone And I fell in love To those people I would like to say This world Is a happy place That’s what I’ll say I can feel And understand What is love I know And I understand What it’s all about It is love (Chorus) I’m Not the guy Who will lay down And die I’m willing To fight To survive And If love Don’t work out right The first time I will Give love A second Try (Bridge) So whenever you fall in love Look those people face to face and say This world is a happy place That you can say You will feel And understand What is love You will know And understand What I’m talking about It is love (Chorus) I’m Not the guy Who will lay down And die I’m willing To fight To survive And If love Don’t work out right The first time I will Give love A second Try It is love It is love It is love Love, love ,love
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Irwin, I listened and gave you a tweet. I think it would be difficult to sing, although someone might be able to do it.
Jim Colyer
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Okay Jim, For I just wanted to know.Thanks for being honest.
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Jimmy that is honestly BEGINNER PIANO-as in Day One-in my opinion...Everyone has to start somewhere and every one of todays top stars clunked their way to mastering their instruments after years and years of practice....But I have heard better piano playing by kids randomly banging keys in music stores than that....Any lyrics you write for your piano work-at this point anyway-will be defeated by the piano work itself....Its the old saying my friend "How do you get to Carnegie Hall?" Answer-Practice Practice Practice.....
Keep at it-Best of luck
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there are jazz people that could sing this, but even the best vocal gymnastics recognize great melody. I think working on one solid melody line of maybe 10 notes is the start. my suggestion is to work with a composer, someone that know chords well enough to bounce around your melody.
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Hi Irwin:
I listened several days ago and had to leave before I had a chance to respond. In it's present form, it would be a little difficult to sing but you are headed in the right direction.
Only you know the details of the melody you have in-mind for the song but until your piano skills catch up with your creativity, "porcupine" may have suggested a shortcut.
Best of luck with this song and your music. ----Dave
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there are jazz people that could sing this, but even the best vocal gymnastics recognize great melody. I think working on one solid melody line of maybe 10 notes is the start. my suggestion is to work with a composer, someone that know chords well enough to bounce around your melody. Thanks for giving your suggestion I did some work on the melody. Here is the link: http://www.soundclick.com/bands/default.cfm?bandID=495672
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Irwin,
I've been trying to sing along--what makes it difficult is not feeling the rhythm, even though you are playing the melody notes. What would help a singer that unlike you (may not hear or feel the music in their heads) is to have root chords played subtly along with the notes. This gives the jazzier note melody a foundation. Pop melodies are much easier to sing along with, just like you could sing along with jingle bells even if you never have heard the tune. Jazz type melodies can sound a bit abstract without their root chords. Hope this helps.
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