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Leafs
by Gary E. Andrews - 03/04/24 12:47 PM
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What I do occasionally is to use the meter/rhythm of a JPF lyric to guide my melody. Using other writer's lyrics sends me in interesting directions. I used these lyrics to guide a new piano solo of mine. Don't think this falls in the realm of copyright infringement since the track developed is a complete different entity. Though I may retain the original title "Summer's End" because it's a very descriptive title. Best, John
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Hi John:
Would love to hear the piano solo. Like you, I really like the title... although I suppose someone could "turn it around" and use the "double entendr'e" ... LOL! Thanks for looking at the lyric. I wish I had not let it languish for so long. ----Dave
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Hi John:
Would love to hear the piano solo. Like you, I really like the title... although I suppose someone could "turn it around" and use the "double entendr'e" ... LOL! Thanks for looking at the lyric. I wish I had not let it languish for so long. ----Dave Well, since you ask for it Dave. I didn't want to change the direction of this thread. "Summer's End" (stolen title): http://schicksville.com/Summer's%20End.mp3 (hmm... may have to post this to your browser). Don't know why it's not coming out as a link.
Last edited by John Lawrence Schick; 01/13/18 05:23 PM.
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Sorry, John L. .... no joy... my browser wouldn't fetch the link. No big deal. Give me a "Heads Up" if you post it on your new website.
Thanks, ----Dave
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Last edited by John Lawrence Schick; 01/13/18 08:10 PM.
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Thanks for sharing, John:
Stunning piece. Sorry for the long delay. I've been unable to "log in to JPF" for the last four days... seems even longer. I'm blaming my Linux OS or Browser for the problem. Never did solve it... just took a chance and clicked on a "Favorites" link and.... viola... back home again in Indiana. LOL!
Enjoyed your creative work and was especially fond of the title! ----Dave
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Very nice. I like the way the production builds. The only part that slowed down for me was at 2:22. Just felt it needed a little solo line - or perhaps some chorus oohs and ahas - to keep that part moving forward.
On the lyric, only suggestions are "that social climb" and "invitation seemed unkind" in the verse below. These phrases sounded a little judge-y to my ears and took away a bit from the longing expressed in the rest of the lyric.
I read your name from time to time your wedding plans, that social climb I nearly called then changed my mind your invitation seemed unkind
Good job!
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Dave & Mike...
The thread is far too long to read through (at the moment - perhaps I'll come back to it later) - obviously there has been a lot of activity... yet, the Soundcloud post only shows 6 plays? Perhaps a re-post for some reason? (I believe Soundcloud resets if you do that?)
Anyway... this is exceptional in all regards. An impressive write. I like it all. This really captured me:
"I read your name from time to time your wedding plans, that social climb I nearly called then changed my mind your invitation seemed unkind at Summer's end"
A gorgeous production and vocal!
A delight to listen to.
fj
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Hi ...ant:
Thanks for giving "Summer's End" a spin. You are absolutely correct about the verse you mentioned being "judge-y!" He was pretty darn upset with her for leaving him in the lurch! LOL!
The story-line in this song is somewhat true and only the names of the characters were not revealed to prevent the press and paparazzi from inundating this ill-fated pair.
Yessir... Mr. Zaneski hit another of my songs "out of the park" when compared to my version. Thanks again for listening and caring enough to comment. ----Dave
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Floyd:
It was unusual that you picked up on the same verse as "...ant" did in the post above yours. Just goes to show you that we all have different internal wiring and ears. As always, your time spent listening to and reading my work is mighty meaningful to me. Someday, when you are rich and famous... maybe I can twist your arm into pouring over my catalog and cherry-picking an album's worth to sing in your unique style.
Best regards, my friend... and I won't hold it against you for inviting Snyder to post songs here! LOL! ----Dave
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