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#1131375 - 10/11/17 05:23 PM '' I will never leave you''  
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Song title/ '' I will never leave you''
© 2017
___________________________________________
Vs 1:
It's been hard to face another day
Everything they had was taking away
It's so devastating so heartbreaking
Lives will never be the same

Chorus:
No matter what you are going through
Don't be afraid I am with you
I will strengthen you I will lead you through the storm
I will never leave you saith the Lord

Vs 2:
Through these darkest times seems like God is no where to be found
You've been praying but it seems like he's not listening
The situation you're facing seems so hopeless
You just don't know what to do anymore

Chorus:
No matter what you are going through
Don't be afraid I am with you
I will strengthen you I will lead you through the storm
I will never leave you saith the Lord

Vs 3:
Living without a home no water no food
You don't know what I've been going through
These last few days being nothing but hell
The pain seems so endlessly

Bridge:
With all the things that's going on
No words can describe what I'm feeling inside
When I look into my child eyes
The only thing I can do is break down and cry

Chorus:
No matter what you are going through
Don't be afraid I am with you
I will strengthen you I will lead you through the storm
I will never leave you saith the Lord





Last edited by Dennis Wright; 10/11/17 06:30 PM.
#1131390 - 10/12/17 02:15 PM Re: '' I will never leave you'' [Re: Dennis Wright]  
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As suggestion Dennis v2 needs a rewrite to bring it into line with your other verses..Basically shorten the first line of this verse
Regards
Travis


We are all in the gutter, but some of us are looking at the stars. Oscar Wilde
#1131426 - 10/14/17 12:44 AM Re: '' I will never leave you'' [Re: Travis david]  
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Thank you sir for pointing this out to me! I'm currently doing some revising on verse 2 believe it are not I am. Thank you for commenting and for your feedback I really appreciate it. I pray that all is well with you my friend! Thanks again and God bless!
Yours in songwriting,
Dennis

#1131427 - 10/14/17 03:26 AM Re: '' I will never leave you'' [Re: Dennis Wright]  
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I think you need to go through each line starting at verse one and let that be your template for the other verses.
Theres little metre going on!


We are all in the gutter, but some of us are looking at the stars. Oscar Wilde
#1131467 - 10/16/17 10:22 PM Re: '' I will never leave you'' [Re: Travis david]  
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Yes, Sir thank you for pointing that out to me! I'm currently revising the entire lyric. I really appreciate you taking the time to critique and give me your valuable feedback my friend! I'm going to be re-posting this lyric briefly. Thanks again! God bless my friend!
Yours in songwriting,
Dennis

#1131508 - 10/19/17 12:10 PM Re: '' I will never leave you'' [Re: Dennis Wright]  
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I was communicating on Facebook with someone who seemed to be going through this very same things. Seems to be doing better now, though. And yes, I have been there in my own life and there are a few things I believe are just about hopeless right now.

#1132777 - 11/24/17 09:09 PM Re: '' I will never leave you'' [Re: beechnut79]  
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Oh bless your soul! Know that there is always hope in the Lord. Thank you sir for taking time to review my post, and for commenting. God bless, Dennis,

#1132804 - 11/25/17 12:44 PM Re: '' I will never leave you'' [Re: Dennis Wright]  
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Just last week on one of our local television stations they had a two-part feature on the homelessness issue, one of the key things that your lyric brought to my mind. Have argued for years that the nature of today's job and housing markets has contributed mightily to this problem. The collective wants all of us to succeed, but the body politic has a very strong slant for supporting those that already have too much, IMO.

#1134331 - 01/03/18 02:33 AM Re: '' I will never leave you'' [Re: Dennis Wright]  
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Hi Dennis A Good Thing I Find is to borrow a melody and then write a consistent

meter to each verse , so as they match up, the melody can be an existing one of a

song you like and all can be changed later to give your song an original melody of its own



Last edited by Cheyenne; 01/03/18 02:36 AM.

One of the most important principles of songwriting is to remember that a good song is a partnership of many different components, all working together to produce a satisfying musical experience.

In that respect, song components are either enhancing or compromising their combined effects.
#1135029 - 01/15/18 01:25 PM Re: '' I will never leave you'' [Re: Cheyenne]  
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Hi Ms. Cheyenne, I do apologize for replying so late. I totally agree with you. Thank you for taking time to review my song lyric and for giving feed back. God Bless and Happy New Year from my family to yours.


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