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#1133058 - 11/29/17 10:18 PM Show Me  
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I have been co-running a songwriting group for three years now and am so excited to have a collaboration with one of our regular members! His lyric was amazing to work with! George will be getting his first taste of JPF and I am happy to introduce him to those who have taught and mentored me. This is our song called "Show Me", George wrote the lyric and I did the melody, singing and recording.


SHOW ME on SoundCloud


SHOW ME on SoundClick



Show Me
by George Walden and Tammy Jann
© 2017


Show me, don’t tell me
I know that talk is cheap
paint me a picture
Something I can keep
Something to hang onto
My imaginary wall
To look at when I want to
The words I won’t recall
You don’t have to say you love me
We know they’re only words
The sweetest things you’ve said
Are things I never heard


Chorus
Show me
What you’re thinking of
Show me, show me,
Show me your love



It’s easy to say anything
if you read between the lines
Words mean so many things
And they do so many times
Like someone trying to sell me
Something at my door
show me, don’t tell me
I’ve heard it all before
Words can be deceiving
I want nothing but the truth
seeing is believing
show my heart the proof


Chorus
Show me
What you’re thinking of
Show me, show me,
Show me your love


Bridge
Etch it in my memory
Carve it in my heart
Initials in the big old tree
in your backyard


Chorus
Show me
What you’re thinking of
Show me, show me,
Show me your love


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#1133065 - 11/29/17 11:31 PM Re: Show Me [Re: TamsNumber4]  
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Hi Tam, very catchy song song Tam, and I think runs just the right length. ...to me the song is bright and airy, you bring that unique style you have to it. so glad to see you back around..hope all is good in your world Tam.... Lane

and thank you so much for reading me and commenting.

Last edited by lane1777; 11/29/17 11:32 PM.

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#1133072 - 11/30/17 05:02 AM Re: Show Me [Re: TamsNumber4]  
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Hello Tammy,


oooooh......... very catchy / fresh / bouncy, nicely done.


Calvin


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#1133085 - 11/30/17 12:49 PM Re: Show Me [Re: TamsNumber4]  
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Hi Tams,

Great song. I always thought this key writer's platitude ("show, don't tell") could drive the right kinda sassy song, and here you do that expertly and passionately.

My favorite is "etch it in my memory/carve it in my heart."

Your recordings sound natural and balanced and full; your singing is always an enjoyable listen.. smile

Well done!

Mike


Last edited by Michael Zaneski; 11/30/17 12:51 PM.

Fate doesn't hang on a wrong or right choice
Fortune depends on the tone of your voice

-The Divine Comedy (Neil Hannon)
from the song "Songs of Love"
from the album "Casanova" (1996)
#1133094 - 11/30/17 08:14 PM Re: Show Me [Re: TamsNumber4]  
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Hey Tammy,

Very upbeat and innocent lyrics with a happy melody--well done. I really liked the bridge but almost felt on the 3rd line of bridge you could repeat same 1st line melody over again--as that felt anticipated and I really liked that diversion and wanted the same one more time. It happens fast with the tempo, and I don't think lengthening the bridge another line would over state the bridge direction at all--of course JMO. Nice vocal & harmonies Tammy.

Welcome to JPF George, it's always nice to get some new victims.........I mean colleagues!

steady-eddie

#1133100 - 12/01/17 05:28 AM Re: Show Me [Re: TamsNumber4]  
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"The sweetest things you've said are things I never heard".
That's a good one, Tammy.


It's never too late? Yes it is, so do it now.

If, given time, a monkey can write the complete works of Shakespeare maybe there's hope for me.
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#1133110 - 12/01/17 09:30 AM Re: Show Me [Re: TamsNumber4]  
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Cool lyric, George. Tams,the music is light and breezy enough to suit it perfectly.

If I had to pick at something it would be the chorus. I'm all for simple but it's a little underwhelming. I could almost see the bridge and chorus combined, something like this:

Show me
What you’re thinking of
Etch it in my memory
Carve it in my heart
Show me
Show me your love
Initials in the big old tree
in your backyard
Show me

Of course that would mean writing a new bridge...just a thought. Nice collab and welcome to JPF, George.

Ricki

#1133127 - 12/01/17 03:59 PM Re: Show Me [Re: TamsNumber4]  
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Hi Tammy and George:

That was a treat for these ears. You two make a great co-writing team and the "proof of the pudding" is in your product, "Show Me." Loved the lyric, Melody and Vocal. Send more, soon! ----Dave

#1133128 - 12/01/17 04:15 PM Re: Show Me [Re: TamsNumber4]  
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Bravo Tammy and George
Love the overall vibe of the lyrics and the arrangement.

Tammy, I love the way you work your melodies and your vocals.

Well done and Welcome Goerge


A Simple Man making Simple Music~~~ Nelson
#1133148 - 12/01/17 11:17 PM Re: Show Me [Re: TamsNumber4]  
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Tams,

This is a pretty tune, beautifully sung and performed. I always try to think if I can offer up a suggestion here or there on songs I listen to on JPF, but on this one, I've got nothing. Well, well done.

Kindest regards,

Deej

#1133211 - 12/03/17 03:53 AM Re: Show Me [Re: TamsNumber4]  
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Some good lines Tams and George
Nce song all round and a great idea to help run a songwriting group too.
Trsvis

Last edited by Travis david; 12/03/17 03:54 AM.

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#1133228 - 12/03/17 12:47 PM Re: Show Me [Re: TamsNumber4]  
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Hey Tams.......This really is great.......and you are right about the lyrics. Very good. The musical treatment is very good, as well. I especially like the chorus. The harmonizing is great and the vocal effect is stellar ;-)
A great song, and one to be most proud of.
Great job, Tams......and so nice to hear you again!
-Tom

#1133271 - 12/04/17 07:51 AM Re: Show Me [Re: TamsNumber4]  
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Hi Tammy an George!

I enjoyed this sing a lot. Great concept too!
Welcome aboard George!!
You're fortunate to be working with Tammy. Such a great singer and devoted writer!
I believe I am a member of the fb group that Tammy co-runs. I'll have to look for you both on there. I haven't really seen much in my newsfeed from the group but I had a high frequency group that was dominating my newsfeed. I stopped following it yesterday, so hopefully my other sources will get a chance now.

Great job on the song!
Thanks for sharing!

#1133287 - 12/04/17 11:34 AM Re: Show Me [Re: TamsNumber4]  
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Hi Tammy,well what a cool song.Nice performance with lots of feeling.You and George have a good one here. Mike

#1133341 - 12/05/17 11:27 AM Re: Show Me [Re: TamsNumber4]  
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Catchy song with some nice vocals.

I particularly liked the chord changes in the middle of the verses - very nice. The harmony on the chorus is a great touch (although a bit pitchy at times).

I wish the guitar had a bit more sparkle on it.

The song is really well suited to a full blown production with drums, bass, etc. if you ever have the time.

Nicely done.

Peace,
TC


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#1133469 - 12/07/17 08:37 PM Re: Show Me [Re: TamsNumber4]  
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Hey Tammy,

I really enjoyed this a lot. Great lyrics, and a nice simple production. Beautiful vocals.

More like this please!

smile


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#1133540 - 12/08/17 09:20 PM Re: Show Me [Re: TamsNumber4]  
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Lane, thanks for stopping in, always happy to see you and everything is as good as it can be considering...LOL! Take care!

Tammy


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#1133541 - 12/08/17 09:20 PM Re: Show Me [Re: TamsNumber4]  
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Calvin,

Glad you like the "bounce", thanks for stopping by!!

Tammy


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Professor Albus Dumbledore




#1133542 - 12/08/17 09:21 PM Re: Show Me [Re: TamsNumber4]  
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Michael,

Always appreciate your opinion and glad you could enjoy this one.

Tammy


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#1133543 - 12/08/17 09:23 PM Re: Show Me [Re: TamsNumber4]  
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Eddie,

Thanks for your ideas, I will consider it and glad you gave this a spin and George is enjoying this whole process.

Tammy


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#1133544 - 12/08/17 09:24 PM Re: Show Me [Re: TamsNumber4]  
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Vic,

I am happy that it makes you happy! That line is George's, he is a fab lyricist if you are ever looking to explore his work, let me know, it is totally worth it!!

Tammy


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#1133545 - 12/08/17 09:25 PM Re: Show Me [Re: TamsNumber4]  
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Ricki,

Glad you liked it, we will talk about your thoughts on this, appreciate your time and always good to see you!!

Tammy


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#1133546 - 12/08/17 09:25 PM Re: Show Me [Re: TamsNumber4]  
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Dave,

Wow, a glowing review, I am so pleased you liked it that much, thank you!

Tammy


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#1133547 - 12/08/17 09:26 PM Re: Show Me [Re: TamsNumber4]  
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Nelson,

I am just thrilled we can hear each other again, thank you for listening friend!!

Tammy


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#1133548 - 12/08/17 09:27 PM Re: Show Me [Re: TamsNumber4]  
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Deej,

We are so happy that you enjoyed this and i was enjoying your tunes today as well.

Tammy


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#1133549 - 12/08/17 09:28 PM Re: Show Me [Re: TamsNumber4]  
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Travis,

I will let George know what a great writer you are, he will be so happy you enjoyed the lyric and as always thankful you stop in for a listen!!

Tammy


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#1133550 - 12/08/17 09:29 PM Re: Show Me [Re: TamsNumber4]  
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Tom,

Glad you liked this one and I am so happy to see you again as well!!!

Tammy


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https://soundcloud.com/tamsnumber4
http://www.soundclick.com/bands/default.cfm?bandID=1038504

Words are, in my not-so-humble opinion, our most inexhaustible source of magic. Capable of both inflicting injury, and remedying it...
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#1133551 - 12/08/17 09:31 PM Re: Show Me [Re: TamsNumber4]  
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Paul,

I am so happy you stopped in for a listen and always happy to see you friend!! I co-run a songwriting group in real life!! LOL! George and I actually sit next to one another some times LOL! I have plenty of online friends, but made a move four years ago to meet people face to face. The group meets not too far from my home and is time well spent with local musicians who have become friends!!

Tammy


http://tammyjann.com/
https://soundcloud.com/tamsnumber4
http://www.soundclick.com/bands/default.cfm?bandID=1038504

Words are, in my not-so-humble opinion, our most inexhaustible source of magic. Capable of both inflicting injury, and remedying it...
Professor Albus Dumbledore




#1133552 - 12/08/17 09:32 PM Re: Show Me [Re: TamsNumber4]  
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Michael L.,

Thanks so much Michael!! I was thrilled to listen to you today, just blew me away and I am glad you enjoyed this!

Tammy


http://tammyjann.com/
https://soundcloud.com/tamsnumber4
http://www.soundclick.com/bands/default.cfm?bandID=1038504

Words are, in my not-so-humble opinion, our most inexhaustible source of magic. Capable of both inflicting injury, and remedying it...
Professor Albus Dumbledore




#1133553 - 12/08/17 09:33 PM Re: Show Me [Re: TamsNumber4]  
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TC,

Thanks for giving this a listen, and appreciate your observations.

Tammy


http://tammyjann.com/
https://soundcloud.com/tamsnumber4
http://www.soundclick.com/bands/default.cfm?bandID=1038504

Words are, in my not-so-humble opinion, our most inexhaustible source of magic. Capable of both inflicting injury, and remedying it...
Professor Albus Dumbledore




#1133554 - 12/08/17 09:34 PM Re: Show Me [Re: TamsNumber4]  
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David,

Thank you so much and I appreciate you commenting on SoundCloud, glad you liked it and I enjoyed discovering your songs today as well!!

Tammy


http://tammyjann.com/
https://soundcloud.com/tamsnumber4
http://www.soundclick.com/bands/default.cfm?bandID=1038504

Words are, in my not-so-humble opinion, our most inexhaustible source of magic. Capable of both inflicting injury, and remedying it...
Professor Albus Dumbledore




#1133568 - 12/09/17 02:12 AM Re: Show Me [Re: TamsNumber4]  
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Very well written song brought to life by some great Tammy magic - enjoyed it very much. And I'm so proud of your 3 years in a song writing group,Tammy. And welcome to JPF, David. Great teamwork.

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Originally Posted by TamsNumber4
Paul,

I am so happy you stopped in for a listen and always happy to see you friend!! I co-run a songwriting group in real life!! LOL! George and I actually sit next to one another some times LOL! I have plenty of online friends, but made a move four years ago to meet people face to face. The group meets not too far from my home and is time well spent with local musicians who have become friends!!

Tammy

That's awesome Tammy!
I would love to do that!!!!
If I lived closer, I'd join you for sure.
I am always just holed up in my little think tank first thing every weekend morning.
I'm so happy to see you writing and growing.
All the best to you and yours, Paul

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Nice song.

One suggestion regarding the lyric..

I would take the 2nd verse somewhere different than the 1st. The sentiment and theme of the 2nd verse seems to repeat that of the 1st without adding. Other than a salesman at the door, most references seem abstracted and derived from familiar language. I'd try to employ somethings that were more tangible and every day to put a listener's life in the sentiment.

Use it or lose it.

Martin


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