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Mutlu
by Gary E. Andrews - 04/15/24 07:08 PM
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Hi Folks.....got a fresh one,,,,,,please share your thoughts and first impressions. Thanks, in advance........;-) “I Ain’t No Angel” Words & Music by Tom Tognaci https://soundclick.com/share.cfm?id=13661477You can take the best from me While you’re digging a hole into my heart You can hurt my pride, shake my will You can take it all away from me But, I ain’t no angel I’m of flesh and blood, you’ll see I have not walked the road less traveled And there’s no halo’s light on me Born to lose the soul in me To every painted-up face selling romance So, if you take your shot, shoot to kill ‘Cause you may not get another chance ‘Cause, I ain’t no angel I’m of flesh and blood, you’ll see I have not walked the road less traveled And there’s no halo’s light on me You can justify any thing you do You can cover your tracks with your pretty lies But, there’s just one thing you need to hear Before you spit in these snake eyes I ain’t no angel I’m of flesh and blood, you’ll see I have not walked the road less traveled And there’s no halo’s light on me
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Hey Tom,
I always enjoy listening to your songs for sure. I like the vocals a lot, a nice edgy vibe with lyrics to match. Acoustic guitar a nice background, but would love to hear this song with a full production--you have a Melencamp vibe going IMO. Lyrically, I like the verses & chorus as stand alone, but maybe either more story could support/connect the title/chorus theme better. (Do you want the meaning in the chorus line to be "you will see" future tense? If not, just say "you see)."
It sounds to me like your are saying, that she is breaking your heart in vs 1, but then you express in the chorus that "you,re" no angel either, and reiterate it in vs 2. But then in vs 3, it goes back to her being the dishonest one in the relationship--so maybe they "deserve" each other? At least that is what my first impression I am ascertaining. Given the chorus lyrics as written as you being no angel, it would seem to me that she should contrast that behavior. If not, then perhaps have the 2nd chorus say: "You're no angel" which then the chorus would now represent both being no angel. Just an idea, and I'm perhaps making more out of the message than needed. Just a couple of ideas to ponder--keep/sweep/modify!
This is really a great start and a song with real potential Tom! No question you are a talent Tom--great write.
steady-eddie
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Hi, Tom,
First off, I like the sound, I like the lyrics. But the vocal really kills and carries this—really cool sound. An acoustic version this one, but I could hear it work equally as well with a full band behind it. That said, I think I would prefer this one of the two. Really, really great work, IronKnee. Loved it.
Post-script: As I was listening to this and writing the above feedback, Eddie's comments popped up before I posted. I'm going down a slippery hill, but it's the second time tonight I'm going to mildly disagree with Eddie. The third verse works fine for me. If I were to focus on anything, it would be the first two lines of the second verse and how they lead into the third line.
But that's getting way too analytical, IMO. For me, the melody, mood, vocal and overall performance--everything--just works for me here. I really wouldn't change much, if anything at all. Awesome listen!
Regards,
Deej
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Hi Tom. Not seen one of yours here for a while.
The lyrics have that "Tougher than the rest" feel to them.
Always liked your songs.
Vic
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Morning, Tom:
A really nice vibe to this one. No nits or suggestions 'cause you know whether or not it needs anything. No doubt in my mind, this one could chart if you get lucky enough to have somebody who has enough "stroke" in the music biz to promote it. Enjoyed your vocal, the lyric and your arrangement.
While I'm at it, Mele Kalikimaka!
All the best, ----Dave
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Hey Tom,
I always enjoy listening to your songs for sure. I like the vocals a lot, a nice edgy vibe with lyrics to match. Acoustic guitar a nice background, but would love to hear this song with a full production--you have a Melencamp vibe going IMO. Lyrically, I like the verses & chorus as stand alone, but maybe either more story could support/connect the title/chorus theme better. (Do you want the meaning in the chorus line to be "you will see" future tense? If not, just say "you see)."
It sounds to me like your are saying, that she is breaking your heart in vs 1, but then you express in the chorus that "you,re" no angel either, and reiterate it in vs 2. But then in vs 3, it goes back to her being the dishonest one in the relationship--so maybe they "deserve" each other? At least that is what my first impression I am ascertaining. Given the chorus lyrics as written as you being no angel, it would seem to me that she should contrast that behavior. If not, then perhaps have the 2nd chorus say: "You're no angel" which then the chorus would now represent both being no angel. Just an idea, and I'm perhaps making more out of the message than needed. Just a couple of ideas to ponder--keep/sweep/modify!
This is really a great start and a song with real potential Tom! No question you are a talent Tom--great write.
steady-eddie
Hey there Eddie....thanks for commenting!!......I think the hero of this lyric is just a guy who seems like a push-over....until you cross him, that is! I think he just has a liking towards the wrong kind of women ;-) And yea........I hear a bigger and more electric version, as well ;-) Thanks, again -Tom
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Hi, Tom,
First off, I like the sound, I like the lyrics. But the vocal really kills and carries this—really cool sound. An acoustic version this one, but I could hear it work equally as well with a full band behind it. That said, I think I would prefer this one of the two. Really, really great work, IronKnee. Loved it.
Post-script: As I was listening to this and writing the above feedback, Eddie's comments popped up before I posted. I'm going down a slippery hill, but it's the second time tonight I'm going to mildly disagree with Eddie. The third verse works fine for me. If I were to focus on anything, it would be the first two lines of the second verse and how they lead into the third line.
But that's getting way too analytical, IMO. For me, the melody, mood, vocal and overall performance--everything--just works for me here. I really wouldn't change much, if anything at all. Awesome listen!
Regards,
Deej Thanks, Deej...........glad you like it. The lyric makes sense to me, but I guess I'm a bit close to the write. I thought they were pretty simple and straight forward. One can never tell ;-) Thanks for the comments. -Tom
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Hi Tom. Not seen one of yours here for a while.
The lyrics have that "Tougher than the rest" feel to them.
Always liked your songs.
Vic Thank you, Vic ;-)
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Morning, Tom:
A really nice vibe to this one. No nits or suggestions 'cause you know whether or not it needs anything. No doubt in my mind, this one could chart if you get lucky enough to have somebody who has enough "stroke" in the music biz to promote it. Enjoyed your vocal, the lyric and your arrangement.
While I'm at it, Mele Kalikimaka!
All the best, ----Dave Hi Dave.....Don't know anyone with stroke........but, I'm sure glad you like it! Thanks for commenting!! -Tom
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Hi Tom, I have always enjoyed your work and THIS one is no exception....WOW, it's so nice. Calvin http://www.soundclick.com/bands/0/calvinstewart
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TOM! My friend, I was missing you!!
Thrilled to hear you singing again, this song reminds me of some of your older songs that I'm a huge fan of, love the vocal, it is perfect for this. I really liked the simple, raw feel of it (production wise) and loved a few of the lines like:
To every painted-up face selling romance
I have not walked the road less traveled
And there’s no halo’s light on me
So nice to be listening to you again....
Tammy
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Still sounding great, Tom! Cool, edgy lyric...sounds like a bad girl has met her match!  I'm the first to say less is more and love the feel of the acoustic version but yeah, I can hear it louder, bluesier and darker too. Rock on! Ricki
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Always nice to hear from you Calvin......thanks!!! TOM! My friend, I was missing you!!
Thrilled to hear you singing again, this song reminds me of some of your older songs that I'm a huge fan of, love the vocal, it is perfect for this. I really liked the simple, raw feel of it (production wise) and loved a few of the lines like:
To every painted-up face selling romance
I have not walked the road less traveled
And there’s no halo’s light on me
So nice to be listening to you again....
Tammy Hi Tammy.....nice to hear from you. I missed you. I see you have a song posted....I am going to listen tonight! Thanks soon much for listening.....;-) Still sounding great, Tom! Cool, edgy lyric...sounds like a bad girl has met her match! I'm the first to say less is more and love the feel of the acoustic version but yeah, I can hear it louder, bluesier and darker too. Rock on! Ricki Thanks Ricki........You've got a dandy of a song yourself!! Thanks for stopping by....your presence always appreciated.....;-) And thanks to all who have listened!! -Tom
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Hi Tom
Heard this and meant to get back to leaving a comment
It's good in fact excellent all round
Cheers
Travis
We are all in the gutter, but some of us are looking at the stars. Oscar Wilde
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Hi Tom
Heard this and meant to get back to leaving a comment
It's good in fact excellent all round
Cheers
Travis Thanks Travis..........I appreciate the comments!! And thanks to all who have listened. -Tom
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Fantastic song but i knew it would be.i always liked what you shared.I really dig that second verse,killer lyrics all around and a nice performance. Mike
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Fantastic song but i knew it would be.i always liked what you shared.I really dig that second verse,killer lyrics all around and a nice performance. Mike Nice to hear from you Michale......and so glad you like it!! And many thanks to all who have listened! -Tom
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Hi Tom, Kind of a sweet "Walking On Heaven's Door" vibe, musically, and the lyric is kind of unique to me; kind of outlaw-ish, but poetically so, with those brutally beautiful opening lines, and I love "I'm of flesh and blood" --saying it that way makes it reverberate through time back centuries..love it.. NIce passionate vocal brings home the lyric. Great work! Mike
Last edited by Michael Zaneski; 12/07/17 01:39 PM.
Fate doesn't hang on a wrong or right choice
Fortune depends on the tone of your voice
-The Divine Comedy (Neil Hannon)
from the song "Songs of Love"
from the album "Casanova" (1996)
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Hi Tom, Kind of a sweet "Walking On Heaven's Door" vibe, musically, and the lyric is kind of unique to me; kind of outlaw-ish, but poetically so, with those brutally beautiful opening lines, and I love "I'm of flesh and blood" --saying it that way makes it reverberate through time back centuries..love it.. NIce passionate vocal brings home the lyric. Great work! Mike Thanks Mike. I appreciate the support. ;-) -Tom
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