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Back in college, I was running up against a deadline in my Creative Writing class--I needed to come up with four poems by the next day. Well, I was bone dry come the last one, so I took a cassette tape off my roommate's desk and started writing down the titles to the songs listed thereon. From them, I came up with something like what follows. I say "something like" because I lost the original poem years and years ago. The below is a combination of what I could resurrect from memory, though with added lines, it's much different than what it was.
Yet it still retains some of the "borrowed" song titles from my roommate's cassette tape. Bonus points for those that can name the two bands on the tape!
INSURRECTION
The roof is leaking: drops slip through the cracks and splatter resoundingly upon the cold stone floor; scant moonlight peers through a shattered window— they glisten with an unnatural beauty as they fall.
I am still in darkness— sweating, chilled and shaking— counting the seconds between drops, knowing a harsher sound waits to split the silence, and wonder why.
Beyond the walls they are gathering again once more to bomb, barrage and break, while here in the city true life heroes march on; their shadows steal beneath the windowsill, past the crumbled blocks and burned homes, their footsteps and whispers echo softly over ash and dust— a single beast moving forward to fight and yet defy.
But I am not moving; I do not care anymore. There is blood on the rooftops.
(c) 2014 DJ Lekich
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Hey Dee, this is so cool...we did this on a writing forum. took everyones title to poem and lined it out. way cool stuff, never know what you`ll come up with just try it here! =================== i wish there was a way opinions needed many years ago homeless on christmas...and found Jesus My tom petty Tribute.
A tumbleweed christmas daily distractions.... called my own phone and left a lyric.......lol
Genesis...I think this is one...
"Blessed are the words of truth and fiction, one might save you from the other...Vincent
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Thanks, Lane. You nailed Genesis; the first and last three lines and I think one or two more sprinkled in the rest. The second band is a bit harder. I think the song titles were more prominent in the original version, which, as I said, I can't quite resurrect. One that I think remains is "In the City"; not sure what else survived recollection--maybe not much, so a harder call.
At any rate, thanks for chiming in!
Deej
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Those last three lines just smacked me down and took my breath away. I love how this was written (other than the song bits), I mean, if those lines took you here, then it is amazing. I think this is so deep, sad, pensive....I am just caught up in it.
Tammy
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Thanks, Tammy for the kind words. Glad you enjoyed it. As I mentioned, it's very different from the original piece (which was written maybe 20 plus years ago). But for maybe the first and last three lines, it's essentially re-written, and has (I think) a bit more imagery than the original. I'm happy you liked it.
BTW, the band on the other side of the cassette was The Eagles.
All the best,
Deej
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Thanks kindly, Barry. Glad you enjoyed it!
All the best,
Deej
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So, from what I gather, we could call this (no "irreverrection" intended) "The Resurrection of Insurrection," eh? Good stuff, fer shure. Enjoyed the read. (I hate to try and replicate something that disappears, if I think I nailed it. It's like it'll never measure up. lol)
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Frank,
Thanks for stopping in and for the kind words. "The Resurrection of Insurrection"--very clever! To be honest, there's not much left of the original I don't think, so it's less a replication than an alternative version, and I'm pretty sure this is the better of the two. But as I can't recall the original, I guess I'll never know! Appreciate the comments.
Regards,
Deej
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