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#1132105 - 11/05/17 02:25 PM Pennies From Heaven (take #2)  
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Here is take #2 of my new song.

I raised the pitch up 1 whole step, fixed a few errors and brought the vocal up.

I moved take #1 to the bottom of the post, in case you still want to hear it.
Thanks to everyone who helped me, with all of the good feedback.


Click here to listen to - Pennies From Heaven (Take #2)


Pennies from heaven - by Paul Churchfield

Intro


(Verse 1)

So many problems, I don't know what to do

What I wouldn't give for just one minute with you

I'm not good at asking for help, I know that you know

I figure it out for myself, it's just how I roll


(Chorus)

I got the penny today that you sent me

It's here in a jar, with all the rest

Of the pennies from heaven that you send me

When I'm feeling down

A penny to let me know your around


(Verse 2)

I am my music and through music I speak

A song can restore my soul when I'm feeling weak

That's what you gave to me, when I was a child

I carry it with me now, through all of my trials


- repeat chorus -

- repeat chorus , rit*


CopyRight (c) 2017 Paul Churchfield - All Rights Reserved



Click here to listen to - Pennies From Heaven (Take #1)

#1132109 - 11/05/17 03:37 PM Re: Pennies From Heaven [Re: Paul Churchfield]  
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Hi Paul:

This is very nicely written - short and simple verses that get the point across instantly.

I like the chorus too - some mystery there.

Melody works well with the lyric - maybe bring up the vocal in the mix a touch.....

I had a similar one once - only it was a four leaf clover. Yours is much better smile

Scott

#1132121 - 11/05/17 05:13 PM Re: Pennies From Heaven [Re: Paul Churchfield]  
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Thank you Scott. I appreciate you taking the time to listen and give feedback. I did this in one sitting with no edits, so I'm not surprised about the mix. I usually start my tunes out with piano, cuz its easier to keep quiet, without waking my family, as I work in the wee hours of morning. I will probably try a guitar arrangement and take more time on the production. Thanks again, Paul

#1132140 - 11/06/17 01:08 AM Re: Pennies From Heaven [Re: Paul Churchfield]  
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There's a gentleness and honesty to this that is really appealing. If you can, try to remove the plosives on your microphone recording by using a screen or filter - just because it distracts from your beautiful song.

#1132144 - 11/06/17 08:32 AM Re: Pennies From Heaven [Re: Paul Churchfield]  
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Thanks RainyDayMan, I will keep that in mind on my next recording. I appreciate the feedback.

#1132174 - 11/06/17 03:57 PM Re: Pennies From Heaven [Re: Paul Churchfield]  
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Hello Paul,


Always nice to see you, and with such a cool tune too.
I agree with Scott, let us hear your soothing voice a little bit more.
Thanks for sharing what you do.


Calvin


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#1132182 - 11/06/17 09:03 PM Re: Pennies From Heaven [Re: Paul Churchfield]  
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Hello Paul, Don't believe we've met so to speak. I like the gentle feel of this. The vocals are clear and easy to hear and the story is good. My only "NIT" and it isn't a biggie is that I heard the chorus coming in louder in my head. As is I wonder that since it is very much like your verses, musically, it might be lost. IMO.

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#1132183 - 11/06/17 09:19 PM Re: Pennies From Heaven [Re: Paul Churchfield]  
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So that's where all that copper comes from! grin Sweet sentiment, Paul. Good to hear you posting something new.

Ricki

#1132192 - 11/07/17 08:42 AM Re: Pennies From Heaven [Re: Paul Churchfield]  
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Douglas, Thanks for the feedback. I will keep your comment on dynamics in mind. The production is a whole 'nother challenge for me to tackle. This take was just the idea catcher.

#1132193 - 11/07/17 08:43 AM Re: Pennies From Heaven [Re: Paul Churchfield]  
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Ricki, Thanks for listening. Stay tuned for a possible guitar version.

#1132196 - 11/07/17 10:17 AM Re: Pennies From Heaven [Re: Paul Churchfield]  
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Hi Paul,

Beautiful simple melody, and the piano is perfect for this song. You have some good sugs above for sure. I had a small sug and NOT a nit, should you take it back into production. On your 2nd vs ending, sing up on -- "through all of my trials)" with your vocal that 2nd time around which will give you more of a crescendo and "build" launching the following chorus this time around. A small thing but would enhance the emotion IMO.

Lovely song, enjoyed it!

steady-eddie

#1132199 - 11/07/17 12:44 PM Re: Pennies From Heaven [Re: Paul Churchfield]  
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Eddie, Thanks for taking the time to listen and comment. I will keep your advice in mind.

#1132206 - 11/07/17 08:05 PM Re: Pennies From Heaven [Re: Paul Churchfield]  
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Well, then you captured it. Now you gotta tame it. smile

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#1132224 - 11/07/17 11:04 PM Re: Pennies From Heaven [Re: Paul Churchfield]  
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Beautifully written and performed, Paul.
"one sitting with no edits"...... well done Sir.


"Dig my imaginary...... Baaand Maaan"
#1132229 - 11/08/17 08:35 AM Re: Pennies From Heaven [Re: Paul Churchfield]  
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Thank you Nelson. I played it through many times before recording it. I even tried multi-tracking it. But something got lost. For brand new songs, I always find that one take captures the idea best. I will produce it soon. But for now I need to let it marinade in my brain, so I can hear what's missing and what is working.

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Thanks again Douglas. Soon, I hope.


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