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Mutlu
by Gary E. Andrews - 04/15/24 07:08 PM
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Leafs
by Gary E. Andrews - 04/05/24 01:49 PM
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This was done after meeting an old friend in a pub who had lost his wife to illness. He told a sad tale of not being able to live in the same house or town so sold it all and came back to his childhood home. https://www.soundclick.com/html5/v3/player.cfm?type=single&songid=13447221&q=hiMAKE ME AN OFFER Verse 1 I'm holding a yard sale Trying to let go Of 30 years of dust, For one must Move on, Or so I'm told, Move on Let go It's been a year now Since you went away So in a torn vinyl chair, in cool morning air I sit here today And say Move on, Let go **************** Chorus 1 Make me an Offer for these rings of gold That I can no longer bear to hold Make me an Offer For this empty home I can no longer live here alone **************** Verse 2 This was our life laid out here in the morning sun I still hear Echos of laughter where children used to run But they moved on, they moved on The Vultures in volvos and old pickup trucks browse carelessly asking me Will you take a buck Chuck this memory so you can Move on, ****************** Chorus 2 Make me an Offer for these empty arms They can no longer. Keep you warm Make me an Offer For this empty heart cuz I know someday, someday It will tear me apart.
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This was a really cool listen for me man, glad I got to hear it. The sound made me feel like 1976. Smooth vocals, smooth melody, definitely not too "clean" and I hate clean. Harmony was nice and not crowded. Sad, sad freaking story but related well: "This was our life laid out, here in the morning sun".
Thanks, will listen to it again.
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Thanks for the comment Jon.
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Hi Glenn:
Glad I listened. "Make Me an Offer" reminds me of the fate awaiting all of us... regardless of who goes first. You have some really good lines in this sad topic song but I reacted to "Vultures in Volvos" most. Thanks for sharing and causing some serious thought. Well done. ----Dave
Last edited by Dave Rice; 10/28/17 02:13 PM.
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I agree with Dave good song, and well written, really liked the music and vocals in this. Lane
"Blessed are the words of truth and fiction, one might save you from the other...Vincent
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Thanks very much guys. Glad you enjoyed it.
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Sad story, well told, Glenn. I liked your singing style and the stripped down feel, the starkness of it going straight to the heart. The only nit I have is with the narrator addressing first the missing spouse, then the general public, then both in the same chorus. I'd say pick one or the other, for me it would be the latter, but that's just me. Well done. Ricki
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Good point thanks Ricki. I do that a lot.
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Damn it Glen… This one’s a real stunner, man. It’s such a wonderfully touching write and a devastatingly heart wrenching performance.
Love the musical arrangement and as always your vocal performance leaves me speechless. You have the kind of expressiveness that brings the house down, leaving the audience dumb struck.
An inspiring piece of work
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Glen--
This one drives home a personal vibe that could be in each of us!
A fine song!
Mackie
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Glen,
I really enjoyed this song--great conceptual story and nice melody, good performance. Your vocals remind me a bit of Joe Walsh, have you ever been told that?
Not sure if you are open to crits, but I'll hand out a "minor" grammar sug. Since this song is pretty much all in past tense, I would recommend vs 1 saying "since you've gone away" keeping it past tense; and in vs 2, keep it saying "used to run," -- as is, it's present tense. Not a big deal, but it can be noticed, which can disconcert/ and since we're not talking slang, consider using the proper grammar, which helps the natural story flow better -- IMO. If not willing to take back into production--not a big deal, but food for thought.
Enjoyed your gritty vocals--nice job!
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Glenn, I really enjoyed this song. Lots of great furniture used. Well done. Great guitar work. Your voice sounds like Joe Walsh. Nice job!
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Glenn,
Love your voice on this one; and the raw live and vibrant sound of this tune. Some nice specifics throughout the lyrics that resonate. If I had a top twenty list of tunes I’ve heard on JPF since I've joined (and it would be a tough list), this one is well in the running and more. Are you a performer? If this song is any indication, you’re killer live.
Regards,
Deej
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Alright,Glenn!Some great lines on this one.As always,i like your vocals and a nice delivery.
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