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#1131522 - 10/19/17 02:36 PM Whats been done to Me  
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ok its back...changed platform.

I wrote the lyric and melody, Mike Zaneski sings and finished this. He always does a super job.Thanks Mike!

https://www.soundclick.com/html5/v3/player.cfm?type=single&songid=13645725&q=hi&newref=1


Whats been done to Me


Just a little message, I`m am writing to you
I stopped by and bought a flower too.
here in this note let me tell you the truth
I`ve been loved..so I thought I`d tell you....

Chorus

This woman
I thought I`d never see..

A woman
waiting for me..a voice
in perfect harmony...
and You won`t believe ..whats been done to me.

V2
Had a little heartache..but thats nothing new,
a little behind.. a little to soon.
I stepped back and out of the rain....
I`ve been loved..and I`ve loved the same..
and here, and now..

Chorus
This woman
I thought I`d never see..
A woman
waiting for me..a voice
in perfect harmony...
and You won`t believe.. whats been done to me.

bridge:
we love and we lose
we bury the blues and move on...
a matter of pride
I had to step aside ..and find...

Chorus
This woman
I thought I`d never see..
This woman
waiting for me..a voice
in perfect harmony...
and You won`t believe ..whats been done to me.

...You won`t believe ..what She,s done to me...

Copyright 2017 Vincent. All Rights Reserved.

Last edited by lane1777; 10/22/17 10:10 AM.

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#1131523 - 10/19/17 04:21 PM Re: Whats been done to Me [Re: lane1777]  
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WOW - Good work guys,

Loved it all, especially the bridge........

Mike seems to turn every song into a # 1 hit !


Calvin


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#1131525 - 10/19/17 06:04 PM Re: Whats been done to Me [Re: lane1777]  
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Great stuff! I really loved the harmonies.

#1131599 - 10/22/17 09:04 PM Re: Whats been done to Me [Re: lane1777]  
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thanks Calvin for giving this a listen and the comment

you too Gavin...thanks for taking the time to listen and comment. Lane


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#1131635 - 10/24/17 04:24 AM Re: Whats been done to Me [Re: lane1777]  
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I didn't know you'd gone country, sounds great and nice job on the lyrics The chorus melody is really strong,.You're one of the strongest hook writers I've heard on JPF. The only nit I have is it's a little confusing with the flower and note (which are great images for this song) and the friend. But I see you're trying to set up the chorus and let us know your singing about her, not to her, anyway it has an innocent, mysterious, and sweet quality which is one of your strengths as a wrier. I'm a fan.....Pete

#1131645 - 10/24/17 09:24 AM Re: Whats been done to Me [Re: lane1777]  
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This sounds great and is really nicely done but I'm not sure I understand the story. It sounds like this guy is writing a note and bringing flowers to his old lover, to let her know that he had loved her once but been hurt so he moved on and has now found love again with someone else? Is that right? If so, good, then I got it. If not, can you clarify it for me?

Ricki

#1131655 - 10/24/17 03:56 PM Re: Whats been done to Me [Re: lane1777]  
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thanks Pete for the kind words, and taking time to listen and comment. I swear Pete I have to stop writing like people are thinking what I`m thinking..like their right there in my head...lol Lane


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#1131656 - 10/24/17 04:31 PM Re: Whats been done to Me [Re: lane1777]  
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Hi Ricki,
thanks for coming by and listening, and taking time to comment. let me see if I can explain...

got in to my car..wrote a note to my girl..stopped and bought a flower too, stopped by and left the note at her work.... and then in the note I wanted to tell my girl..about this woman,, [her] and what she has done to me.people might not know its Her..that part is in my head not on paper..... Thanks again Ricki for giving this a listen.

Lane


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#1131659 - 10/24/17 05:07 PM Re: Whats been done to Me [Re: lane1777]  
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Hi Lane and Mike:

Listening as I write. The Harmonies really bring this song to the top of the stack for me. Well written, well produced and well sung. Congratulations, guys.

Well done, as always. ----Dave

#1131662 - 10/24/17 07:31 PM Re: Whats been done to Me [Re: lane1777]  
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OK Lane...so it's all about the same woman? Then the bridge is about something that happened to him before he found this woman?

#1131663 - 10/24/17 08:24 PM Re: Whats been done to Me [Re: lane1777]  
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yes, just kinda freewheeling in the bridge,a past love, past life..the blues ..hard to swallow sometimes. But we have to move on..

Lane thanks Ricki for the interest. hope all is good in your world..


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#1131664 - 10/24/17 08:33 PM Re: Whats been done to Me [Re: Dave Rice]  
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thanks Dave for coming by and commenting, Mike is always outstanding with the songs I give to him..and the great vocals of his..but you know that. thanks again Dave for stopping in. Lane


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#1131669 - 10/25/17 02:11 AM Re: Whats been done to Me [Re: lane1777]  
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Calvin, Gavin, Pete, Ricki, and Dave..

Thanks, kind folks. Pete, I agree with "sweet, innocent, and mysterious" and I had read the lyric from a different perspective: that of the singer giving the note to a former girlfriend with whom the singer was now just friends with, but close enough friends to confide something that personal with. In fact, the song reads great like that, and I have been in that situation myself, so I fell into that reading easily.

Only problem, is, that's not what Lane intended!

Lane, if you like, I think we can make your intention clearer with a couple "you"s thrown in at strategic times, like late in the bridge:

we love and we lose
we bury the blues and move on...
a matter of pride
I had to step aside ..and find... YOU..(long held note)

That should be enough..Plus..that's where most twists in songs happen, and anyone who wasn't "getting" that the woman receiving the note was "this woman" that he's singing about will have a happy "end-of-bridge surprise," LOL..

Anyway Lane, I'll email you and we'll talk about it..

Thanks again, folks. smile

Mike

Last edited by Michael Zaneski; 10/25/17 11:36 AM.

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#1131673 - 10/25/17 08:46 AM Re: Whats been done to Me [Re: lane1777]  
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Mike. You're the harmony king.
Lane. Your lyrics are always interesting and original.

Good job on this you two.

Vic


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#1131680 - 10/25/17 09:29 AM Re: Whats been done to Me [Re: lane1777]  
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Sometimes it just takes that one special person to come along to get you feeling grounded. This is what this song is all about. One of my favorites with the right mix of traditional and modern country. Should be a success.

#1131681 - 10/25/17 09:33 AM Re: Whats been done to Me [Re: lane1777]  
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Yes,a great job guys!I really enjoyed this one. Mike

#1131686 - 10/25/17 11:00 AM Re: Whats been done to Me [Re: lane1777]  
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Hi Vic..Mike is one of the best, thanks so much for taking the time to give this a listen and commenting..Lane

Hey beechnut...me too, I like it when there is a little happy in the song...all ends well. thanks for taking time to comment. Lane

Hi Mike..glad you enjoyed the song, gave it to a few friends and its one of their favs..thanks Mike for coming by and giving this a listen. Lane


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#1131688 - 10/25/17 11:18 AM Re: Whats been done to Me [Re: lane1777]  
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Howdy guys!

Loved everything about the song--nice work all. I listened to the bridge a couple of times Mike, one sug (not nit) for me, I thought the pre-bridge music could build a little more like a stacking crescendo effect along with percussion supporting a bit more. Maybe even add a measure of music there for build to enhance the dynamics of the bridge. It's fine as is, just a thought you could make it more of a climactic with a stronger build at that important juncture.

Loved this one Lane, nice production Michael!

steady-eddie

#1131756 - 10/26/17 09:27 PM Re: Whats been done to Me [Re: lane1777]  
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Eddie, Beechnut, Michael, Vic..

Thanks guys. I love bringing Lane's songs to life. They come from the heart and capture the human condition in all it's imperfect perfection. I am grateful to be a part of his process..

Eddie, thanks for the sugs, though I'm pretty sure we won't be adding anything more at this point.

Mike

Last edited by Michael Zaneski; 10/26/17 09:28 PM.

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#1131771 - 10/26/17 11:17 PM Re: Whats been done to Me [Re: lane1777]  
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sorry Eddie, I missed you...thanks so much for the kind words and giving this a listen.....Lane


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