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#1131601 - 10/22/17 11:22 PM Tired Wings  
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https://soundcloud.com/m_glenn_m/tired-wings

This is a compilation of random conversations and events tied together for the sake of a song.
Here in BC, Canada we have a lot of marriages just hanging together or worse due to difficult work arrangements.
EG women with kids and a local job and a mate working far away and returning sometimes only every few weeks.
This song tries to get to the discontent of that arrangement.

I hope you like it.
Very simple structure, a guitar, bass and vocal at this point

I don't care who sold the house
Your realtor or mine
But now we both can fly away.
And let our tired wings unwind

They move in this evening
So we really must be done
Susan says she'll take the cat
she thinks it might be fun

Chorus 1
Tell Leana daddy loves her
but my flight is not until 9
Yes I know I'm late again
On tired wings I'm flying

John agreed to keep the kayak
Until you find a home
Joseph said he'd take the dog
so it won't be left alone

Can you get the photos
from our little yellow box
Only you can do this
I noticed it's always locked

Chorus 2
Tell Leana daddy loves her
and that everything is fine
We were always here and there
on tired wings of time

#1131615 - 10/23/17 12:28 PM Re: Tired Wings [Re: M_Glenn_M]  
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I think music and the mood match...maybe have a bit more contrast between the verse and chorus.
Not a biggy...I have seen this sad series of events , as you say, too often.


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#1131629 - 10/23/17 06:05 PM Re: Tired Wings [Re: Neil Cotton]  
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Loved the vocal, (and your harmony) The music was good but it seemed like there was some processing on the guitar I didn't care for.
I DO think the verse lyrics could be upgraded as they don't seem to be on the same emotional level as the chorus.
A suggestion for the last chorus:

Tell Leana daddy loves her
And that everything is fine
I will always get there
Long as tired wings can fly

#1131630 - 10/23/17 06:32 PM Re: Tired Wings [Re: M_Glenn_M]  
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Beautifully simple. I don't think you need to up the intensity in the chorus. The matter-of-fact, get-through-the-day detail is exactly how most of us deal with the most important things going on in our lives and your words capture that really well. There's a controlled desperation here that is moving because most of us know it well in some form or other. Keeping the emotion in check actually adds to its impact on the listener.

At least, that's how I see it. I really enjoyed listening to this.

#1131667 - 10/24/17 10:49 PM Re: Tired Wings [Re: M_Glenn_M]  
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Hi M_G_M:

I don't believe I've heard your songs before tonight. It is a sad subject and I think you told the story well. The simplicity of the production is good and the harmonies work just fine. I am "on the fence" about the control of emotions... but they can certainly be used to "sell the song" to your audience. I hope you'll continue to "explore" other versions of the song and, if there is a way to add more orchestration here and there... it might lead to more audience appeal. Thanks for sharing it with us and best wishes for musical success.

----Dave

#1131682 - 10/25/17 09:37 AM Re: Tired Wings [Re: M_Glenn_M]  
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Nice vocals Glenn,i really liked the story line and glad it wasn't a downer tune even though it was a breakup song. Mike

#1131692 - 10/25/17 11:31 AM Re: Tired Wings [Re: M_Glenn_M]  
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Glenn,

I really enjoyed this tune--cool production. How did you get Joe Walsh to sing lead for you? How awesome! Loved the title by the way, getting a great title can really make a difference in just one's initial perception.

steady-eddie


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