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#1129443 - 07/31/17 07:00 PM Storytelling for Young Folks  
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These are stories I wrote for my children, copyrighted but never published or recorded. Maybe you'ns have stories to share. Please feel free to critique them I have my helmet on.

This first one is true. You'll have to decide for yourself if any of the others are or not.

My Dog Was Part Cat

It was hard to tell just what he was,
He was some of this and that.
But I swear to you my mangy mutt
Named Harvey was part cat.

I often took him hunting
In the woods behind my house,
He chased the squirrels and muskrats,
But would often eat a mouse.

He Played with string and other things
On which a Kitty thrives,
But what convinces me for sure,
Was the number of his lives!

Ten feet tall and bullet proof
Was how he saw himself,
The spirit of an elephant
In the body of an elf.

A strange dog in the neighborhood
Brought Harvey to attack!
The giant dog looked bigger still
With Harvey on his back!

His jaws clamped down on Harvey’s head!
And shook him like a shoe!
And dropped him limp and lifeless!
There was nothing I could do!

The giant dog walked out of sight,
As soon as he was gone,
Harvey did a victory dance
And acted like he’d won!

I nearly had a heart attack
The day he chased a cat,
I heard the screeching tires
Of a car and that was that!

I saw the bumper hit his head,
And bounce him like a ball!
Not a single muscle twitched!
No sign of life at all!

The driver knelt and wept with me,
And then the cat drew near,
Harvey bolted after it!
And bit it on the rear!

He lost me on a hunting trip
By running far ahead.
A poacher shot him broadside
Then he left my dog for dead.

Harvey lay at death’s door
While I dug the buckshot out,
Then jumped straight up a’barkin!
He’s part cat, there is no doubt!

He jumped into deep water
Where a Raccoon took him down!
They’re known for their ability
To cause a dog to drown!

Bubbles hit the surface!
Followed by a coat of grey!
To my surprise the Raccoon
Was the one that died that day!

Harvey jumped out of the water!
And he shook and choked and wheezed!
And looking down from heaven
His cat ancestors were pleased!

The Barnyard Animals Took The Farm!
Perry Crawford 2004

The Barnyard Animals took the farm and said I have to go!
They threw me out of my own house into the driven snow!
The ducks, the horse, the hens, the cow,
The goose, the cat, the dog, the sow,
The Barnyard Animals took the Farm, Oh say it isn’t so!

The trouble came one Monday morn, when it was time to rise,
The animals kicked down my door and took me by surprise!
No paper from my faithful dog,
No bacon from the fatted hog,
The Barnyard Animals took the farm, I can’t believe my eyes!

The chickens piled up on the bed, the plow horse took my chair,
The bathtub filled with quacking ducks, I saw them swimming there!
The goose, the cat, the dog, the sow,
Are at the table eating now,
The Barnyard Animals took the farm, I swear this isn’t fair!
I tried to sneak into the barn, the only shelter I could find,
I did not see the Billy Goat that came up from behind!
He rammed me hard again and again
And knocked me into the manure bin,
The Barnyard Animals took the farm, I’m gonna lose my mind!

I crawled out of the sticky goo, into the donkey’s stall,
The manure odor reached his nose and made him bray and bawl!
He kicked me seven times or more
And knocked me through the hen house door!
The Barnyard Animals took the farm, I can’t take this at all!

I crashed into the chicken’s roost as feathers formed a cloud,
And settled on my sticky hide and made a feathered shroud.
I couldn’t breath, I couldn’t see,
They covered every inch of me!
The Barnyard Animals took the farm, I could cry out loud!
I pulled some feathers from my eyes out on the snowy grass,
I saw my own reflection in the tool shed window glass.
Then an idea came to mind,
I took a few things I could find,
The Barnyard Animals took the farm, I’m fighting back at last!

Farmers all around the world will tell you the same thing,
When it comes to Barnyard Rules the Rooster is the king!
A beak shaped from a yellow pail,
A feather duster for a tail,
The Barnyard Animals took the farm, revenge is what I bring!

The rubber glove upon my head looks like a Roosters crown,
Another hanging from my chin is painted reddish brown.
A regal strut and bloated chest,
My giant size should do the rest,
The Barnyard Animals took the farm, I’m gonna take ‘em down!
The sun was rising in the east when I burst in through the door!
The Barnyard Animals lay asleep and covered up the floor!
Believe me when I say to you
That I can Cock-a-Doodle Do
The Barnyard Animals took the farm, and now it’s mine once more!

Now I’m the ruler of my roost, and I am here to stay!
The undisputed Barnyard King until I pass away!
The ducks, the horse, the hens, the cow,
The goose, the cat, the dog, the sow,
The Barnyard Animals took the farm, now I am King today!

More to come if y'all reciprocate.

#1129482 - 08/02/17 12:56 AM Re: Storytelling for Young Folks [Re: Perry Neal Crawford]  
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Perry, the first poem I wrote--back some time when--was for my nephew. Maybe I'll post it closer to Halloween--as it's got that kind of vibe--but I mention that only because the folks we write for are our true inspiration.

"My Dog Was Part Cat" is a nice read. It has potential to be a charming young children’s poem, but I think there are opportunities to take it to the next level. The dog that thinks it’s a cat goes on some great adventures, but what’s the point of it all? There’s some nice verse and rhymes here, but a story encompassing some virtue would give this depth—i.e., what’s the moral or message here? I’d keep playing with this, as it’s a promising piece.

I like concept behind “Barnyards” a lot—though it might benefit form condensing some of the verses. I’m not sure I followed the finish—how the speaker ultimately prevailed—so maybe some focus on that.

But all that said, Perry, this is fun stuff for the young, and I can see kids eating this stuff up. You’ve got some natural talent and I look forward to reading more of your work.

All the best,


#1129488 - 08/02/17 12:55 PM Re: Storytelling for Young Folks [Re: Perry Neal Crawford]  
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My children would bring books from school/library and order stuff from the Weekly Reader". They were about teaching a value or moral, but were boring reads. I have a twisted sense of humor and I found that my stories brought that gene out in them too. I got a jolt of Daddy Pride when they asked me to read my stories to them instead of the alternatives. You are spot on about bringing the point of a story into better focus. There is a point to my dog story. Harvey was my own dog I had in my teen years. These adventures are true, and it was my mother that called him part cat. Harvey was home alone when our wall mounted air conditioner shorted out and burned the house. He died of smoke inhalation. The front page of our little home town newspaper bore the picture of my mother on her knees trying to give Harvey mouth to muzzle rescue breathing. Harvey was a bright light in a dark time in my life, and an indelible personality.

The farm story has the farmer suffering one calamity after another that gets him covered in barn excrement, then covered in feathers creating the unintended disguise as a rooster (with the added extras for crown and beak. He then regains control of the animals by being the biggest rooster ever and king of the farm. I was going to write a simple children's melody and make a song of it, but it needs more work as you point out.

Yack Back

#1130657 - 09/14/17 04:26 PM Re: Storytelling for Young Folks [Re: Perry Neal Crawford]  
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For tickles and giggles, laughs and gaffes.....


Grandma needed glasses
And it wasn’t hard to tell,
We watched her pour the garbage bucket
Down the well!

Sitting on the night stand
Was the wig she used to wear,
Now she had a rag mop
On her noggin top for hair!

We heard her in the kitchen
When she rang the breakfast bell,
Everyone awakened asking
What’s that smell?

Oven mitten pancakes
Are impossible to chew,
Adding extra syrup
Was the best that we could do.

She rode out on the freeway
Hauling things she hoped to sell,
The other drivers honked or stopped to
Point and yell!

She shook her fist in fury!
Told them all to take a hike!
And screamed “Get off the sidewalk”
From her three wheeled bike.

Grandma got arrested
When the load came loose and fell,
They let her make a phone call to me
From her cell.

But we no longer worry
‘Bout the fact that she cannot see,
She took off with a convict that she
Thought was me!

Everything is Falling Down

Everything is falling down!
It started right at noon!
The sun was first to go and then
It happened to the moon!

It happened to the clothes I wore
Now lying on the floor!
It happened to my favorite toys
All piled up by the door!

It happened to my breakfast bowl!
The milk and spoon and all!
It happened to a table lamp
While I was playing ball!

It happened to a bunch of stuff
All lined up on a shelf!
Together with the cookie jar
I saw them fall myself!

It happened to the laundry
That was hanging on the line!
Until the tree branch I was on
Fell down it was just fine!

It happened to the curtains
And it happened to the drapes!
While I was playing Tarzan
And was swinging with the apes!

It happened to my Mommy
And my skate board down the stairs!
She landed on my Daddy
Who was taken unawares!

They don’t understand me
As I’m trying to explain!
Everything is falling down!
So how am I to blame?

Sport Utopian Vehicle

My Sport Utopian Vehicle
Burns nary a drop of oil,
Its friendly to the environment
And pollutes neither air nor soil.

A wood appointed interior
With genuine leather seats,
And power anti-lock front disc brakes
Are some of it’s luxury treats.

The stereo has eight speakers
And it plays CDs by the stack,
It holds nearly half a ton of stuff
Inside and on overhead racks.

The windows are covered with tinted glass
Protecting my eyes from the sun,
And mounted behind the driver’s seat
Are racks for all of my guns.

It’s alloy wheels are 16 inch,
The tires have all-weather tread,
Cup holders cater to every seat
Which are high backed to cradle my head.

Converting my guzzling SUV
Was surprisingly easy for me,
My Sport Utopian Vehicle
Is the envy of all I see.

There’s one little drawback I have found
That persists and perplexes me still,
With the engine and transmission removed,
The thing only goes downhill !!

Smack the elbow of your writing arm on the corner of your desk and wake up your funnybone! We'll Hee and Haw till the cows come home!

"Another to the score makes the pleasure more." SHAKESPEAR

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