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Just finished this one. Arranged from a Travis lyric.
Thanks in advance for any comments.

https://soundcloud.com/vic-arnold/the-journey

http://soundclick.com/share.cfm?id=13609843

The Journey © 2017 John Vaughan & Vic Arnold
V
Hitch me a ride on two beers
and a carraige of memories
back to those days when we hung out,
just you and me
Our own favourite song kinda tagged on along
to it's destiny
as I keep holding on to the man I am trying to be
V
They all call me a singer of sad songs,
a blue troubador.
But I recognise that look in their eyes through the years
I sit on my stool, taking requests ...from the dance floor
and smile as they set sail ...on their journey of tears
Ch.
Inst.
And if they have any sense at all
they'll get off before journey's end
Cause just one more step and it's into free fall
and it's hard to come back again
Inst.
V
I wonder if sometimes we make that journey together.
Does she walk in my steps ...down familiar paths
sharing the dream, the same one I'll dream of forever
and wonder for how long ...this journey could last.
Ch.

hi Vic, went over and gave this a listen, really nice work. I always liked your vocals

Thank you Lane.
Some people tell me I mumble so that's good to hear.

Vic

Sadly being deaf even Heavy metal guys sound like they're mumbling
Of course they might well be and I got conned into buying these hearing aids.
Thank you for the listen Lane
Travis

Hi Vic and Travis:

Just listened and was glad I took the time. Mumble? Sez who? LOL! No, Vic... I continue to hear a vocal delivery that reminds me at times of Johnny Cash. Well done guys. Nice write, Travis. Enjoyed. ----Dave

Thanks once again Dave for your ears.
Regards
Travis

Hello guys,


Good job, thanks for sharing what you're doing.


Calvin


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Hi Calvin
Thank you for having a listen
Travis

Good job guys

Hi Dave.
Yeah! Can't understand what their talking about. :-)
Thanks for your continued support mmmblemmm ......

Vic

Thanks Calvin.
We like to share.

Vic

Thanks Neil your comments are appreciated
Travis

Hi Neil.
As john says, much appreciated.

Vic

Hey Vic hey Travis..

Very nicely done, both lyrically and musically.

I love 6/8 cuz there's so many things you can do rythmically that sound good.

Vic you're sounding really good on this. A little bit "detatched" which fits a lyric that has the singer musing/wondering about his job as a balladeer.

I stumbled for a second at REquests--that phrasing felt like trying to fit a square peg into a round hole to me, but that's the only thing I noticed that I might even think of changing (to perhaps "I sit on my tool, take reQUESTS..from the dance floor").

The last verse kinda functions like a bridge in that the theme shifts from the singer talking about his troubadouring to wondering about (probably) his significant other which is referred to briefly in V1. It's a nice lyrical wrap-around or bookend to a really well written whistful lyric.

Great work, guys!

Mike

Vic (and Travis)

Your songs are always so polished, really well produced, every note and instrument folding into and complementing each other. And I really like your vocals—an earthy, everyday man’s sound that resonates with depth. Mr. Rice comes pretty darn close with the J. Cash call. As for the alleged mumbling, don’t hear it in anything I’ve ever listened to from you. But , hey, “The Mumbling Song” might make for good song title.

Best regards,

Deej

Vic/Travis,

Great lyrics and story. I liked the music, performance, and production. Chorus lyrics/music do feel "Bridge-like" to me, but that's okay with this arrangement/vibe--all songs don't have to have a big lifting/hook chorus. Vic, nice production arrangement. I never thought about the Johnny Cash comparison--I can hear that too!

steady-eddie

Thank you Michael.
Yes, I like 6/8 too. Always makes me feel like prancing around.

Not sure about "REquests or reQUESTS", although I take your point. I thought about it and decided that I use both emphasis in conversation.
Maybe it's a personal thing or UK/US differential. The jury's still out. :-)

I also thought about the bridge thing while I was arranging it but maybe got a bit lost in the woods and made it a verse. I'll consult with Travis on it.

Thanks for your usual constructive comments.

Vic

Hi Deej.
Travis is choc full of song ideas. He keeps me on my toes.

Those are very kind comments. I'll think on a mumbling song as you suggest.
Maybe:
This old man lurched through his day from crisis to crisis, always stumbling.
He found it hard to keep his spirits high and stop his whole life from crumbling
His romantic episodes were looked upon as ten minutes fumbling
as he whispered in her ear, all she could hear was .... mumbling.

Vic

It's beautifully written, Travis.
Your vocal delivery is perfect, Vic and that Uke or Mandolin was a tasty touch through out.

Nicely done Guys.

I think the bridge ended up as part of a verse ?
when Vic had knocked it into shape
But again Mike I thank you together with Vics comments for your listen and feedback
Travis

Hey Eddie. Yes, you're probably right. Reminds me of that war film "A bridge too far". :-)
Thank you for the thumb's up.

Vic

I like this one a lot, Travis and Vic. The music and production suit the contemplative lyrics so well. It's a minor thing but you mention "you and me", like you're singing to someone in V1 then change to "she", and sing about someone in V3...it makes me wonder if you're talking about the same person? If so, why change the POV? I still enjoyed my listen. You make a good team.

Ricki

Hi Ed
Thanks once more for your support and comments
John

Thank you Nelson.
Glad we delivered for you.

Vic

Ha! You caught me out Ricki, you little devil, you. :-o

I didn't notice that. Maybe because I wrote it imagining he was saying it to his self.

Thank you for spotting it.

Vic

Thanks Nelson it was a shared lyric .
Pleased you liked this one
Travis

Thanks Ricki I think a WHOOPS is in order
Travis

Hey Travis and Vic,

I always know I'm in for a TREAT when I listen to a collab from you two and this is no exception!
It's a lovely, wistful song! Travis always weaves stories about these downtrodden characters who triumph, and Vic adds his own twists and turns to the saga and makes them come delightfully alive!
Off I go to listen again!

Lisa

Vic and Travis--

You have the magic touch together--Dancing to this one, I'd be a waltzin'!

Keep up the good work!

Mackie

Hi Lisa. Thanks and well put.

Vic

Nice track on this, felt very rich and I liked the rhythm of this, great collaboration and as always, that singer can sing the phone book and sound great....!!!

Tammy

Thanks Mackie. Never been much of a dancer myself but maybe I do in my head.

Vic

Hi Lisa
Where have you been!
Thanks for you nice comments about our latest escape.
Cheers
Travis

Tammy, as always I wait for your approval.
You have progressed so much in your own style.
Thank you. **

I left a comment on SC also.

Pretty tune. Enjoyed it.

Martin

Mackie thanks for your comments
Travis

Thank you Martin.
Encouragement is always appreciated.

Vic

Thanks Martin
Travis