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I wrote this earlier this year for a very special lady in my life, who was going through a tough time. Anything I said just seemed to make it worse and I felt powerless to help. It was written and recorded very quickly, and part of me wants to go back and polish it up and maybe add a backing vocal in the middle section. But another part says to leave it alone and simple is best. Any comments or suggestions much appreciated. By the way, Aoife is an Irish Gaelic name, pronounced "Eefa" - not that it really matters, as it isn't actually mentioned in the song At my website: http://mysteriousbeings.com/portfolio/aoifes-song/Or at SoundCloud: https://soundcloud.com/gavin-sinclair-5/song-for-my-daughter If there was a prize for talking I reckon I’d win by a mile I get invited to parties a lot Just to make people smile If you need a bloke to tell you a joke To make you a speech or gently to poke Fun at friends or maybe softly to stroke Their egos, then I’m your man But all of my words are useless Can’t help to pull you through I can’t take your troubles Reduce them to rubble Isn’t that what I’m meant to do? But if there was prize for loving you I’d bet all my money on me And I know that your heart knows this to be true Sometimes it lets me see. And I know that sometimes I get it all wrong I’m just so annoying or I go on too long So all that I have is this little song To say I love you so. Yes, all that I have is this little song To say I love you so. I love you so
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I really love the sentiment here and I think it's a brilliant idea for a song.
This sounds just fine but as someone who's always revisiting songs...... My first inclination is to say, "by all means take another stab at it."
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Another stab? Any idea at what parts I should direct the knife, Nelson? I'm a bit too close to it to see clearly.
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Another stab? Any idea at what parts I should direct the knife, Nelson? I'm a bit too close to it to see clearly. Nothing comes to mind Gavin. I was speaking more in general...... as one who's always willing to have another go at an older song, I always encourage folks to go for it. I think you did a mighty fine job here. .
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Gavin,
This is a warm, easy and endearing listen. Lyrically, it works from start to finish. Sure, you could you go back and do another version, add some back up vocal, some harmonies, maybe a bit more depth in the sound. And it may sound great, too. But as is, this works just fine for me. Really enjoyed my listen.
Best regards,
Deej
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Thanks Nelson and Deej. I wish I could add harmonies, but it's not something I've ever been good at. I'm not really a singer. I'm also a novice when it comes to mixing and mastering, so not really sure how to "add depth." It's something I'd like to be able to do a bit better, so any suggestions from more knowledgeable folks would be very welcome.
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Gavin--
Very nice sounds--If anything is done, increase the tempo slightly, and it will be easier to waltz to!
Mackie
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Thanks Mackie. I love 3/4 time and have actually done waltzes. I'm enjoying picturing you trying to waltz to this one. On the plus side, you could probably dance with a cup of coffee in your hand and drink it without spilling it.
Regardless of the production quality, this is a song that actually had an impact on someone. My daughter has an eating disorder and wound up in hospital at New Year. It's hard for someone who doesn't really understand the condition to know what to say, and usually I would say the wrong thing (and my wife and other daughter would give me an exasperated look). So I went home and wrote this, and I think in some small way it helped both of us.
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Very heartfelt. I enjoyed it.
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Beautiful song Gavin,
I think waltzes are fine this slow or even slower when just instrumental only. I agree with Mackie, increasing this song just 3 or 4 bpm would make a difference. With the 3/4 timing, it will let the singing of the lyrics flow more naturally. JMO, but like Nelson says, why not take another whack at it. I always try and experiment with tempo once I've established a key, just remember when you experiment with tempo, don't jump ahead too fast or slow or you'll say, "better where I have it"-- so take it slow either way. I've deliberated on just "one or two" BPM before. There truly is a "sweet-spot" with every song!
Nice work, I'm sure your wife was moved.
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How charming!
Your sense of humor is still there, but offset and disarrmed by the unabashed sweetness that permeates this lyric and vocal performance.
Nice work..
Mike
Fate doesn't hang on a wrong or right choice Fortune depends on the tone of your voice
-The Divine Comedy (Neil Hannon) from the song "Songs of Love" from the album "Casanova" (1996)
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Thanks for listening, Ant, Eddie and Mike, and for your kind words. This is a bit of a special song for me.
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