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#1129016 - 07/12/17 09:48 PM Everlasting  
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An English Sonnet for those I've loved and lost.

Everlasting

I dream of fireflies gliding ’round your face
and sunset clouds of every color known,
to grant you smiles while feeling Earth’s embrace
release you ever-softly toward the throne.

Death only stings the ones you’ve left behind
as you drift toward the glory of your King.
The sweetest light and joy is yours to find
among the stars where cherished angels sing.

Like ships becoming one with ocean’s flow
pure love will carry you with gentle peace.
No fear surrounds, no pain to ever know
this everlasting beauty will not cease.

And though I miss your presence here with me ...
I celebrate this moment that you see.

~*~
© Christine Ledford


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#1129030 - 07/13/17 11:45 AM Re: Everlasting [Re: Christine Ledford]  
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always I wish them back, and there is a certain peace we get with these thoughts. Nice work Christine....and thank you for stopping and commenting on my write. Have a great day....

Last edited by lane1777; 07/13/17 11:46 AM.

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#1129055 - 07/15/17 01:38 AM Re: Everlasting [Re: Christine Ledford]  
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Great opening line—“I dream of fireflies”—very visual. Some nice lines throughout; I particularly like “death only stings the one’s you’ve left behind” and “everlasting beauty will not cease”. My only suggestion is to think about condensing your lines where possible—“I dream of fireflies around your face”; “death only stings the one’s left behind”; and perhaps delete the “this” and say more assertively that “everlasting beauty cannot cease.”

All just suggestions, Christine. As it is, a wonderful and heartfelt piece. Thanks for sharing.

Regards

Deej

#1129081 - 07/16/17 07:39 AM Re: Everlasting [Re: Christine Ledford]  
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Thank you very much, lane. I appreciate you taking time to read and comment. And yes, we always wish them back!

~

Thanks, Deej. You make a good point about condensing, but a sonnet must have 10 syllables and a set meter in each line, so condensing won't work with this structure. (Though I did break the rules by splitting 14 lines into stanzas. wink ) Still, it's something to think about if this were rewritten in a different form. I appreciate your thoughts on this!


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#1129093 - 07/16/17 02:31 PM Re: Everlasting [Re: Christine Ledford]  
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Beautiful.

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#1129116 - 07/17/17 09:41 PM Re: Everlasting [Re: Christine Ledford]  
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Christine,

Totally my bad--I missed reading your note ahead of the poem that it's a sonnet. But shame on me for not knowing regardless. Sure, it may be interesting to play with it in a different form, but as written it's very well done and I enjoyed reading it again. I promise to be more observant in the future (though won't promise that will make any of my comments any more intelligent smirk!)

All the best,

Deej


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