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Don't do that anymore
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Used to play in a band doing one night stands But i don't do that anymore REPEAT LAST LINE THROUGHOUT VERSES V One time liked a few beers but prices got too dear So i don't that anymore V I had women on each arm seems i've lost that charm Yep, i can't do that anymore B Even searched the net about my regrets Mainly advises me to get a life. Well that's OK by me. But try telling my darling wife V Used to work for myself Pressure wrecked my health I don't do that anymore V Last night i said to my wife should we try it twice? She said, you can't do that anymore
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YIKES and WOW Travis this is Great.. Good Work and SO TRUE....wish weren't though....lol Hope all is well with you....B
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Cheers Barry hope your health continues to keep on the up and up. Thanks for your comments
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We all gotta love to hear a bar song Travis!
A little cheer it's been deathly quiet here.
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no no no,i don't drink it no more!That's what Ringo said,lol.
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Travis--
There's something about firm feeling women and another one for the road!
Some die with a bottle in one hand and love in the other!
A little truth in this one!
Write on!
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Hi Travis
I really like this but it it did have a very familiar ring, then I realised how similar it was to ‘I Don't Do It No More’ by The Old Dogs (Waylon Jennings, Shel Silverstein et al) whose album was pretty big a few years back. Might be worth you checking it out.
I think it’s well worth working on as it would be a bit short as is. I’m not convinced by the bridge, maybe you could take a Seems I’m no longer in the game (But) In my mind I’m still the same kind of approach
Just some thoughts
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We are all in the gutter, but some of us are looking at the stars. Oscar Wilde
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Hi Nigel It does need a rewrite or 3 and I appreciate your comments on this Travis
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Travis,
What I really like about your lyrics is that they are so accessible and every day--very relatable and down to earth. Could the lyrics use some fine-tuning? Sure--what song doesn't? But it's a great start on a fun tune. Well done!
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now there is some humor .....lol this should make for a fun song, if I was married? I have Her sing that last verse....lol Lane
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