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#1127869 - 05/18/17 08:05 PM Forty Four Years Ago  
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I haven’t been here much, lately. Thought I would share a song I wrote and produced last week on what would have been my 44th wedding anniversary.

44 Years Ago

http://www.badbetsy.com/new_original/s/forty_four_years_ago


Forty Four Years Ago

Verse 1
44 years ago No one thought that we would last that long
We could always prove them wrong.
Cause we were in love

Verse 2
44 years ago we took a vow that we would never break
Through all those years and heartaches.
We stayed in love.

Chorus
We made each other laugh as we talked all night
We made each other cry but always apologized and said
I love you.

Solo

Chorus
Here I sit writing another song
Wishing you hadn’t gone away
I love you. I miss you. I need you.

Verse 3
44 years ago I had no idea how lucky I was
You stuck with me through all my fears and flaws
44 years ago today. 44 years ago today.

#1127889 - 05/20/17 07:27 AM Re: Forty Four Years Ago [Re: Iggy]  
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Good to see you back, Iggy. I can sense the emotion in this very personal message.

My only sugg is arrangement wise, maybe the chorus needs another look at to give it a little lift.

Vic


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#1127891 - 05/20/17 11:13 AM Re: Forty Four Years Ago [Re: Iggy]  
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Lovely song.

Martin

#1127937 - 05/22/17 01:47 PM Re: Forty Four Years Ago [Re: Iggy]  
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Thanks Vic for the welcome back. If I were going to do something commercially with this song, I definitely would use your advice in improving the dynamics of the chorus. But nah…. It was just written for therapy. Candy for my brain.

And…thank you Martin for the listen and the kind words. Very much appreciated.

#1127940 - 05/22/17 02:44 PM Re: Forty Four Years Ago [Re: Iggy]  
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Hi Iggy:

Poignant, sad, interesting and very personal. Loved the message and the song. It left me with a few questions... but that isn't a bad thing. Sometimes a song needs to make the listener think and compare. Thanks for sharing. ----Dave

#1127954 - 05/22/17 09:54 PM Re: Forty Four Years Ago [Re: Iggy]  
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Iggy-

Truth laid down in a personal song, sets upon a pedestal, waiting to be discovered by some one with the same story!

My love is now 55 years young and still counting--we married before the BEATLES came over--For some reason, it doesn't seem that long ago!

Dave is a few years ahead of me. TEXANS LOVE LONGER, probably because of those HOT, HOT, CHILI PEPPERS!

Iggy I love this song!

Write on!

Mackie

#1127957 - 05/22/17 11:58 PM Re: Forty Four Years Ago [Re: Iggy]  
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Iggy,

i really like the Piano work in this strong--very full sounding. The refrain of "44 years ago" gives the song some nice structure. And I really like the nice use of additive harmony on the “I love you” in the chorus. Very killer lead guitar to accentuate--wish I was good enough to play like that. On the lyrics--and maybe I'm missing something, but seemed to me a little inconsistent in spots--e.g., why “wishing you hadn’t gone” in the second chorus when the second and third verse say “we stayed in love” and “you stuck with me” respectively? Just a thought for you to take or leave as you may. But a fun listen and great little tune. Enjoyed it.

Best regards,

Deej

#1128003 - 05/24/17 03:08 PM Re: Forty Four Years Ago [Re: Iggy]  
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Mackie, thanks so much for the kind words and the listen. Wow 55 years! You’re right it doesn’t feel that long. God bless you!

Hi Dee J. My wife of 44 years (+3 years going together) passed away in late February. Our 44th wedding anniversary was May 12th. I was dreading that day coming knowing I’d be lost in my memories wondering what I should do. Get drunk? Go somewhere (all alone)? Well I guess the powers beyond me reached out to occupy my mind and keep me busy. I awoke at 3 AM, May 12th with this song. Instead of going back to sleep I lay there for a few hours and kept adding lyrics, hearing chords, etc. Six AM on my anniversary day, I started to lay down the tracks, lyrics and vocals. Thirty-six hours later I finished. I uploaded it to my site and fell asleep for twelve hours. God or my wife found a way to keep me busy.

I appreciate you taking the time to listen and respond. Thank you.

Last edited by Iggy; 05/24/17 03:10 PM.
#1128005 - 05/24/17 05:51 PM Re: Forty Four Years Ago [Re: Iggy]  
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My parents had you beat by 11 years. They were married 55 years before my dad passed. My mom passed about 3-1/2 years later. They had retired to Florida while I remained up here near Chicago, but I went down for a visit at the time of their 50th anniversary in 1990. At the time I told them that I didn't feel that there will be too many golden anniversaries celebrated among my generation or the younger ones for many different reasons including trending toward later marriage and increased volatility and changes in life in general.

#1128023 - 05/25/17 10:10 PM Re: Forty Four Years Ago [Re: Iggy]  
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Iggy,

Lovely song and sentiment. I always enjoy your melodies especially. I had a couple small sugs should you be interested in taking it back to production.

Always nice seeing you in the threads!

steady-eddie.

#1128027 - 05/26/17 07:48 AM Re: Forty Four Years Ago [Re: E Swartz]  
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Thanks Eddie,

I always respect and appreciate any suggestions you may have. Suggest away!

Thanks, too, for the listen and the kind comments.

#1128040 - 05/26/17 11:47 AM Re: Forty Four Years Ago [Re: Iggy]  
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Iggy,

I always dig your song's vibes. I've actually changed my first opinion on how the opening verse should launch. I went back and listened again and again. I feel that you initially on that first verse should start higher on the "44 years ago" to create kind of a "reverse build." For me after the intro, that opening line to me should be up (not sure of the note & may require chord change. -- (Analogy Beatles "Something in the Way)." This to me launches the more anticipated note with the music and will empower going down on the next "44 years ago."

I agree with Vic on the chorus, but also don't think this is a "chorus driven" song--the verse melody is really the dominant aspect--which is fine for this song -- but I'd like to see after the solo a little more (music launch or drum launch) to what your 2nd chorus--which to me is a "Bridge." Within that Bridge pan a dominant harmony to give it some more dynamic identity--this is kind of the climax of the song IMO. The other production sug would be to "strengthen the small percussion kick especially for enhancing "drive" and maybe add a little more snare presence as well. Hi-hat is fine. Use or lose!

I really like this song, nice work Iggy!

steady-eddie

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#1128064 - 05/27/17 01:49 PM Re: Forty Four Years Ago [Re: Iggy]  
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Hi Iggy,

I like this pretty much as it is, compositionally, though Eddie and Vic do present some cool and interesting ideas. smile

To me it's a slow burn kind of ELO ballad. If anything, my sug is to maybe (if you're feelin' it) try adding a contrapuntal melodic line that weaves in and out, between the vocals, in the latter part of the song, maybe starting with verse three, and keeping with the feel, maybe make it something like that string section playing with a crisp staccato instead of legato, and more prominently in the mix. The mix sounds like it could use a little brightening as well.

Beautiful song. smile

Mike

Last edited by Michael Zaneski; 05/27/17 06:07 PM.

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#1128105 - 05/30/17 02:52 PM Re: Forty Four Years Ago [Re: Iggy]  
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I like this a lot. I agree with Vic about the chorus, but it didn't spoil my appreciation. A simple, heartfelt message delivered with sincerity and a similarly simple (and good) production. Nothing not to like here.

#1128222 - 06/04/17 08:31 PM Re: Forty Four Years Ago [Re: Iggy]  
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Mike thanks for listening and replying. I delayed getting back to you because I had to look up the words contrapuntal and legato! The Beatles used contrapuntal melody lines numerous times so I’m really digging that idea. Something I’ve never done.

Thanks, also to Gavin. I really appreciate your time to listen and respond.


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