I Felt The Sun Upon My Face (My February 2017 Song)

I'm not sure where the lyric to this song came from, could be love gone wrong. Any way, It's written like it's a love song, but I think it's more about how I felt in the past about any thing that got my hopes up, only to have the rug pulled from under my feet. Being in the people business, it's not hard to have that happen more times than not. Or, it may be about 50% of the time, So it seems.

https://www.reverbnation.com/silverbeat/song/27588574-i-felt-the-sun-upon-my-face

Cheers,
Terry


Rock On!!!

You have your secrets
I have mine
There'll be no pain
If there's no Clues
If there's no heart break
We'll both be fine
We'll both be fine
If you so chose

I felt the sun upon my face
You said you thought you felt it to
I looked, and failed to see a trace
It's so dam hard to know what's true

If there's no reason
There's no heart
The way is lost
If there's no light
I watched the sun set
Right from the start
Right from the start
Day turned to night


Why
Tell me why you cried
did you lie, or did your love just die

Hi Terry,

Very retro sound you have here so, good, if that's what you're going for.

Lyrically, It's hard to follow. Without your explanation, I wouldn't have got that meaning out of the song. There are some random phrases, very cryptic, but not enough substance to hold onto. I like mystery in a song but without confusion and this leaves me feeling a little dumb. I think if you're good with being obscure then call this one done and move on to the next one. On the other hand, if you want the listener to fully understand your message, maybe a little more time in re-writing is the answer.

Either way, welcome to JPF and I hope you stick around and maybe share some of your thoughts and feedback on other songs. It's a give and take kind of place.

Ricki