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Mutlu
by Gary E. Andrews - 04/15/24 07:08 PM
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I know you bought me a house But that was in 2005 I know you bought me a car But that was in 2009 The house needs a roof And the car's worn out What've You Done For Me Lately? That's what I'm curious about
I know you raised my two kids And you weren't even their dad I know you kept me in money Bought all the clothes I had Now you tell me you're broke And you can't find a job What've You Done For Me Lately? You unemployable slob!
A girl thinks of herself When the going gets rough She makes some adjustments When a man can't produce
I know you bought me a house But that was in 2005 I know you bought me a car But that was in 2009 What've You Done For Me Lately? That's what I wanna know I can't think of anything So I'm gonna hit the road
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Last edited by Jim Colyer; 12/15/16 10:10 PM.
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Hey, Jim,
This is a nice effort. I think you are intending it with a bit of humor...I get it, but just be aware it may be taken the wrong way by some people. A couple of rhymes could be a problem, but depends on the track...2005/2009...and in the bit (bridge?) before the last verse, you seem to be rhyming "rough" with "produce"-?
Anyway, sounds like a good honky-tonk to me. Good luck.
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