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Here is our latest works in progress Scott and I are working on. Any feedback for music or lyrics would be greatly appreciated. Thanks as always, Roger http://www.soundclick.com/player/single_player.cfm?songid=13460297&q=hi&newref=121st Century Drama Queen Roger Sosnowski/Scott Miller Verse She has a run in her hose, got a pimple on her nose Black coffee stain on her blouse, lost her keys in the house All she wants to do is shout Her boyfriend looked at her strange, she missed her manicure today One Life to Live didn't record, cracked her nail on the keyboard All she wants to do is complain Nothing ever goes her way Chorus Cause the littlest things make her scream And that apple pie sweet turns down right mean She's a modern day Dr jekyll and Ms. Hyde Whatever you do don’t get on her bad side Cause she reacts like a match in gasoline She’s a Twenty First Century Drama Queen She’s a Twenty First Century Drama Queen Verse 2 She used to be care free, like a southern summer breeze no matter what was going down, she was fun to be around Now that ain't what she's all about She’s got too many problems now Chorus Cause the littlest things make her scream And that apple pie sweet turns down right mean She's a modern day Dr Jekyll and Ms. Hyde Whatever you do don’t get on her bad side Cause she reacts like a match in gasoline She’s a Twenty First Century Drama Queen She’s a Twenty First Century Drama QueenWith her I guess ya never know What will make that powder keg blow Bridge With her I guess ya never know What will make that powder keg blow Chorus Cause the littlest things make her scream And that apple pie sweet turns down right mean She's a modern day Dr Jekyll and Ms. Hyde Whatever you do don’t get on her bad side Cause she reacts like a match in gasoline She’s a Twenty First Century Drama Queen She’s a Twenty First Century Drama QueenWith her I guess ya never know What will make that powder keg blow
Roger Sosnowski The happiest people in life are those involved in music
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Hi Roger and Scott:
This has a comfortable, Retro feel to it... and I sure like it. The vocal was perfect and the backing worked it's magic. Remind me to give that girl a "wide berth." Best of luck with "Drama Queen." ----Dave
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Nice tune.
I suggest starting the song off with V2. Summarize the theme first.
I'd rework some of the aspects of her that make her a drama queen in V1. I think that some of them are not relatable or descriptive enough to paint the person that you imagine for a listener.
Martin
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Hi,
This has got an Eaglesy easy flow that carries the story along...I like the groove..I might change the mix of instruments up a bit between the verses and the chorus to make it stand out. Nice work!
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Solid country song!
This song has a really great chorus. The only thing that struck me was that the meter in this vocal line in the chorus seems off - 'She's a modern day Dr jekyll and Ms. Hyde'
Other than that, the song is coming along nicely. I have a request - put some electric guitar licks in there!
Peace, TC
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Roger, I hear a lot of influences, notably Dylan. You have a strong hook. I like it.
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Hi Dave,
Sorry for the long delay in my response. Thanks for taking time to give this one a listen. We're working on some fixes--hopefully will be out with it soon. Thanks again
Roger Sosnowski The happiest people in life are those involved in music
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Hi Martin,
Thanks for giving this one a listen and your comments. We are revising this one and should hopefully have the new version out shortly. We sent it in for a professional critique and as you can imagine we received some suggestions from them as well. Thanks again
Roger Sosnowski The happiest people in life are those involved in music
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Hi Iggy2,
Thanks for taking your time to listen and leave comments. Glad you liked it for the most part. We are working on a new version. Stay tuned,lol.
Roger Sosnowski The happiest people in life are those involved in music
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Hi TC,
Thanks for the comments. We did pick up on not only that line but the keyboard line as well--sounds a bit rushed. We are working on fixes to smooth the song out as a whole. Thanks again
Roger Sosnowski The happiest people in life are those involved in music
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Hi Jim,
Thanks for giving this one a listen. Sounds like you like it. As I've said in other responses--we are working on some fixes and will have a new version out soon. Thanks again
Roger Sosnowski The happiest people in life are those involved in music
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Musically? Right on. Only switches I might make lyrically are:
She used to be care free, like a southern summer breeze no matter what was going down, she was fun to be around Now that ain't what she's SEEMS [near rhyme with breeze] She�s got too many problems now
She's a modern day Jekyll and Ms. Hyde [Believe that the Dr. is not needed to tell us who she is here.]
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Hi Roger. I like the way this is going. When you say 'feedback on lyrics' how far shall I go.... you know me lol
I don't understand the line One Life to Live didn't record, cracked her nail on the keyboard
anyway on my first look, I offer the following, keep or sweep.
------ She's got a run in her hose, and a pimple on her nose? Coffee stain on her blouse, and lost her keys in the house? Her bloods on the boil, and all she wants is to shout Her boyfriend looks at her strange, like he thinks she's deranged ---------------
shall I carry on
God Bless Roy and Helen
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