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I hear this in an Americana vein. As always your comments/suggestions are welcome and appreciated.
God Willing and the River Don't Rise
The banks are overflowin'
And the levee's givin' way
Gotta get to higher ground
Before we get swept away
Board up the doors and windows
And take only what you need
We'll ride this storm out
Wait 'til the waters recede
Chorus
Come hell as high water
Three straight days of rain
Prayin' we'll see the sun shine
God willing and the river don't rise again
The river's rage rushed in with
The force of a hurricane
And when the waters were gone
Mem'ries were all that remained
Chorus
Bridge
I'm standin' in what's left of my home
Ev'rything I worked for is gone
The only thing left to do is decide
Do I rebuild or just move on?
Chorus
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Great Story as I could feel and see this situation.
Good Work!
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Some strong lines, and they fit together well.
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Barry:
Thanks. Much appreciated.
Rich
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Thanks, Jim. Appreciate your taking the time to check this out.
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Do you have a particular artist in mind?
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I hear the arrangement similar to a song by the Band.
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Will not know which way this will go until it gets recorded. Reminds me very of much of the Johnny Cash classic "Five Feet High and Rising". Parts of the Caribbean are experiencing this right now.
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Thanks for checking this out. Any mention of Johnny Cash when talking about one of my songs is humbling to say the least.
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Sounds as if your home state received some of the remnants of Hurricane Matthew. Was that the inspiration? Or something else? Perhaps a reading of your state's classic Johnstown flood of many years back?
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Hi, rpirone,
I think it's getting there.
Topical too.
My suggestion would be to get the chorus to flow easier from the verses and bridge:
Chorus
Come hell or high water
After three straight days of rain
We pray we'll see the sun shine
God willing (pause) and the river don't rise again
Good stuff.
Vic
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Actually it was a reaction to the number of floods that have been occurring lately. That and I have been listening to the Band over the last few weeks.
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Vic:
I like your take on it. I also envisioned a pause between "God willing" and the rest of the line.
Thanks
Rich
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The weather has been worse than ever this year! Floods, Snowstorms and heinous cold. And it is predicted to get worse in the next few years.
Brian Austin Whitney Founder Just Plain Folks jpfolkspro@gmail.com Skype: Brian Austin Whitney Facebook: www.facebook.com/justplainfolks"Don't sit around and wait for success to come to you... it doesn't know the way." -Brian Austin Whitney "It's easier to be the bigger man when you actually are..." -Brian Austin Whitney "Sometimes all you have to do to inspire humans to greatness is to give them a reason and opportunity to do something great." -Brian Austin Whitney
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It's a good lyric and certainly topical as the weather of the world is showing who is the boss. good work friend.
Just a writer of words
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It's a good lyric and certainly topical as the weather of the world is showing who is the boss. good work friend.
Just a writer of words
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