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#1094122 - 10/18/15 09:16 AM Three Crows (bluegrass)  
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Another song - this time in a bluegrass vein - featuring Mike Zaneski's multiple skills as a composer & vocalist.

I sent him the lyric and a vocal melody, which he was free to enhance, and he came up with the goods.

Just sharing, so no critique necessary, thanks. smile

We hope you enjoy it.

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Three Crows

V1
Three crows restin’ on a rickety fence
Callin’ my name, but it don’t make sense
I keep on tellin’ ‘em I’m too young to die

V2
Three crows perchin’ on a window ledge
Lookin’ right in, now I'm feelin’ on edge
I keep on tellin’ em I’m too young to die

V3
Three crows standin’ at the foot of my bed
Beady black eyes borin’ into my head
I keep on tellin’ 'em I’m too young to die

Bridge
But them old birds never pay no mind
...Waitin' there until they know it’s time
Then in they swoop on ebony wings
Tearin' at the past an' the ache it brings
Peckin' at bones of old regrets
Strippin’ ‘em bare to help you forget

Solo

V4
Three crows restin’ on a weatherworn stone
Hummin’ my name, though I thought they’d flown
‘Cause I kept on tellin’ ‘em I was too young to die

I kept on tellin' 'em I was too young to die

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#1094128 - 10/18/15 12:49 PM Re: Three Crows (bluegrass) [Re: DonnaMarilyn]  
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This is a beauty.
It's got that feel happy feeling. Good harmonies too.

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#1094129 - 10/18/15 01:13 PM Re: Three Crows (bluegrass) [Re: Vicarn]  
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Hi Donna and Mike:

So glad I took time to listen. As usual, the lyric deserves the best melody, vocal and backing to bring out all the little nuances of the story... and, as usual, Mr. Zaneski did such a great job. I think that bridge is one of the most effective I've ever heard. Five stars in a five star rating system, my friends. I can't wait to listen again. Best of luck with it. ----Dave

#1094131 - 10/18/15 04:43 PM Re: Three Crows (bluegrass) [Re: Dave Rice (D)]  
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This actually might be the style that is meant to be for Mike -- it is super excellent all the way through.

... and a super-duper mighty fine write -- great lyrics.


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#1094167 - 10/19/15 11:02 AM Re: Three Crows (bluegrass) [Re: Kevin Emmrich]  
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Cool song, Donna. Interesting lyric and terrific melody.

Super production Mike. Wonderful vocal and harmony.

(nice use of the resonator - subtle)

a great listen.

floyd

#1094170 - 10/19/15 11:32 AM Re: Three Crows (bluegrass) [Re: floyd jane]  
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Very nice on all counts. Well done. That's quite a team.


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#1094174 - 10/19/15 12:07 PM Re: Three Crows (bluegrass) [Re: Colin Ward]  
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Great Lyric and Mike,you're were born to sing this style i think.Top notch.Crows and death,what a combination,i'm jealous!Luved it!Mike

#1094183 - 10/19/15 12:40 PM Re: Three Crows (bluegrass) [Re: Michael LeBlanc]  
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Hey Donna and Michael,

It's DELIGHTFUL!!!!
What a fun listen!!

Lisa


#1094198 - 10/19/15 06:57 PM Re: Three Crows (bluegrass) [Re: Lisa Gundling]  
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This is too cool, loved it all.

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#1094319 - 10/21/15 10:38 PM Re: Three Crows (bluegrass) [Re: DonnaMarilyn]  
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Vic, Dave, Kevin, Floyd, Colin, Michael L, Lisa, and Calvin,

Thanks all, for listening, and it makes me really happy to know you all enjoyed it!

I was worried that the verses sounded too happy, considering the singer's plight. But then I thought about all those happy sounding Hank Williams Sr. songs that were really sad.

Donna has a real knack for honing in the exact vernacular needed for a particular style, and this was no exception. I felt I'd traveled back in time!

Mike

Last edited by Michael Zaneski; 10/21/15 10:39 PM.

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#1094331 - 10/22/15 11:08 AM Re: Three Crows (bluegrass) [Re: Michael Zaneski]  
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A really good bluegrass song Michael and Donna enjoyed the listen!
Travi


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#1094368 - 10/22/15 07:49 PM Re: Three Crows (bluegrass) [Re: Travis david]  
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I really like these lyrics, each verse so tight and full of great images. The music fit them perfectly as well. I can't say I cared much for the vocal though. If there were effects put on it, it made it sound like Mike just sucked on some helium, not the sound I was expecting because I know what a fantastic voice he has. Just my opinion. A fine song overall. I still enjoyed my listen.

Ricki

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After listening to other posts, there must be something wrong with these earbuds. Everyone sounds like Alvin! grin I'll have to try again when get home. Nevermind!

Ricki

#1094514 - 10/25/15 07:31 PM Re: Three Crows (bluegrass) [Re: Ricki E. Bellos]  
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Vic, Dave, Kevin, Floyd, Colin, Mike L., Lisa, Calvin, Travis, and Ricki, thank you all so much for your lovely comments on the song. I'm very pleased that you enjoyed it. Mike has done a stellar job.

Amazing how such a basically simple lyric can take on so much life and character with the right music and vocals. I expect we'll be teaming up for at least one or two more along these lines. wink

Donna


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#1094782 - 10/30/15 11:57 PM Re: Three Crows (bluegrass) [Re: DonnaMarilyn]  
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Oh Yeah! Much better on the home headphones. Great colab and kudos to you both.

Ricki

#1095094 - 11/05/15 06:00 AM Re: Three Crows (bluegrass) [Re: Ricki E. Bellos]  
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This is a really delightful song! I just listened a couple of times (and will listen again fer sure!!) Great work Donna and Michael!

I really enjoyed the light-hearted feel of the music and vocal performance and the contrast that made with the darker lyrics. Michael's vocals were just awesome!

And those lyrics are Instant Classic Donna! Just brilliant structure and hook and title. The way the story advances with that lovely bridge. Wow! This is one of those I read/hear and immediately wish I had written!

Great work you two!!

#1095211 - 11/07/15 07:45 AM Re: Three Crows (bluegrass) [Re: John Staples]  
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Ricki, I'm relieved that another set of headphones made all the difference. wink

John, thank you for your very kind comments. Indeed, Mike did a splendid job here. smile

Donna

Last edited by DonnaMarilyn; 11/07/15 07:45 AM.

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#1095300 - 11/09/15 04:49 PM Re: Three Crows (bluegrass) [Re: DonnaMarilyn]  
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Love this, you need to pitch this to some contemporary bluegrass groups.
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#1095429 - 11/11/15 10:53 PM Re: Three Crows (bluegrass) [Re: KimberlyinNC]  
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Donna,

FAB lyric, love the crow references and the hook and was so curious to hear Mr. Zaneski's Bluegrass take on this and I wasn't disappointed!! That High range, is Wonderful in there, I loved the vocal on this, what a great collab!!

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#1095553 - 11/13/15 01:15 PM Re: Three Crows (bluegrass) [Re: TamsNumber4]  
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Kim and Tams, thank you so much for your lovely comments. smile

I love what Mike has done here. smile

Donna


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#1095665 - 11/15/15 01:36 AM Re: Three Crows (bluegrass) [Re: DonnaMarilyn]  
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Donna, I really like this. The bridge almost has the feeling of a chorus to me, where it could be thrown in in between the verses. Thats just me though. I like it as is too.

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