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Mutlu
by Gary E. Andrews - 04/15/24 07:08 PM
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1st V is him. The rest is her.
Siftin' thru the memories Of a past best left forgotten Drinkin' from an empty well That's rarely seen a bottom The picture in the mirror Says there's more I should've said But last night's whiskey drove you home It took the best of me instead
Do you hold your breath and wonder What might have been Did the genie in that bottle Tell you lies again
You'll never see another sunset Without thinkin' about me 'Cause I'm the ghost in the bottle The one that you can't see
When you steal away All I have And all I'll ever be Next time you see the stars at night Then name one after me
'Cause I'll be that Ghost in the bottle The one you'll never see That you won't ever see
(c) Larry Westfall - 2015 BMI No Claim to Fame Records
Can't find the stairway to 'heaven'...but I know where the elevator is.
Each of us has cause to think with deep gratitude of those who have lighted the flame within us" - Albert Schweitzer.
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very good...the theme, in the bottle, is foremost throughout Maybe create a stronger lyrical hook through repetition.
Last edited by Neil Cotton; 10/20/15 12:55 PM.
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I like it, but, I do have a nit...just a little one. Since you're talking ghost, could it be spirit instead of genie?
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I like that Neil. Thanks for the look. It is appreciated.
Can't find the stairway to 'heaven'...but I know where the elevator is.
Each of us has cause to think with deep gratitude of those who have lighted the flame within us" - Albert Schweitzer.
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Good theme Larry well written and a good point raised by Neil.Deffo on the right track Travis
We are all in the gutter, but some of us are looking at the stars. Oscar Wilde
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Caroline: Great sug...genie in the bottle was just a different way of saying it was her but that you might not get that which you wish for or it might come in an unexpected way.
Can't find the stairway to 'heaven'...but I know where the elevator is.
Each of us has cause to think with deep gratitude of those who have lighted the flame within us" - Albert Schweitzer.
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