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... sometimes there's just nowhere to turn... THIS TOWN AIN'T BIG ENOUGH i hear montana is pretty this time of year i ain't been to vegas for a while, so i might head there the south of france or katmandu if there's no chance i'll run into you this town ain't big enough, baby big enough for you and me all this small talk's driving me crazy i can't hide from what we used to be around every corner, in ev'ry face i meet in ev'ry cobblestone of every street this town's overcrowded with memories so, this town ain't big enough for you and me it ain't easy watching you run around town i know it's over, my heart needs to break some new ground just when i think i'm strong you walk by and you prove me wrong this town ain't big enough, baby big enough for you and me all this small talk's driving me crazy i can't hide from what we used to be around every corner, in ev'ry face i meet in ev'ry cobblestone of every street this town's overcrowded with memories so, this town ain't big enough for you and me if we could cut it down the middle, divide it with a fence maybe my heart would stand half a chance... this town ain't big enough, baby big enough for you and me all this small talk's driving me crazy i can't hide from what we used to be around every corner, in ev'ry face i meet in ev'ry cobblestone of every street this town's overcrowded with memories so, this town ain't big enough for you and me Thanks for listening. floyd
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Hey Floyd, It sounds AWESOME!!! Anther one for the Floyd Jane Hit Parade! Lisa
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Floyd-
This one should be on the RADIO!
I love it!
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Pretty cool Floyd,i like the hook!Mike
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Hi Floyd,
Great mix , vocals, and overall production.
The chorus emphasizes how the town's not "big enough" because everything reminds him of her, so I'm not sure if the bridge works, because it seems to be about equity. But if everything reminds him of her, how will it help for everything to be divided in half? Maybe I am misreading the bridge--it wouldn't be the first time!
Mike
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Ooh, wonderful and super skilled songwriting!
Everything is to the point and great contrast in both the lyric and musically in the chorus! The music is as big as Texas, which is appropriate with that hook. I had a great listen!
I love how you made the girl look good, by turning the cliché "this town is not big enough for both of us" around emotionally, and telling it from the hurt protagonist's viewpoint. Wonderful writing!
If anything, I'd swap the second and the first verse around, as the second verse sets the stage much better (who, when, where, what, how). The first verse elaborates more on the emotion, as I read it. I think that would make a stronger impact from the start. The line "my heart needs to break some new ground" really made me pay attention!
In the bridge, I'd also consider underlining the world "half", with a long high note, in stead of dividing it between "stand" and "half" like you do now... "stand haaaaaaaaalf a chance".. because that would emphasize the first couplet you had in the bridge ("cut it down the middle"/ "divide it with a fence"), and make that look even better, imo.
Who's on the recording, is it a studio demo or did you do it yourself? Sounds pretty close to what they are pitching in Nashville to me.
Anyway, song of the month for me. I'm a sucker for this type of songwriting. Sounds like a Brooks & Dunn hit to me (but the town isn't big enough for both of them now! heheh).
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Out of the park, again... Floyd.
I always enjoy your songs. This one would have "charted" when Nashville was Nashville.
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Well done ... nice write, nice arrangement, and great performance!!
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Hey Floyd, It sounds AWESOME!!! Anther one for the Floyd Jane Hit Parade! Lisa Thank you, Lisa... you are always so kind.. Floyd-
This one should be on the RADIO!
I love it!
Mackie Mackie - you say the nicest things! Pretty cool Floyd,i like the hook!Mike Thanks, Mike.
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Another good one Floyd. Now STOP IT!!! You're making us look bad.
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Pagin' George Strait...OK he retired but what the heck we have mr jane to carry on what is now a tradition. Keith Whitley, George Strait, Clint Black, Alan Jackson and a precious few others defined this tradition for us. We thought they "saved" country music while never dreaming it could morph into what passes nowadays. But there's something in the air of late -- hints here and there that the times are a changin' in the country music world. So mr jane instead of carrying on the tradition you may very well be at the vanguard of a new one and we hope so.
Dang, I got off course. We LOVE this tune!
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Floyd,
Great tune, pulls you in and the great melody stays with you. I don't often disagree with Mike Z, but I like the bridge as it is metaphorical -- stating that yes, everywhere he goes he sees memories, but metaphorically, if those memories and faces could stay on one side, he might be able to exist there.......I don't think the line is meant to be literal in other words. Therefore I think it's a great expression.
Nice performance/production/write!
steady-eddie.
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Excellent story song and vocal Floyd, as Mackie commented it should be on the radio Travis
We are all in the gutter, but some of us are looking at the stars. Oscar Wilde
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You had some good suggs already Floyd. It's a good sound and vocal is tops.
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Hi Floyd,
Great mix , vocals, and overall production.
The chorus emphasizes how the town's not "big enough" because everything reminds him of her, so I'm not sure if the bridge works, because it seems to be about equity. But if everything reminds him of her, how will it help for everything to be divided in half? Maybe I am misreading the bridge--it wouldn't be the first time!
Mike Thanks, Mike. The bridge is "an alternative" idea - he qualifies it by "maybe"... Ooh, wonderful and super skilled songwriting!
Everything is to the point and great contrast in both the lyric and musically in the chorus! The music is as big as Texas, which is appropriate with that hook. I had a great listen!
I love how you made the girl look good, by turning the cliché "this town is not big enough for both of us" around emotionally, and telling it from the hurt protagonist's viewpoint. Wonderful writing!
If anything, I'd swap the second and the first verse around, as the second verse sets the stage much better (who, when, where, what, how). The first verse elaborates more on the emotion, as I read it. I think that would make a stronger impact from the start. The line "my heart needs to break some new ground" really made me pay attention!
In the bridge, I'd also consider underlining the world "half", with a long high note, in stead of dividing it between "stand" and "half" like you do now... "stand haaaaaaaaalf a chance".. because that would emphasize the first couplet you had in the bridge ("cut it down the middle"/ "divide it with a fence"), and make that look even better, imo.
Who's on the recording, is it a studio demo or did you do it yourself? Sounds pretty close to what they are pitching in Nashville to me.
Anyway, song of the month for me. I'm a sucker for this type of songwriting. Sounds like a Brooks & Dunn hit to me (but the town isn't big enough for both of them now! heheh).
Kolstad - I do appreciate the nice comments... regarding the swap - I prefer the "intrigue" of verse 1 coming first, followed by the "in-depth" of verse 2. A personal thing, I guess... thinking about it, if I heard it the other way, I would likely suggest that they be swapped... I produce all my own demos at home (a lot cheaper that way!!). Appreciate the listen... Hi Floyd,
This is work to be proud of. Thanks for the entertainment.
Calvin
Thank you, Calvin...
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Another great write, super vocals and a well produced song. How about throwing out something bad so we can really tear it apart? Ricki
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Out of the park, again... Floyd.
I always enjoy your songs. This one would have "charted" when Nashville was Nashville. Thanks, Dave. I was listening to the radio today (what is called Country) for the first time in a while. I don't mind that music evolves into something else... but why did they have to KILL Country music? Well done ... nice write, nice arrangement, and great performance!! Thanks, Jimmy... Another good one Floyd. Now STOP IT!!! You're making us look bad.
Stevie LOL - thanks for stopping by, Stevie...
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Pagin' George Strait...OK he retired but what the heck we have mr jane to carry on what is now a tradition. Keith Whitley, George Strait, Clint Black, Alan Jackson and a precious few others defined this tradition for us. We thought they "saved" country music while never dreaming it could morph into what passes nowadays. But there's something in the air of late -- hints here and there that the times are a changin' in the country music world. So mr jane instead of carrying on the tradition you may very well be at the vanguard of a new one and we hope so.
Dang, I got off course. We LOVE this tune!
J&B Y'all are way too nice! (Thanks!!) Floyd,
Great tune, pulls you in and the great melody stays with you. I don't often disagree with Mike Z, but I like the bridge as it is metaphorical -- stating that yes, everywhere he goes he sees memories, but metaphorically, if those memories and faces could stay on one side, he might be able to exist there.......I don't think the line is meant to be literal in other words. Therefore I think it's a great expression.
Nice performance/production/write!
steady-eddie.
Thanks, Ed - appreciate that... a good "explanation", there...
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Excellent story song and vocal Floyd, as Mackie commented it should be on the radio Travis Thanks, Travis. You had some good suggs already Floyd. It's a good sound and vocal is tops.
Vic Thanks, Vic. Another great write, super vocals and a well produced song. How about throwing out something bad so we can really tear it apart? Ricki Appreciate that, Ricki...
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really good song man...great production too....I think the piano could be a little further out panning wise ....just to define it a little better but, hey..I am listening on my laptop and it still sound great....good job man...you are really good at this stuff...
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This is a great write all around: Music,lyrics and performance!
Knocked this one out of the park!
Rich
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really good song man...great production too....I think the piano could be a little further out panning wise ....just to define it a little better but, hey..I am listening on my laptop and it still sound great....good job man...you are really good at this stuff... Thanks, Joe... the piano is spread across the sonic field - could be that does not come across on a laptop... This is a great write all around: Music,lyrics and performance!
Knocked this one out of the park!
Rich Appreciate that, Rich...
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