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This is one I finally redid per the suggestions of a few of you on this board. Thanks for your input, and I hope you like it. http://soundclick.com/share.cfm?id=13173808You make me Feel like Superman Todd G. Strachan 2011 V1 I'm no super-man, I'm just an average guy. I can't catch a plane, cuz baby I can't fly! Pre-Chorus If you're feelin lonely in the middle of the night, I can come on over and make you feel alright! . You make me feel like superman when I'm holding you tight! Chorus Losing your love would be my krytonite! Cuz when we're not together I don't feel right. You make me so happy when we're out on the town, I feel like superman when you're around! V2 I can't leap, tall buildings, in a single bound. But I feel, like I can, when you're around! Pre-Chorus If you're feelin lonely in the middle of the night, I can come on over and make you feel alright! . You make me feel like superman when I'm holding you tight! Chorus Losing your love would be my krytonite! Cuz when we're not together I don't feel right. You make me so happy when we're out on the town, I feel like superman when you're around! Lead Chorus Losing your love would be my krytonite! Cuz when we're not together I don't feel right. You make me so happy when we're out on the town, I feel like superman when you're around! V3 I just want to hold you, and treat you right. I bet Superman is jealous, I'm with you tonight! Chorus If you're feelin lonely in the middle of the night, I can come on over and make you feel alright! . You make me feel like superman when I'm holding you tight! You make me feel like superman when I'm holding you tight! You make me feel like superman when I'm holding you tight!
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I`m running into some great chorus tonight, I don`t think I got a look at this before now. sounds great! Lane
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Good tune Todd. I had a bit of a Kinks vibe when listening. Just a good straight ahead rocker. Nice job.
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I'm diggin' this Todd!I think i'll put my cape on now!Mike
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Hey Todd,
This has a great "garage band/live club" 70's feel for me. I like it. I'd like hearing the bass guitar coming through a little better with this song, but definitely like the distortion and power chords with the vibe.
One thought, as I listened again, I might consider a late bridge in place of vs.3--I think this would make a great spot to digress with a short late bridge to break the predictability of coming back to the verse melody--JMO.
Nice start here Todd!
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Hi Todd, VERY ENJOYABLE, especially this...... I bet Superman is jealous, I'm with you tonight!
I'm impressed with this song, good style ! Calvin http://www.soundclick.com/bands/0/calvinstewart
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Lane, thanks for the listen and I'm glad you enjoyed it!
Todd
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Todd
You nailed this one! Rock on!
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Hi Todd really liked this one especially the chorus, good work, best of luck with it Travis
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Hi Todd,
Great vocal arrangement and cool song. Needs more bottom and then it's perfect. If there is bass in there it's getting short shrift in the mix, or maybe it's the low bandwidth stream giving a false impression.
Mike
Last edited by Michael Zaneski; 08/02/15 07:21 PM.
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Still kickin ass and taking names, eh?
You got that Keith Richards vibe in this one and the vocals are smokin as well.
Well done all around.
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Thanks for the listen Dave, and the Kinks compliment! Glad you liked it.
Todd
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Good time and great fun R&R song. Musically, I wouldn't change a thing. If I had to pick at it lyrically, and I do, I'd say if you changed the last line of the pre-chorus, your chorus would be even stronger. Most of that line is in the last line of the chorus so use that space to say something different which would give the chorus more impact. Maybe something like this: You will be my supergirl when I'm holding you tight I think V2 would be stronger with a different ending because you also end the chorus with "when you're around". Again, it would give the chorus more power. And finally, you say "make you feel alright" and "I don't feel right", in the pre-chorus and the chorus, so maybe something else for V3 than "treat you right" would be more interesting. You've got some great lines in those verses but that's a bit of a let down. Overall, a clever write that could be a lot better with fewer repeats. Ricki
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Thanks for the listen Mike, glad you liked it! Good luck finding a phone booth to put your cape on!
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Hi Todd:
I don't think I've listened to your work before. This little "rocker" has a ton of potential. I agree with Zaneski and others, more bass would "bring it." Pitch this thing... and best of luck with it. Enjoyed and thanks for sharing. ----Dave
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Thanks for the listen Eddie, glad you liked it! The chorus was originally a bridge and the pre was the chorus. Many people told me to turn the bridge into my chorus so thats what I did! Thanks for the suggestion, but I think structurally I am happy with it as is. I will go back and tweak the bass though.
Thanks again,
Todd
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Hi Todd, VERY ENJOYABLE, especially this...... I bet Superman is jealous, I'm with you tonight!
I'm impressed with this song, good style ! Calvin Thats my favorite line as well Calvin! Thanks for the listen and your comments, glad you liked it! Nothing like a little rock n roll! Todd http://www.soundclick.com/bands/0/calvinstewart
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Todd
You nailed this one! Rock on!
Mackie Thanks Mackie, glad you liked it! Todd
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Hi Todd really liked this one especially the chorus, good work, best of luck with it Travis Thanks for the listen Travis, glad you liked it! Todd
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Lynyrd Skynyrd incarnate...........very cool man..I really dig the real drums....kick and bass need to come up and match...dirty guit is a tad bit too centered and overpowers the vox a little bit....vox could be wetter (add reverb)....
my kind of song...I really liked this. Very good lyric...
Kudos...thanks for sharing...
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Good one Todd. Love those huge guitars!
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Rocking tune ... nice work!
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Hi Todd,
Great vocal arrangement and cool song. Needs more bottom and then it's perfect. If there is bass in there it's getting short shrift in the mix, or maybe it's the low bandwidth stream giving a false impression.
Mike Thanks Mike! When I mixed it down, i heard more bass than it actually. I will go back in and bump it up! Thanks for the listen and I'm glad you liked it! Todd
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Hi Todd,
Cool beans ... it ROCKS! Also, I like Ricki's thoughts on some of those lines.
Lisa
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Now that is one cool rocker -- lyrically, arrangement and vocally. Boost the low end and you'll have it going.
We really enjoyed it!
J&B
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Still kickin ass and taking names, eh?
You got that Keith Richards vibe in this one and the vocals are smokin as well.
Well done all around. Every once in a while its fun to open that whoop ass can and see what happens! Thanks for the listen and glad you liked it! Todd
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A cool listen, Todd.
Classic Classic Rock. The doubled vocals are terrific.
Enjoyed it.
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Most impressive, young Jedi.
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