Beautiful write, cool arrangement/melody. I would like to hear harmony on perhaps three or four lines in the chorus--not opening two lines and let the last line be lonely without the harmony. Experiment using the harmony for accenting certain chorus lines rather than complete change up, your chorus will not seem as abrupt, yet still lifting IMO--which is only that and certainly not necessarily right. Every song is different with when and how much harmony is best, I usually record several harmonies, than experiment pulling certain ones out for better effect.
I like the orchestra interlude, a bit different from you with your guitar abilities! Nice to produce and arrange differently isn't it!
Wow, that was an emotional ride. The arrangement, the lyric and the vocal really pull the listener in and holds him/her there. instrumental tracks, the write, the vocal, the arrangement and the mix are all really strong.
Kudos...this is powerful. Look forward to more listens on our SC fav playlist.
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@Eddie ..., Thx as always for the listen. Great ideas and suggestions as always. Interesting that you focused on the chorus. After writing the song and starting to record it, I realized I had written it in to high a key for me to sing the chorus like I wanted to, but felt the key for the verse was right for me. When I write I Kind of sing under my breath. It is only when I record that I first try to belt it out. The chorus became quite the work in progress as a result. Thx again,
I like your arrangement of the song you wrote and played so well. Could it be better? Sure... in a high-dollar studio with megabucks backing you and a team of "experts" in all the right areas... but I enjoyed it just the way you did it. Don't let this one slip away. It has great potential... just like you.
Dave, real good song. The beauty of the music turns this reflection on the passing of a loved one into a benediction. The "drowning in despair" line was a jarring intrusion to the mood. I'd replace it with something gentler. Maybe something to do with a holy prayer. Still, it's a fine piece of work.
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@90db .... Thx for the spin and comments. They are always appreciated.
@Lisa .... Thx for your thoughts as well. Thx also Lisa for your condolences. This song is about my dad, but just as much the outpouring of love by those that spoke at his funeral of the impact he had on their lives. He passed away at the end of June. You may remember a previous song I posted entitled My Daddy's Eyes, written as he was dealing with his long suffering health issues.
This is so well laid out in so many ways. Great lyric and music, yes but the vocal delivery and it's emotion sells it. I really like how your arrangements have evolved since I've known you here. The guitar work was always stellar and now you've added the dimension of bass with it and orchestral elements.
The one thing I would suggest mix wise is the tree chimes seem too much out front. They should be more subtle IMO. I'm going to send you a pm on some other thoughts.
This is a very ambitious production and it's mostly excellent. I would lower the volume of the wind chimes somewhat, and add more reverb to them; also, you can hear the "keyboard action" on the strings during the solo, and I was thinking maybe they'd sound better more in the background and with a tad more reverb to disguise their virtual-ness.
The lyric is so personal and vulnerable..very beautiful writing, and a moving lead vocal to match.
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