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Mutlu
by Gary E. Andrews - 04/15/24 07:08 PM
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Leafs
by Gary E. Andrews - 04/05/24 01:49 PM
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My first time writing with Floyd. What a pleasure to work with! Appreciate any feedback. TIA! -TK https://www.reverbnation.com/timkeeseesongwriter/song/23872647-gypsy-days-co-w-floyd-janeGypsy Days © Tim Keesee/Floyd Jane Vocals: Floyd Jane V1 I track every road I travel one mile marker at a time Every lonesome highway, Fayetteville to Anaheim Beat up Gibson ridin’ shotgun in a beat up Chevrolet Sharing a front seat view of my gypsy days V2 Pour my soul out in a song, a little truth in every line Shootin’ straight from the heart, every word genuine Some might not understand, you’re born to it or ya’ ain’t So I don’t try to explain these gypsy days V3 This is who I am, a travellin’ troubadour Livin’ one song at a time, my curse and my reward Nights in half-filled dives, as long as there’s a stage And a beer sign to light the way through my gypsy days BR I’ll stop movin’, I’ll stop singin’ When my restin’ place is dug Music is my mistress The journey, my drug V4 I warned her not to fall for a ramblin’ music man Promised I’d come ‘round often as I can She sits waitin’ for that call, what would I say I live for those neon nights and these gypsy days OUTRO I live for those neon nights and these gypsy days
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i dig a gypsy song and you two guys got a nice one here!Great job.Mike
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Hi Tim and Floyd:
This is a real treat of a song and I enjoyed every line. Your writing has real promise, Tim... and what is there to say about Floyd except Mr. Perfection. His honest vocal makes the story line drive its way into the hearts and minds of your listeners.
Great work, you two. Best of luck with it. ----Dave
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Beautifully done guys. Nice guitar work and warm vocals. Is that a banjo I hear? I too like the story line and how vividly it's written. Is there a creative reason you alternated between my and these . I like MY. My 2 cents, on V3 The song strikes me as a person humbly describing thier existence and the label "traveling troubadour" while true doesn't seem like something he would call himself... seems too cool. I was thinking something like... "This is who I am, nothing less and nothing more. Livin’ one song at a time, it's my curse and my reward Nights in half-filled dives, empty corner as the stageAnd a beer sign to light the way through my gypsy days" And if "traveling troubadour" comes to the listeners minds, then cool. As your first collaboration you guys really nailed it. The title grabs your attention and the song really delivers. All The Best
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Good vocal and production as we come to expect from Floyd.
Not sure if gypsy has a slightly different meaning in the US. In the UK they are known as a travelling people but they travel as families. Not so much individually.
Maybe though the word gypsy here is used only as a metaphor to suggest he moves around a lot.
Nicely done.
Vic
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Hey Vic, We have Gypsies here in the US as well. They even have crazy reality shows... "Gypsy Sisters" and "Gypsy Weddings".
In the song it seems to be more of a metaphor but Tim can shed light on his intentions.
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and then I come across something like this! man" what a super write and song. Floyd I`m a fan, and Tim you and Floyd are so impressive in the writing. Lane
Last edited by lane1777; 07/06/15 06:17 AM.
"Blessed are the words of truth and fiction, one might save you from the other...Vincent
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Tim is vacationing in the wilds....
Mike - thanks for the spin...
Dave - appreciate your kind words... as always...
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Tim and Floyd,
Beautiful work, reminding me of all the Texas writers I love. This is someone's future signature song.
Every word in this is meaningful to me. The bridge sublime.
I am liking the musical arrangement for the most part, Floyd, but I'm not wild about your phrasing of "traveling troubadour" in V3--kind of jerky sounding to me. I'd have opted for more even eighth notes (I know..I'm being nit-picky..) but you otherwise have an excellent lead vocal here. Sometimes your close harmonies sound a little flat to me, but improve considerably in your higher range. You do a nice job keeping the musical arrangement changing, adding a banjo late is a nice addition, and wonderful pedal steel moments.
Mike
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Fate doesn't hang on a wrong or right choice Fortune depends on the tone of your voice
-The Divine Comedy (Neil Hannon) from the song "Songs of Love" from the album "Casanova" (1996)
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Nelson,
Thanks for the listen and the comments. The use of "my" or "these" was a choice of what felt right at the time. I like your suggestion of "nothing less and nothing more" although I would leave out the "and"... I generally take those little words out when they are not necessary. The "It's" on curse/reward is implied - and, again, I leave those out when they are not necessary - in this case, I much prefer it without. Your "empty corner" suggestion is a good one, too - although it does change the meaning slightly...
Thanks again for such a detailed listen...
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Well written and performed. Nicely done, both of you.
Ricki
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Nelson,
Thanks for the listen and the comments. The use of "my" or "these" was a choice of what felt right at the time. I like your suggestion of "nothing less and nothing more" although I would leave out the "and"... I generally take those little words out when they are not necessary. The "It's" on curse/reward is implied - and, again, I leave those out when they are not necessary - in this case, I much prefer it without. Your "empty corner" suggestion is a good one, too - although it does change the meaning slightly...
Thanks again for such a detailed listen... My pleasure I couldn’t agree with you more about things being implied and thinning the word ~ herd.
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Well written and performed. Nicely done. Dave
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Tim is vacationing in the wilds.... Yep, thanks Floyd! Been on the road for two days. Finally getting to my computer. Hey Mojo...always appreciate you stopping by. Thanks for the spin! -TK Hi Dave...thanks for the listen and comment. Couldn't agree with you more, Floyd's vocal style has a real genuineness (is that a word??) to it. In other words, very honest like you said!:) Appreciate your kind words sir. -TK Mr. Nelson...appreciate your comments and good ideas. However changing that line to "nothing less, nothing more" would deprive me of being able to use "troubadour" in a song, something I have always wanted to do lol. Thanks for the listen and kind words. It was a real treat for me to work with Mr. Jane. -TK Hey there, Vic...appreciate you having a listen here and leaving a comment. Yes, you are correct, that is the exact metaphor and intent of the word, gypsy, here. -TK Howdy Lane...glad you liked what you heard sir. Floyd is the talented one, I just came along for the ride. Thanks for taking the time to listen. Much appreciated. -TK Michael...appreciate you listening and chiming in. I'll let Floyd speak to your points, should he choose to. All I know is, his vocals, sell the song in my view, and when I had the idea for the song, a voice like Floyd's is exactly what I had in mind, and I agree the steel was a nice touch. Thanks again for taking the time sir. -TK Thank you, Ricki. Appreciate you giving us a few minutes of your time. -TK Hey Dave...thank you for stopping by. We appreciate your time and kind comment. I'd thank you twice, but I'm tired. -TK
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Hi TK and Floyd, I loved the lonesome journey ... it sounds GREAT! It left me feeling sad and forlorn for the girl ... all she wants is a little gypsy family and all ... is that really too much for the two of you to give her?! I think this line is worded very poignantly ...."she sits waitin' for that call...what would I say." There's something about "what WOULD I say" that grabs you ...makes the listener realize he hasn't kept his promise, but we're still not 100% sure he's not seeing her. Lovely song! Lisa
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Great collab guys! We will be the first in line to say that you can't go wrong with bringing floyd in on a song -- whether it be for the lead, harmony, lyric or production. He's done the magic transformation on several of our tunes.
There's been many a take on the ramblin' man on the road songs but this one shines. Neat and new angles on the theme, catchy melody and a sparkling production. Y'all got it going here!
J&B www,janiceandbud.com
Check out our new album Janice Merritt "Am I Blue Enough?" on Spotify, Apple Music, Pandora, Amazon and others.
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Thanks for the time, Calvin. Appreciate ya' having a listen! -TK
What can I say, Lisa? Dude only has one true love unfortunately lol. Thanks for the visit and your nice words. Much appreciated. -TK
Hey J&B...nice of you to stop by and have a listen. Without a doubt, Floyd is a magician and a wealth of knowledge too. Was really an enjoyable experience for me to be able to work with him. Thanks again for your time. -TK
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Vic - thanks for dropping by...
Lane - appreciate that...
Mike - thanks. It's a difficult song to record the vocal for because the entire verse has to be done without any pauses. Any mistakes and the whole verse has to be done again. The tempo should have been a tad slower probably...
Ricki - thanks.
Dave - thanks.
Calvin - appreciate it.
Lisa - you always know how to hone in on the finer points - appreciate that!
J&B - thanks, guys!!
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Amazing Tim and Floyd. Loved the lyric and the easy going vibe of the music. It just flows from start to finish perfectly. Every song I have listened to today sounds like a hit. This is no exception. Perfection.
Dave
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Good song, excellent performance, and very nice production.
I loved the pedal steel riff between the bridge and V4, very spiffy. I'm not as crazy about it in other parts of the song but there are some great moments to be sure. Given how inspiring it is in parts, I believe it could be even better throughout. The intonation on the harmonies is not perfect in places but they are still very well done. You set the bar high so the critique follows the bar! :-p
Peace, TC
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This song rolls along nicely, like a road song should. I can almost see the telephone poles flashing by as I roll down the road. The fiddle on the break brings to mind the gypsy lifestyle. Floyd you did a nice job on the vocals and the musical arrangement.
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A good collab all round guys enjoyed it Travis
We are all in the gutter, but some of us are looking at the stars. Oscar Wilde
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Hey Dave...thnx for giving her a spin. Pleased you enjoyed the visit. -TK
Appreciate the listen and review, TC. Thanks for giving us some of your time, brother! Better than a low bar critique so we'll take it. -TK
Hi Dan...glad to hear the picture was painted vividly for you. Yep I agree, Floyd is a pro at what he does, for sure. Thnx for listening. -TK
Appreciate the listen, Travis. Thank ya' man! -TK
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