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Super self-explanatory but it was fun to write so here we go!
V1 I think I could fall for-- Not that I-- I should Shut my mouth And lock it tight Filter All of my speech With planning I think You will be Understanding
I think you will be understanding
V2 I think I think too much About us But who's To say what counts As too much I think Of us when I am able I think That you might be An angel
I think that you might be an angel
C I hide behind my quips 'Cause I can't seem to get a grip And I cannot say this in any other way I hide between the frets 'Cause I can't speak without regret And I can't bring myself to tell you to your face
V3 I think I could fall for-- Not that I-- If I Relaxed, god knows I do try But I'm Still a mess of Shakes and nerves I think You're better than I deserve
I think you're better than I deserve
V4 I think I think too much And too deep If you Knew you'd see why I lose sleep Can't grasp What's real versus Perception I think That you might be Perfection
I think that you might be perfection
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(Lil musical break right here, maybe a fun solo)
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V5/O I think My chest is Getting lighter My mind Tells me, "Hey, you Can't fight her" I know And I don't even Want to I'm thinking That I could Fall for you
I think that I want to fall for you
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Last edited by Meg Engell; 04/29/15 04:44 AM.
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I always say when there is no title, use the first line. So your title is "I Think."
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I think this is cool! Love the chorus. It reads like it'd be fun to sing.
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really fun cool lyric!Of course "I Think" should be the title.Mike
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Thanks for help with the title everyone, I was leaning towards "I Think" but I wasn't sure. Also thanks for taking the time to read!
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Well written Meg, I'd go for I think too as the title, the obvious choice is usually the right one-er sometimes Travis
We are all in the gutter, but some of us are looking at the stars. Oscar Wilde
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Thanks for stopping by to read Travis!
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Hi Meg, This is delightful! I'm drawn in to the lyric, because it reads like the stream-of-consciousness of the singer who's stumbling as he/she goes, and that particular kind of vulnerability is refreshing--to be able to stumble with good meter. The style is also organic to what's being said. This is the way we think and talk to ourselves when we are trying to psyche ourselves into talking to someone we really like, and they maybe don't know it. It's great (and rare) when both the content and the form both grow seamlessly from the ideas, and you've done that very well. This would fit in very well with Divine Comedy's "Short Album About Love" --almost perfect expressions of these feelings we all have at some time or other in our lives. Mike
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Hi Meg, I think...I think... I fell for it! Cool write! At the end, I think you could say that she has already fallen! Lisa
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