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Mutlu
by Gary E. Andrews - 04/15/24 07:08 PM
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I have this posted on the mp3 forum too but...I changed a few of the lyrics and was mostly hoping this song worked lyrically for the most part.
Thanks!
Rewrite #1 at post #3
THE PART OF YOU I'LL ALWAYS SEE
A time to crawl A time to stand A time to fall A time for Sand A time to run fast in your new red shoes A time for a smile at a Petting Zoo
I know There's a time to grow I know There'll be a time to let go
A time to hit A time to catch A time to skip A time to splash A time for grades to show you've learned A time to drive with your license earned
I know There's a time to grow I know There'll be a time to let go
When you came into my world I held your tiny hand I never thought that time would move so fast Yesterday was somersaults and bouncing on my knee That's the part of you I'll always see
A time to kiss A time to blush A time for bliss A time to hush It's time to wear a long white dress It's time to spare at no expense
I know It's your time to glow I know It's my time to let go...
Last edited by Ricky Layne; 03/15/15 05:57 PM.
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No matter what age they are Ricky they'll always be your kids.I have to boys well grown men now and it a roller coaster ride with them both, but they turned out fine. Good lyric has a lot of potential for greater depth with a rewrite or two Travis
We are all in the gutter, but some of us are looking at the stars. Oscar Wilde
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Thank you Travis! Here is the first rewrite:
THE PART OF YOU HE'LL NEVER SEE
A time for blue to find his clues A time to Dad to help you bat A time to run fast in your new red shoes A time for a smile at a Petting Zoo
I know There's a time to grow And I know There'll be a time to let go
A time for school where boys drool A time to cry with no reason why A time to heal your arm in a cast A time for turtles in ninja masks
I know There's a time to grow And I know There'll be a time to let go
When you came into my world I held your tiny hand I never thought that time would move so fast Yesterday was somersaults and bouncing on my knee That's the part of you He'll never see
A time to kiss your lonely prince A time for yes at his request It's time to wear a long white dress It's time to spare at no expense
I know It's your time to glow I know It's my time to let go...
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Changed the verses.
Thanks!
THE PART OF YOU HE'LL NEVER SEE
The time machine in my head Takes me back to when she said "I just want to go out and play I don't even like boys anyway"
I know There's a time to grow And I know There'll be a time to let go
I watch her eyes look away to him Than she sighs and that's my glimpse I have to smile as I hear her say "I don't even like him anyway"
I know There's a time to grow And I know There'll be a time to let go
When you came into my world I held your tiny hand I never thought that time would move so fast Yesterday was somersaults and bouncing on my knee That's the part of you He'll never see
Today a kiss turns into a blush I feel her bliss and I just hush To see her in that long white dress My little girl is picturesque
I know It's your time to glow I know It's my time to let go...
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It's tough being a parent. I suppose it always was.
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