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by Gary E. Andrews - 04/15/24 07:08 PM
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by Gary E. Andrews - 04/05/24 01:49 PM
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Something I had Heather Cowles do for me IT WAS ALWAYS YOU (verse) I remember we were maybe, what, sixteen? You, a football hero, hot shot lover To me you seemed more like a brother When the world just didn't understand us We'd find comfort in each other The shoulder I could lean on Any time I needed to It was always you (verse) I signed your yearbook "best of friends forever" And when you left for school that fall I cried I never let you know the whole truth why We swore the world would never come between us But time and distance changed our lives Still when I hurt, like magic I'd hear the phone ring and I knew It was always you (bridge) My world took a couple of turns for the worse, I came here to make a new start You got promoted, and they sent you to run my town's branch Last night I was layin' alone in my bed and heard this small voice in my heart Saying this is our chance, if I'll just take a chance (verse) Back at my place after dinner at Alfredo's Sittin' on the couch, sipping sweet red wine Reminiscing 'bout all the good old times Laughing, crying, both came easy Then I felt your mouth on mine I trembled just a little As that kiss said it was true It was always you. It was always you Bill Osofsky, BMI copyright http://www.soundclick.com/player/single_player.cfm?songid=6665836&q=hi
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Nice voice.... The music is not working with the lyric in MHO.I'm not sure if the fault is the music or the lyric Maybe others will have a different opinion. Sorry I can't be more helpful.
Bill, I know that you have been around long enough to know if it is working for you. If it is, all is good.
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Nice voice.... The music is not working with the lyric in MHO.I'm not sure if the fault is the music or the lyric Maybe others will have a different opinion. Sorry I can't be more helpful.
Bill, I know that you have been around long enough to know if it is working for you. If it is, all is good. Thanks, Neil. Appreciate the listen. This was something I wanted to have music for but not something I intended to pitch. I thought Heather did a nice job with it. Bill
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Bill,
I couldn't find the link, I'm used of seeing them on top--I found it! What a great voice. I really like this vibe, very cool bridge as well. I like songs without choruses for a change now and then.
I do feel like the last line of the verse begs to be repeated like it is in the final verse. I would like to see the first verse say the line in a way that summarizes, then use one tag with the 2nd verse, then two tags at the end--In my mind, it will help the song's transitions to "feel" and justify more that there doesn't need to be a chorus. Of course, JMO.
I really liked this write guys, nice song!
steady-eddie.
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Bill, nicely done. Since you aren't pitching it the characters being so old doesn't matter. I think it's well written using the hook only at the end. I'd say lips rather than mouth. Overall I really like it. Heather sounds good.
John
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Thanks, Eddie, John, Calvin
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Bill,
A terrific write. A gem of a lyric. It felt to me that the melody did not show the lyric off fully. Heather did a great job on the recording playing and singing. Nothing wrong with the melody as is... I just thought there were places where "going somewhere else" melodically would have a benefit (to the lyric).
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Bill,
A terrific write. A gem of a lyric. It felt to me that the melody did not show the lyric off fully. Heather did a great job on the recording playing and singing. Nothing wrong with the melody as is... I just thought there were places where "going somewhere else" melodically would have a benefit (to the lyric).
floyd Thanks, Floyd. Appreciate the listen and comments. My usual cowriter wasn't interested in the lyric so I got Heather to do it Bill
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