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by Gary E. Andrews - 04/15/24 07:08 PM
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This is one of those personal therapy writes. You all know what I mean too... I've had the title "Dream Girl" in my head for a while but never knew what to do with it until today.
Dream Girl (c)Justin Heath 2013
v Feel the cool breeze blow across the bed sheets Up where your head and the pillow meet It passes up the question marks and warms your heart With whispers of forever in the dark
c Go ahead.. dream girl Close your eyes and see girl Take your time til it feels just right And let it rush into your world Go ahead and dream girl
v Only we know what hides right behind your eyes Your breath on mine like a lullaby The time you slept so close to my smile All wrapped up for a little while
pc I'm sorry you have keep it all inside this time
c So go ahead.. dream girl Close your eyes and see girl Take your time til it feels just right And let it rush into your world Go ahead and dream girl
br And when time decides to move again All day long you'll remember when..
v You felt the cool breeze blow across the bed sheets Up where your head and the pillow meet It passes up the question marks and warms your heart With whispers of forever in the dark
c Go ahead.. dream girl Close your eyes and see girl Take your time til it feels just right And let it rush into your world Go ahead and dream girl --- Dream girl...
Last edited by JustinTravis; 08/28/13 05:11 PM.
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Nice sentimental lyric you have here, and I really like the chorus. A good write.
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LJT.. I appreciate it, thank you.
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Dreamy and nice! I'm all for going back to the first verse at the end, but I might add a 2-line bridge.
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Hey thanks Jim.. Ya a little bridge may be in order.
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For you Jim.. I added a two line bridge.
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Hey Justin A good write. nice lyrics and a decent flow to it.
Cheers Joe
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Hey Justin A good write. nice lyrics and a decent flow to it.
Cheers Joe Thanks Joe.. Yeah I'd like to have a simple, gentle.. acoustic version of this one done. That's how it feels to me.
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Hi Justin,
Very dreamy write....flows along so prettily!
Hey -- you gave Jim a bridge -- can I have a pre-chorus? lol!
Lisa
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Hi Justin,
Very dreamy write....flows along so prettily!
Hey -- you gave Jim a bridge -- can I have a pre-chorus? lol!
Lisa Thanks for checking this out Lisa. I couldn't find a PC for this one..
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EDIT** Lisa.. I found a one liner pre-chorus
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Hey -- I LIKE my pre-chorus! Thanks!! -- Lisa
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I found the whispers in the dark line stood out for me as cliche Justin...but it is a nice piece of work
If writing ever becomes work I think I'm going to have to stop
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I found the whispers in the dark line stood out for me as cliche Justin...but it is a nice piece of work Thanks John. I think a cliche now and again is ok. Folks can usually relate to them.
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I tuned up this write just a bit. I have a nice melody for it now too. It'll be getting demo'd soon.
Dream Girl
v You feel the cool breeze blow across the bed sheets Up to where your head and the pillow meet It passes up the question marks and warms your heart Like whispers of forever in the dark
c Go ahead.. dream girl Close your eyes and see girl Take your time until it feels just right And let it rush into your world Go ahead and dream girl
v Dream tonight all about the good times That hide right behind your blue eyes With your breath on mine like a lullaby I've got you all wrapped up for a little while
c Go ahead.. dream girl Close your eyes and see girl Take your time until it feels just right And let it rush into your world Go ahead and dream girl
br When time decides to move again All day long you'll remember when The cool breeze blew across the bed sheets Up to where your head and pillow meet
c Go ahead.. dream girl Close your eyes and see girl Take your time til it feels just right And let it rush into your world Go ahead and dream girl Dream girl
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Hi Justin,
I'll look forward to hearing it when you have the demo done!
Lisa
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Justin, that seems lovely to me. Question is whether the ladies buy it. So far so good on that score.
John
Whoever said the pen is mightier than the sword never had an editor.
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