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by Gary E. Andrews - 04/15/24 07:08 PM
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http://www.soundclick.com/player/single_player.cfm?songid=6906101&q=hiThe vocal and production is all Al THE MUSIC ENDED (verse) At a Friday evening church dance We were just teenagers then And it made me feel so great when You didn't let that guy cut in Well, we talked and drank some fruit punch for a while And I started learning how to make you smile Then we danced again. (chorus) When the music ended I felt awkward and unsure As I held on to you Cause I knew I wanted more We didn't know too much of love but we pretended When the music ended. (verse) We were married at that same church You were beautiful in white We made All My Life our first dance On that starfilled August night You smiled and we drank some champagne punch And I knew you only get this feeling once And we danced again (chorus) When the music ended It was just us on the floor And I held on to you I couldn't ask for any more. I stared into your eyes, time was suspended When the music ended. (bridge) Then you got sick and took a turn for the worse And I found myself, one rainy morning, back at that old church Praying for you and wondering how life would be If one day you weren't here with me (chorus) If the music ended And it was just me on the floor I'd still hold on to you With a love that's strong and sure Cause you'd leave me with a heart that can't be mended If the music ended Bill Osofsky, Al Carmichael copyright
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Geez, Bill... will that list never end - I'll bet there IS a dog somewhere - done in for sure!!! psycho-killer songwriter....
Rippin' out hearts wherever he goes...
Tender, touching, teary. Terrific.
Al's melody is really wonderful, too...
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mighty fine job guys!Mike
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great song and very beutiful.
Will play it to Helen later
God Bless Roy and Helen
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Bill and Al:
Now that's a country song. Al's melody and vocal bring out all the best of each line here. Sad, beautiful and sincere. Al's vocal has a quality that will take him a long way down this road we all attempt to travel. Wonderful work, guys. Sad... but stunning. ---Dave
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Hard to add to the above. It's all there and what's there is IMO what SHOULD be heard on country radio. The tawdry reality vignettes that pass for modern country PALE when faced with this type of writing.
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Tear jerker, but beautifully done, Bill. Vocal delivery done really well and helps sell the emotion of the lyrics. Part of the lyrics felt a little like you were "reporting" a play by play almost, instead telling a story, particularly in the bridge. If you do another "take" you may want to start the bridge with "When" instead of "Then" and drop the "And" from the 2nd line of the bridge.
WHEN you got sick and took a turn for the worse I found myself, one rainy morning, back at that old church
Loved this line in particular:
We didn't know too much of love but we pretended When the music ended.
Nicely done! Tim
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[quote=floyd jane]Geez, Bill... will that list never end - I'll bet there IS a dog somewhere - done in for sure!!! psycho-killer songwriter....
Rippin' out hearts wherever he goes...
Tender, touching, teary. Terrific.
Al's melody is really wonderful, too...
Floyd, please don't turn me in. I know I can be reformed
Bill
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mighty fine job guys!Mike Thanks, Mike Bill
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great song and very beutiful.
Will play it to Helen later
God Bless Roy and Helen Roy, I hope Helen enjoyed it. Thanks for the listen Bill
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Bill and Al:
Now that's a country song. Al's melody and vocal bring out all the best of each line here. Sad, beautiful and sincere. Al's vocal has a quality that will take him a long way down this road we all attempt to travel. Wonderful work, guys. Sad... but stunning. ---Dave Thanks, Dave. Al has a very trad country leaning and he's very good at it Bill
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Hard to add to the above. It's all there and what's there is IMO what SHOULD be heard on country radio. The tawdry reality vignettes that pass for modern country PALE when faced with this type of writing. Thanks J&B. That's very nice of you Bill
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Tear jerker, but beautifully done, Bill. Vocal delivery done really well and helps sell the emotion of the lyrics. Part of the lyrics felt a little like you were "reporting" a play by play almost, instead telling a story, particularly in the bridge. If you do another "take" you may want to start the bridge with "When" instead of "Then" and drop the "And" from the 2nd line of the bridge.
WHEN you got sick and took a turn for the worse I found myself, one rainy morning, back at that old church
Loved this line in particular:
We didn't know too much of love but we pretended When the music ended.
Nicely done! Tim Thanks, Tim. I like your suggestion Bill
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Really well orchestrated story with the structure beautifully and masterfully carrying the story to it's tearful conclusion. I'm really impressed with how you laid this one out lyrically with the choruses changing so gradually to support the progression of the story and the relationship. I also REALLY love the pause you insert at the end of each chorus leading into the title line. That's an awesome touch that adds an extra measure of distinction to the vocal. You're the man, Bill, and this song once again demonstrates it very well. I loved it.
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Had another listen and you brought tears to Helen's eyes
God Bless Roy and Helen
Last edited by Roy Cooper; 04/03/14 07:10 AM.
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Hi Bill, As you know, I love funny songs/zany songs, but I can also appreciate emotion & beauty, this is one of the best. And your singer is sooooo smooth. Calvin http://www.soundclick.com/bands/0/calvinstewart
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Hi Bill, I haven't listened to the whole song yet. I'm commenting as I go. I love the 1st verse, music, lyric, vocal. If this were my song I would end v1 on "how to make you smile" and soar into the chorus. Same thing with v2. (chorus) When the music ended I felt awkward and unsure As I held on to you Cause I knew I wanted more I believe this will sound better without "cause". It sounds just a tad rushed.
We didn't know too much of love but we pretended When the music ended. (chorus) When the music ended It was just us on the floor And I held on to you I couldn't ask for any more. This line sounds a bit rushed, maybe delete any?
I stared into your eyes, time was suspended When the music ended. This is a beautiful song!! Wow, I'm truly glad I listened. Dottie
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Hey Bill,
You know this does have a classic country feel yet with a bit more sophistication with the arrangements. I enjoyed that aspect very much.
Nice lyrics Bill, and great performance Al!
steady-eddie.
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Really well orchestrated story with the structure beautifully and masterfully carrying the story to it's tearful conclusion. I'm really impressed with how you laid this one out lyrically with the choruses changing so gradually to support the progression of the story and the relationship. I also REALLY love the pause you insert at the end of each chorus leading into the title line. That's an awesome touch that adds an extra measure of distinction to the vocal. You're the man, Bill, and this song once again demonstrates it very well. I loved it. Thanks so much, Bobby. Anything with production, like the pauses, was all Al, tho. Bill
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Thanks a bunch, Calvin Bill
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Hi Bill, I haven't listened to the whole song yet. I'm commenting as I go. I love the 1st verse, music, lyric, vocal. If this were my song I would end v1 on "how to make you smile" and soar into the chorus. Same thing with v2. (chorus) When the music ended I felt awkward and unsure As I held on to you Cause I knew I wanted more I believe this will sound better without "cause". It sounds just a tad rushed.
We didn't know too much of love but we pretended When the music ended. (chorus) When the music ended It was just us on the floor And I held on to you I couldn't ask for any more. This line sounds a bit rushed, maybe delete any?
I stared into your eyes, time was suspended When the music ended. This is a beautiful song!! Wow, I'm truly glad I listened. Dottie Thanks, Dottie. Appreciate the suggestions Bill
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Hey Bill,
You know this does have a classic country feel yet with a bit more sophistication with the arrangements. I enjoyed that aspect very much.
Nice lyrics Bill, and great performance Al!
steady-eddie.
Thanks, Eddie. Al's da man
Bill
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You'all take me back--Put me on that dance floor--Rhapsody In Blue!
THAT WAS SOMETHING SPECIAL!
Had to play it several times--Good luck!
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Thanks, Mackie. appreciate it
Bill
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Hi Bill,
Beautiful -- I was sad when the music ended.
Lisa
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