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#1022204 - 09/02/13 02:47 PM The Thought Of Her- A Production of Jane Studios  
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Thanks to Floyd Jane for the music and production

http://www.soundclick.com/player/single_player.cfm?songid=12474831&q=hi&newref=1

THE THOUGHT OF HER

(verse)
Got an email from my sister
Said that shoppin' down at WalMart
She bumped into this girl she really likes
Sweet as I could ask for
When she heard that I'm off fighting
She asked if it's okay for her to write

(chorus)
Well, that girl's become my fantasy
I just pretend she's here with me
In the solitude of night
She takes me to a better place
Back to how things were
And I think I'm falling in love
With the thought of her.

(verse)
The guys thought I was crazy
Cause I acted like a school kid
'Til that letter came on Wednesday just 'fore noon
Finally got to see her
She's as pretty as a picture
And she signed it love and kisses, see you soon.

(chorus)
Yeah,that girl's become my fantasy
I just pretend she's here with me
In the solitude of night
She takes me to a better place
Back to how things were
And I think I've fallen in love
With the thought of her.

(bridge)
Yesterday my war was finally over
I feel a peace that I have never known
They put me on an airplane back to Dover
I'm comin' home, Lord, I'm comin' home.

(chorus)
And I'll always keep that fantasy
She'll be with me eternally
In the solitude of night
I'm in a better place
Free from how things were
But I'll always be in love
With the thought of her.

Yeah, I'll always be in love with the thought of her

Bill Osofsky, BMI, Floyd Jane, ASCAP copyright


#1022218 - 09/02/13 04:25 PM Re: The Thought Of Her- A Production of Jane Studios [Re: Bill Osofsky]  
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aw man,i thought she'd be there waitin' on him.Oh well,a good story Bill but i think it leaves the listener wanting more.JMO. Mike

#1022219 - 09/02/13 04:31 PM Re: The Thought Of Her- A Production of Jane Studios [Re: Bill Osofsky]  
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Bill--

Sounds like a FINE SLOW DANCE--

An option: With EVERY thought of her

Good luck placing this one!

Mackie

#1022243 - 09/02/13 08:58 PM Re: The Thought Of Her- A Production of Jane Studios [Re: Mackie H.]  
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"And I think I've fallen in love
With the thought of her"

One of many nice lines. The arrangement works very well to support both the lyrics and the melody. Sad but with the promise of better things...tough to write like this and not have it sound maudlin. You nailed it. Thanks for the chance to listen.


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#1022254 - 09/02/13 10:12 PM Re: The Thought Of Her- A Production of Jane Studios [Re: Michael LeBlanc]  
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Originally Posted by Michael LeBlanc
aw man,i thought she'd be there waitin' on him.Oh well,a good story Bill but i think it leaves the listener wanting more.JMO. Mike



Dang, Mike, I was hoping she'd be waiting also. But now he's waiting for her. I think there may still be a happy ending smile They don't all end up having sex in MY songs smile

Bill


#1022262 - 09/02/13 11:43 PM Re: The Thought Of Her- A Production of Jane Studios [Re: Bill Osofsky]  
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hey,that's a fine ending anyway,at least i didn't guess the ending,i hate when that happens!Mike

#1022316 - 09/03/13 01:59 PM Re: The Thought Of Her- A Production of Jane Studios [Re: Mackie H.]  
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Originally Posted by Mackie H.
Bill--

Sounds like a FINE SLOW DANCE--

An option: With EVERY thought of her

Good luck placing this one!

Mackie


Hey, Mackie. Thanks for listening and for your thoughts on this

Bill


#1022318 - 09/03/13 02:10 PM Re: The Thought Of Her- A Production of Jane Studios [Re: Bill Osofsky]  
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Hi Bill and Floyd,

This is just LOVELY...and wow, it sounds beautiful!

I didn't see the ending coming either, but I think it's the ONLY way it could have ended because if they had ended up together, it wouldn't have been believable. As it is, with his death, it feels almost like the woman in WalMart was an angel, sent to make his last days on earth a little better, with the hope/thought of falling in love!

Lisa


#1022321 - 09/03/13 02:44 PM Re: The Thought Of Her- A Production of Jane Studios [Re: Lisa Gundling]  
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Wow. Great song, Bill, fine performance and production. I absolutely love the ending. Chilling. Touching.

To be honest, I'd pull it from the net immediately and get pitching.


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#1022324 - 09/03/13 02:55 PM Re: The Thought Of Her- A Production of Jane Studios [Re: Mike Dunbar]  
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Wow, super writing and great performance/production. This is big time number. Well done all around.

It's a classic. Sad ones are a tough sell -- unless they are this good.


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#1022331 - 09/03/13 04:11 PM Re: The Thought Of Her- A Production of Jane Studios [Re: Janice_and_Bud]  
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Originally Posted by Janice & Bud
"And I think I've fallen in love
With the thought of her"

One of many nice lines. The arrangement works very well to support both the lyrics and the melody. Sad but with the promise of better things...tough to write like this and not have it sound maudlin. You nailed it. Thanks for the chance to listen.


Thanks so much for listening and for your kind comments.

Bill


#1022332 - 09/03/13 04:14 PM Re: The Thought Of Her- A Production of Jane Studios [Re: Lisa Gundling]  
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Originally Posted by Lisa Gundling
Hi Bill and Floyd,

This is just LOVELY...and wow, it sounds beautiful!

I didn't see the ending coming either, but I think it's the ONLY way it could have ended because if they had ended up together, it wouldn't have been believable. As it is, with his death, it feels almost like the woman in WalMart was an angel, sent to make his last days on earth a little better, with the hope/thought of falling in love!

Lisa



Geez, Lisa. You've thought this through a lot more than I did, lol. An angel would be a great idea. Wish I'd thought of it.

Bill


#1022343 - 09/03/13 05:53 PM Re: The Thought Of Her- A Production of Jane Studios [Re: Bill Osofsky]  
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Very good Bill and Mr.Jane...The flow of the second line was somewhat awkward for me. Maybe word selection made the phrasing odd, to me.

Got an email from my sister
Said she was down at WalMart
(think shopping is redundant given the location)
JMHO K or S


Last edited by Neil Cotton; 09/03/13 05:56 PM.
#1022397 - 09/04/13 01:37 AM Re: The Thought Of Her- A Production of Jane Studios [Re: Neil Cotton]  
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Just want to say a "thanks" to everyone who has listened and commented so far...

Mike - Bill can catch you by surprise, can't he?

Mackie - find those dancin' shoes!

Bud - Thanks, man.

Lisa - your REVIEW was lovely!

Mike - Thanks - never heard anyone suggest that before - but I think I like it!

Kevin - you say the nicest things!

Neil - thanks for the comments

floyd

#1022488 - 09/04/13 06:26 PM Re: The Thought Of Her- A Production of Jane Studios [Re: Mike Dunbar]  
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Originally Posted by Mike Dunbar
Wow. Great song, Bill, fine performance and production. I absolutely love the ending. Chilling. Touching.

To be honest, I'd pull it from the net immediately and get pitching.


Thanks, Mike. I truly appreciate your comments. Funny, back in tthe day no one wanted to work on this on for me. My thanks to Floyd for rescuing it.

Bill


#1022489 - 09/04/13 06:28 PM Re: The Thought Of Her- A Production of Jane Studios [Re: Kevin Emmrich]  
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Originally Posted by Kevin Emmrich
Wow, super writing and great performance/production. This is big time number. Well done all around.

It's a classic. Sad ones are a tough sell -- unless they are this good.


Thanks for the listen and comments, Kevin.

Bill


#1022499 - 09/04/13 07:02 PM Re: The Thought Of Her- A Production of Jane Studios [Re: Bill Osofsky]  
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Originally Posted by Bill Osofsky
Originally Posted by Mike Dunbar
Wow. Great song, Bill, fine performance and production. I absolutely love the ending. Chilling. Touching.

To be honest, I'd pull it from the net immediately and get pitching.


Thanks, Mike. I truly appreciate your comments. Funny, back in tthe day no one wanted to work on this on for me. My thanks to Floyd for rescuing it.

Bill


Hey Bill, that was probably me. LOL. Another of my stupid moves. Remind me to tell you about the time John Prine said one day he and I would either write a song together or do a gig together and I chose the gig. smile


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#1022500 - 09/04/13 07:25 PM Re: The Thought Of Her- A Production of Jane Studios [Re: Mike Dunbar]  
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Originally Posted by Mike Dunbar
Originally Posted by Bill Osofsky
Originally Posted by Mike Dunbar
Wow. Great song, Bill, fine performance and production. I absolutely love the ending. Chilling. Touching.

To be honest, I'd pull it from the net immediately and get pitching.


Thanks, Mike. I truly appreciate your comments. Funny, back in tthe day no one wanted to work on this on for me. My thanks to Floyd for rescuing it.

Bill


Hey Bill, that was probably me. LOL. Another of my stupid moves. Remind me to tell you about the time John Prine said one day he and I would either write a song together or do a gig together and I chose the gig. smile


I hope the gig at least came with a guaranteed beer smile Funny you should say that, Floyd said this morning that he's working on a lyric of mine that's going to have a John Prine sound to it. Maybe he'll need a bass line on it smile

Bill


#1022535 - 09/05/13 02:25 AM Re: The Thought Of Her- A Production of Jane Studios [Re: Bill Osofsky]  
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Well, Bill, I guess some flames burn out and some flicker for years before they set everything ablaze. Way to pull this one from the ashes, both of you!


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#1022538 - 09/05/13 03:29 AM Re: The Thought Of Her- A Production of Jane Studios [Re: Chris B.]  
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What a beautiful song. Nicely written, wonderfully produced and sung. Awesome job, Bill and Floyd!


Last edited by Bluesriff; 09/05/13 03:30 AM.

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#1022568 - 09/05/13 01:16 PM Re: The Thought Of Her- A Production of Jane Studios [Re: Michael W. Brown]  
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Hey Bill and Floyd,

Top notch gentlemen ! It's a great listen.

No nits here.

cheers, niteshift

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Originally Posted by Chris B.
Well, Bill, I guess some flames burn out and some flicker for years before they set everything ablaze. Way to pull this one from the ashes, both of you!


Thanks, Sparky smile

Bill


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Originally Posted by Bluesriff
What a beautiful song. Nicely written, wonderfully produced and sung. Awesome job, Bill and Floyd!



Appreciate it, Mike

Bill


#1022602 - 09/05/13 06:26 PM Re: The Thought Of Her- A Production of Jane Studios [Re: niteshift]  
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Originally Posted by niteshift
Hey Bill and Floyd,

Top notch gentlemen ! It's a great listen.

No nits here.

cheers, niteshift


Thanks, Geoff. I must admit I got a little nervous when I saw your name here smile

Bill


#1022636 - 09/06/13 11:43 AM Re: The Thought Of Her- A Production of Jane Studios [Re: Bill Osofsky]  
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Chris, Mike, niteshift...

Thanks for the listens and the comments....

floyd

#1022660 - 09/06/13 07:20 PM Re: The Thought Of Her- A Production of Jane Studios [Re: floyd jane]  
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Hey guys,

A real work of art here...VERY nicely done.
I really like the hook.


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#1022997 - 09/09/13 07:17 PM Re: The Thought Of Her- A Production of Jane Studios [Re: Bill Osofsky]  
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Hi Bill

Nice to see you again.
I just gave this one a spin fine job by all. I dont know if you had pitching in mind or were going to invest in such.
While some may encourage you to shop and I feel it has potential I don't feel its ready to pitch at that level.

On the lyric end there's lots of great ideas and imagery.
But the continuity swims a bit. You can sense that your trying to set that story up in the 1st verse and its a big story.

This line doesnt help it not supportive enough

"She bumped into this girl she really likes"

Does it matter if the sister really likes her and is the sister angle the only options?

Got so little real estate with a song smile gotta get clearer.

There more, but you;ll see if you start nailing down parts the others expose them selves kinda like a cross word puzzle which Im the WORST ever at.

The Music!

Was waiting to latch on to something more melodic. Maybe the beat of the phrasing. Its pretty and all but whats gonna make it stand out and pay off more.

I think you have a something going see what others say if u shop it.

All the best
Mike



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#1023006 - 09/09/13 07:52 PM Re: The Thought Of Her- A Production of Jane Studios [Re: Mike Caro Substudio]  
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Originally Posted by Mike Caro Substudio
Hi Bill

Nice to see you again.
I just gave this one a spin fine job by all. I dont know if you had pitching in mind or were going to invest in such.
While some may encourage you to shop and I feel it has potential I don't feel its ready to pitch at that level.

On the lyric end there's lots of great ideas and imagery.
But the continuity swims a bit. You can sense that your trying to set that story up in the 1st verse and its a big story.

This line doesnt help it not supportive enough

"She bumped into this girl she really likes"

Does it matter if the sister really likes her and is the sister angle the only options?

Got so little real estate with a song smile gotta get clearer.

There more, but you;ll see if you start nailing down parts the others expose them selves kinda like a cross word puzzle which Im the WORST ever at.

The Music!

Was waiting to latch on to something more melodic. Maybe the beat of the phrasing. Its pretty and all but whats gonna make it stand out and pay off more.

I think you have a something going see what others say if u shop it.

All the best
Mike



Hey, Mike. Good to see ya. Appreciate the comments. Floyd and I have moved onto the just having fun with music part of our lives, but there's always room to improve things

Bill


#1023015 - 09/09/13 09:00 PM Re: The Thought Of Her- A Production of Jane Studios [Re: Calvin]  
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Originally Posted by Calvin
Hey guys,

A real work of art here...VERY nicely done.
I really like the hook.


Calvin


http://www.soundclick.com/bands/0/calvinstewart


Thanks, Calvin. Glad you liked it

Bill



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