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#1013837 07/02/13 02:28 PM
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"I Lie" (c)Justin Heath 2013


V1 - Intro
I lie about my age and lie about my weight
Lie about money and the reasons that I'm late
I'll say I drove when I really hitched a ride
And I missed your call cus my battery died

V2
Sure I checked it all off the honey-do list
And yeah "I'm fine" even though I'm a little bit pissed
Those romantic comedies.. they get me every time
Baby when it comes to loving you, sometimes I lie


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Whether we're face to face or skin on skin
No one's gonna lose here in the end


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Cus I lie.. under the stars and listen to your heart beat
I lie awake just to watch you sleep
I lie here in this bed, with nothing to regret
And watch your smile runnin' loose around my head
I lie, yeah I lie

V3
I never miss the lips of your sweet loving kiss
Or tracing the lines of your perfect olive skin
And you never ever get me tongue tied
But maybe, just maybe that's a little white lie

PC
Whether we're face to face or skin on skin
No one's gonna lose here in the end


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Cus I lie.. under the stars and listen to your heart beat
I lie awake just to watch you sleep
I lie here in this bed with nothing to regret
And watch your smile runnin' loose around my head
I lie, yeah I lie

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Baby when it comes to loving you its easy to tell the truth
Its everything you do in every way that you move
They say some gifts are heaven sent
That must've been the moment when..
..you walked into my life

But when the daytime turns to night, I still lie

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I lie under the stars and listen to your heart beat
I lie awake just to watch you sleep
I lie here in this bed, with nothing to regret
And watch your smile runnin' loose around my head

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Hi Justin,

I'd be lying if I said I didn't like this! Very sweet and romantic -- great job!

Lisa

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Ditto,...sweet, clever and with a rhythm all it's own.
Nice one!


Write on, Man,
Michael W. Brown, f.k.a. "bluesriff"

"The best way to find yourself is to lose yourself in the service of others."
Mahatma Gandhi
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HiDee Bro Justin!!!

This Song says what most of Us Liars wanna Express...

I'd be lyin' if I said this isn't Hit-Worthy!!!

Good Luck with it, Amigo!

Best Wishes & a Big Guy-Hug,
Stan

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HiDee Bro Justin!!!

This Song says what most of Us Liars wanna Express...

I'd be lyin' if I said this isn't Hit-Worthy!!!

Good Luck with it, Amigo!

Best Wishes & a Big Guy-Hug,
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Lie/Lay/Lying/Laying...I still have to look that up. Great lyric!


73's & 88's Good Buddy!
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Lisa, Blues and Stan.. Thank you guys so much!! This one hit me after I wrote the chorus.. I thought the play on words would be a neat contrast.

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Thanks Chris! I was thinking the same thing. So I looked it up and it seems I got it right! smile

Check out this link, lay vs lie:
http://grammar.quickanddirtytips.com/lay-versus-lie.aspx

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Thanks for not only posting this little gem, but how it "hit you". I can certainly see it grow out of that top notch chorus.


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Wow John.. thanks!.. and, you are welcome!
I have a good friend of mine working on a melody for me. Hopefully I'll get something up here to listen to, sooner than later.

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This is the best lyric I've seen here so far today. I don't like the sound of the first line of V2. Otherwise, pretty good. Good luck with it


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Bill!! that's a big statement.. thank you! I see what you mean about V2. I think'll I'll take out the "I might.." portion of that first line, and let the last line of the verse sum it up. Like this:

"I might say that I never miss the lips of your loving kiss
Or tracing the lines of your olive skin
And you never ever get me tongue tied
But maybe, just maybe that's a little white lie"

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Actually, it's "the lips of your loving kiss" that sounds strange to me. I'd just take out "the lips of" smile


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V1
I lie about my age and lie about my weight
I lie about money and the reasons that I'm late
I say I drove when I really hitched a ride
And baby when it comes to you... I lie

I know this woman. I recorded with her 5 years.

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Bill.. I'll work on that line. I think I was trying to make a kiss as descriptive as I can and still work.


Jim... I think we all have in one form or another smile

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Cute lyric, nice and sweet. Warmed me up, reading it. Great job!


Now writing as Orion Redgrave.

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I'm glad my lyric warmed you up Meg smile ..I hope the tune will do the same once I get some music put to it!

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I worked on the first line of V2 and also added a line to the bridge. The changes are up above^.

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Justin, do you do your own music or sing? I think in the lines you changed in the bridge it would be nice to rhyme "sent" and "when". Maybe you were planning to do that. Depending on how it's sung, you could possibly leave the 4th line as is. If not you may want to add 3 syllables, like "the moment when" to move when out to the same place as "sent". You look like you left some space later in the line, but I'm not sure how adding that would work with your music. Just a thought


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Bill, I don't play music or sing.. I'm learning guitar, but so far it's of no use to my writing. smile

I do like your suggs for the rhyme in the bridge. I think it probably would sing out better. I was rhyming "heaven sent" with "walked in" (in my head).

Something like this? :

Baby when it comes to lovin you its easy to tell the truth
Its everything you do in every way that you move
They say some gifts are heaven sent
That must have been the moment when..
..you walked into my life
But when the daytime turns to night, I lie

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Something like that smile


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JUSTIN--

IN I988 "SOMEBODY LIED" WAS SONG OF THE YEAR ON THE COUNTRY CHARTS--MY FRIEND, JOE CHAMBERS PENNED IT--NOW IT'S TIME FOR ANOTHER LIE SONG--WITH A LITTLE HONING IT WILL BE READY FOR MUSIC--COULD BE A HIT!

WRITE ON--

Mackie

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Hey thanks Mackie! I'm thinking of adding another four line verse before the first chorus.. something I can match up to that 2nd verse melodically.

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Ok, so I added a verse before the first chorus. Now the melody should match between V2 & V3.

See changes up above.^^

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Even more changes above^.. Added a pre chorus and more work in the verses.. Does it work? IDK..

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Love this song, its a nice surprise the lie is in a good way smile


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Thanks Dani Lee! It sure is a nice surprise.

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Still zeroing in in this one with some rewriting.

Also.. even though this song will be sung by a male, my good friend has helped out with some chords and melody. There is a short video of her singing this song early on in the writing process on her website.
---> "I Lie" video ...click the video on the right.


I Lie (c)Justin Heath 2013

v1
I never miss the lips of your sweet lovin' kiss
Or tracing the lines of your perfect olive skin
And you never ever get me tongue tied
Oh maybe just to tease ya baby, I lie..

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..under the stars and listen to your heart beat
I lie awake just to watch you sleep
I lie here in this bed with nothing to regret
And watch your smile run loose around my head
Yeah I lie

v2
I don't hesitate to lie about my age or my weight
And lord knows I never put that much money in the bank
And those romance movies get me every time
Well I'm sorry baby if you make me wanna lie..

ch
..under the stars and listen to your heart beat
I lie awake just to watch you sleep
I lie here in this bed with nothing to regret
And watch your smile run loose around my head
Oh I lie

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Baby when it comes to lovin you
Its easy to tell the truth
Its everything you do
In every way that you move
And when the daylight turns to night, I lie..

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..under the stars and listen to your heart beat
I lie awake just to watch you sleep
I lie here in this bed with nothing to regret
And watch your smile run loose around my head
Oh I lie

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better late then never. good one Justin. Described the "lie" beautifully.

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Thanks for having a look Douglas... no lie. smile

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Hey Justin,

Your friend sounds great -- I sure enjoyed the listen!
Lisa

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Sounds nice Justin!Ya have some great talent to work with too.Mike

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Lisa & Mike.. Thanks a bunch for listening! Yes Sara has an amazing voice. I've been fortunate to get to write with her lately.

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Excellent. And your friends are very talented. Lyrics are aces!


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