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Hello JPF Friends, I haven't posted anything in quite a while so when I finished this song I thought it would be a good opportunity, This one is a departure for me from the blues genre. I put this in the Progressive Rock category on SoundClick, but I'm not sure if that's appropriate or not? I think it could use some instrumental parts if anyone is interested? Hope you like it. http://soundclick.com/share.cfm?id=12326245From out her deck of cards she reached and pulled the Queen of Hearts And as the twilight fell she wove me in a magic spell Resistance drained away by the power of her charms I heard he say to me that heaven was in her arms But all night long the devil keeps singing her song All night long - I'll make love to you With many memories I decorate my mind Of maidens who were sweet and treated me so kind With fairest features and the fashions of the day With these maidens happily the hours pass away but all night long... In light of maturation there is one with whom I stay And by our bed each night we fold our arms and pray But all night long ... http://soundclick.com/share.cfm?id=12326245
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Hey Pete, Good to see ya again, and yes it's quite different than the music that I know you excel in although this was certainly pleasing to the ear. Thanks for the entertainment. Calvin http://www.soundclick.com/bands/0/calvinstewart
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Hi Pete, I can hear some Brian Wilson influence here. Carl's vocal would fit perfectly. It could be a "Beach Boy's" song.
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Really like the start for this song. And the chorus was the real highlight for me. Good stuff.
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Hey Pete. Sounds really good although quite different for you. Way to stretch out of your comfort zone. My only nit is that you need to enunciate your words better. Without a written lyric page I couldn't understand much of what you are singing. My friend and mentor, Billy Strange who produced for Sinatra, Elvis, Aretha Franklin and a whole slew of others like them told me this after listening to some of my recordings...Sing it like it's the first time you've seen the lyric because it's the first time your audience will hear it. Enunciate your words clearly. Other than that it's a cool tune and an entertaining listen.
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Hi Calvin - good to hear from you - and Best Wishes
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Hi Pete, I can hear some Brian Wilson influence here. Carl's vocal would fit perfectly. It could be a "Beach Boy's" song. Hi Ben - yes vocals predominate here. I'd let them record it.
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Really like the start for this song. And the chorus was the real highlight for me. Good stuff. woo who - who Thanks Allan!
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Hey Pete. Sounds really good although quite different for you. Way to stretch out of your comfort zone. My only nit is that you need to enunciate your words better. Without a written lyric page I couldn't understand much of what you are singing. My friend and mentor, Billy Strange who produced for Sinatra, Elvis, Aretha Franklin and a whole slew of others like them told me this after listening to some of my recordings...Sing it like it's the first time you've seen the lyric because it's the first time your audience will hear it. Enunciate your words clearly. Other than that it's a cool tune and an entertaining listen.
Stevie Okay, I put the lyrics in the post. But don't think it was that unintelligible?
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Hello Friend!!
This is very different and it is very catchy.
Did you put effects on the vocals?? I wonder about the treatment of them in making it seem a bit garbled. The melody really sticks and it seems really original, I like it, but would love to hear a cleaner vocal on it.
Happy to see you!!
Tammy
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Hey Pete,
To me a late 60's pop song--brought to mind "Crimson & Clover." Then again, there was an early 80's feel too. It was definitely different and in a good way, I enjoyed the melody and unconventional singing. It's always fun to try a few things out of our norm--so congrats!
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Hello Friend!!
This is very different and it is very catchy.
Did you put effects on the vocals?? I wonder about the treatment of them in making it seem a bit garbled. The melody really sticks and it seems really original, I like it, but would love to hear a cleaner vocal on it.
Happy to see you!!
Tammy Hi Tammy, Good to hear from you! The verse melody got in my head so strongly that I had to write it out and this is what I came up with for lyrics. The vocal riff for the chorus was a separate discovery that popped out one day and fortunately got recorded so once the chorus lyric which has a weird rhyming pattern came along to contrast the verse it all fit together so I must have been hearing it all along. Anyway, to answer you - yes I did put lots of processing on the vocals - trying to blend it , but probably mushed it up too much. Since this is a missmash of various recording efforts I'm not sure how much I can clean it up. But I will look at remixing it, because I know you have a great ear for vocals. Thanks, Pete
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Hey Pete,
To me a late 60's pop song--brought to mind "Crimson & Clover." Then again, there was an early 80's feel too. It was definitely different and in a good way, I enjoyed the melody and unconventional singing. It's always fun to try a few things out of our norm--so congrats!
steady-eddie. Tommy James and the Shondells - kinda pop psychedelia on that one - I think I was going for that early eighties feel when I started this with maybe a bit of techno - but I ended up paring it way down and the chorus was simplier to give it some punch. Thanks for the listen and the post. Pete
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