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Ok, first off I'd like to thank Travis for working with me, and being soooo patient. I had a song with no lyrics, he had lyrics with no song, and we brought them together and WAHLA! We have a full blown song! This is just guitar vox and drum loop, but I think it turned out pretty well. I will add a bass line later if I can figure one out!  I may redo the vox as well as they are a little pitchy in places and I was fighting a chest cold when I recorded it. the song starts about 8 seconds inand I appologize for that. http://soundclick.com/share.cfm?id=12324819This is a brand new vocal sung clean. Please let me know which one you like better. http://soundclick.com/share.cfm?id=12335389I'm lookin at me 2013(C) Words Travis David Music Todd G Strachan I passed by a schoolyard today Kids shouting and laughin as they played One stood quietly I thought I'm lookin at me Chorus I'm lookin at me It seems loneliness always needed my company I hope someday someone special sets me free After searching everywhere at each po-so-billity She'll find me and say I was lookin at me Christmastime I might head for the hills Far away from all those festive thrills Mr Bluemoon will really be looking like me Bridge Its a long lonely highway to travel A bumpy road full of ditches and stones I spent a long time searchin for a diamond amongst the gravel Who'll take my hand and say darlin lets go home So until then content I'll be wishing and hopin that she finds me and she'll gaze into my eyes and say She loves lookin at me Chorus I'm lookin at me It seems loneliness always needed my company I hope someday someone special sets me free After searching everywhere at each po-so-billity She'll find me and say I was lookin at me She'll find me and say I was lookin at me She'll find me and say she loves lookin at me
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This really a memorable and singable tune, Todd and Travis. Reminds me of an odd cross between The Lovin' Spoonful, Crash Test Dummys meant to be sung in the next Muppet movie by Kermit the Frog. It's a feel good song of the first order. It immediately suggested a bouncy, melodic bass line upon listening so I'm sure you'll come up with something, Todd. First rate stuff. Maybe a growling sax solo where you were do-do-doing it.
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I'd like to thank Todd for all the work he put into this from the bare bones.Thanks Todd
And to you Stevie for your thumbs up too.
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Travis
We are all in the gutter, but some of us are looking at the stars. Oscar Wilde
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Hi guys, GOOD WORK This has a pleasant sound / clever hook and a GREAT BRIDGE ! Calvin http://www.soundclick.com/bands/0/calvinstewart
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Travis and Todd, This is a smooth fusion of lyric and music. There's an old-timey feel to the music. Real fine melody. The lyrics glide along with the tune. This is a real good collaboration. I like it.
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HiDee Bros!!!
This is a Fine Co- here, Gents...very "Comfy" Tune & Vocs, with a Fun, Nostalgic Touch. (& can I use the word "Sweet" to describe how the Lyrics & Feel hit me?) (As-Opposed to "Overly-Macho"...)
The only thing that sorta bugged me, & Ya have to reflect awhile on the Lyrics...there's a tidge of sadness to it...because Singer's STILL sorta Mr Lonely-Guy...at Song's End...
But what's-Heard is so-Pleasant, dunno how many listeners'll catch that. Or Care!
Good Luck with a truly Enjoyable Listen, Amigos!!!
Best Weekend Wishes & Matched Pair of Big Guy-Hugs,
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now that's some T N' T!Nice job Todd n' Travis!Mike
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Good feeling with this tune. Catchy melody and a good hook all wrapped up in some darn good lyrics. Yup, a good feeling here.
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Hi Cal
Thanks for your comments, yea you're fight Todd did a great job on the bridge .
Thanks
Travis
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HiDan
Thanks for your visit.Glad you liked it
Travis
Stan the Man
Hello Bruv, yes there is a little sadness attached to the story, but the melody does lift it particularly the bridge.
regards
Travis
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This really a memorable and singable tune, Todd and Travis. Reminds me of an odd cross between The Lovin' Spoonful, Crash Test Dummys meant to be sung in the next Muppet movie by Kermit the Frog. It's a feel good song of the first order. It immediately suggested a bouncy, melodic bass line upon listening so I'm sure you'll come up with something, Todd. First rate stuff. Maybe a growling sax solo where you were do-do-doing it.
Stevie Thanks Stevie, I never thought of the Crash Test Dummies but you are right it kinda does! I was trying to sound like Leon Redbone though!  When I originally came up with the tune several years ago, it really reminded me of something he would do. Although it would have to be accoustic to be true to Leon. I tried accoustic, but couldn't get a full enough sound to make me happy, so electric it is! Glad you liked it Stevie, and thanks for stoppin by! Todd
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Glad you liked it Calvin, and glad you liked the bridge.
Todd
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It's a happy go lucky song in the tradition of Lovin' Spoonful (as Little Stevie mentioned). Pretty good listen for this early Saturday morning. Nice collab guys, I enjoyed it, for sure. Do the whistling thing at the end and you can channel What a Day for a Daydream!
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TNT like that one Mike! Thanks for your visit and comments
Hello Allan
Thanks for your comments and thumbs up
Travis
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Hey Todd and Travis,
Really enjoyed this. Very fine lyric and catchy melody with a great hook. Nice write and great collaboration. Todd ... I stuck around to listen to sonshine also. Loved that as well.
Dave
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Hi Dave
Thanks for your feedback, pleased to know you enjoyed this one
Travis
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Hi Travis and Todd,
This sounds great -- great collab! It is very catchy, too -- I'll have to go have another enjoyable listen!
Lisa
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Thanks Lisa, Todd created a real catchy melody,I'll have another listen myself too lol
Thanks for your comments
Travis
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Thanks for giving it a spin Dan and I am glad you liked it! This does have an old time feel to it for sure, and that could be why I found it impossible to put words to it. When I saw these wonderful lyrics that Travis wrote they fit like a glove! I just had to come up with a bridge piece. I agree that they compliment each other very well!
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Todd and Travis--
You guys have a cool CO-LAB working with this one--
Keep up the good work--
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Todd/Travis,
No question I would agree that there is a blend of "sesame street and Lovin Spoonful" going on here. For that reason, I think it's fine having all "the lookin at me's" both in the verses and chorus.
What a fun tune, a little more polish with the production and you guys might have a serious song to pitch for the TV market--who knows. It might be a good idea to have a couple more songs that relate to this style to pitch with it. Now start working on the video! Nice unique write--also loved the melody and mood of the bridge--that's where the song really makes you empathize with the fellow.
I like "Stevie's idea" with the solo, but think a clarinet might be the tone of choice for the personality of this song.
Fun tune!
steady-eddie.
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Hi Mackie
Thanks for your comments always appreciated.
Travis
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Steady Eddie
Thanks for your comments and suggestions as always, I'm sure Todd will like to comment too.
That Sesame Street tie in was funny, something I never thought of.I can see the Loving Spoonful connection though, similar opening, but completely different story if you mean "Daydream"?
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Thanks for your comments Kevin,I think the melody is probably more happy than the lyric though.
Thanks for your visit
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Very conversational, smooth lyrics. Music feels like an older song that you would walk around whistling. No critical comments at all. Good job to both!
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Thanks Chad, I have to pop my teeth in to whistle nowadays but it could be a good whistling tune.
Thanks for your visit and comments
Travis
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Ahh....now this is a movie song! You've put the melody and lyric together, now find a Grumpy Old Men movie to go with it and I believe you've got a hit!!
Really enjoyed it!
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This has an old sound to it...which is good , but not commercial. The first verse seems disconnected fro the rest, as there is no mention of the girl the singer is wanting. It looks like the first verse was written and the went in a different direction during the Chorus.
I passed by a schoolyard today
Girls watching the guys ball game
Reminded me how I used to think
Are they're lookin at me
Or something like that
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The first verse sets the theme Neil.He's a lonely guy wishing he had a friend /girlfriend.
He spots an apparently lonesome kid in a nearbye school yard, which brings back his own days at school and his continuing loneliness since then.
Hence the hook "I'm looking at me"
Thanks for your visit and comments most appreciated.
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I get that but was thinking it could be more strongly related to the rest of the song....Just my take. Good luck with it. 
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Thanks Neil,I appreciate your comments and help.Will take a further look at it
Travis
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Been there Travis, in my Salvation Army clothes and Goodwill clothes,the poorer kid on the playground, who just wasn't cool enough for the better off's. Love the song, and the story it tells. ~~Matt
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Thanks Matt,pleased you've seen it as it is
Travis
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Hey guys. Great, great song here with one of the best opening verses I have heard in a long time. Very simple and powerful and it instantly draws the listener in for the rest of the ride. Another awesome and memorable line is the second line of the chorus "it seems loneliness always needed my company." That's just really nice writing.
I love the fact that Stevie threw out the comparison to the Crash Test Dummies and he's right on as usual. The vocal definitely has that same deep sound and it gives the song additional distinction as a result.
I also really liked the bridge and the "rump pa pum" addition. Very enjoyable listen.
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Hi Bobby
Thanks for you positive comments about the song.Most appreciated.Todd worked hard on the melody/vocal and it paid off.We both thought the bridge came through well and the opinions seem to back that up,
Travis
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Thanks for checking it out Stan, and I am glad you enjoyed it! He is still mister lonely guy at the end Stan, but he is still hopefull as well! I hope to have a clean vocal version up tomorrow sometime. Just to see what folks think. Again Stan, thanks for the crit, we appreciate it!
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New vocal, please let us know what you think. Which one do you like better?
Thanks
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The new one, hands down. Reminds me of The Lovin' Spoonful.
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I got used to listening too the first one Todd so it felt like a comfy pair of shoes.
This take is good though, clearer vocally and again the bridge is a killer.
Travis
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Good job Todd...lovely song guys.
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Thanks for the feedback Stevie! Glad you liked it.
Todd
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Nice easy flowing sound. It has almost a Randy Newman sound. Enjoyed my listen!
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Stan Mike and Allan thanks for the listen and kind words it is appreciated! Oh and Mike we have relly taken a liking to your TNT tag! Glad you all enjoyed it!
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Thanks for stopping by Kevin,Dave, and Mackie! Glad that you enjoyed it, and if you have the chance check out the new vocal and let us know what you think.
Todd
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Got to liking this version much as the original now Todd, it really does sound fresh and clearer
Travis
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Hey Guys..You'r well on your way to a real fine one...keep pluggin'..doug
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Grace..Peace...Love
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love it! very impressive.
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HiDoug
Thanks for stopping by and leaving a comment,pleased you liked it
Travis
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Hi Jay
Thanks for your listen, glad you liked it
Travis
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