Howdy again, Neil.
I like this one.
With all due respect to your prose style, my eyes stumbled over one line.
Returned to high school, graduated twenty three
This just seems a little disjointed.
Perhaps something like
Earned her diploma when she turned twenty three
or Got back in school, got her diploma at twenty three

This is a strong song about personal responsibility and the duty of a society to provide for those in need. Most importantly, I see it as a song that says what goes around comes around. Society helped her, now she gives back.
That's a beautiful thing.


If music be the food of love, why is it so hard to keep my family fed?

Pete
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