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Mutlu
by Gary E. Andrews - 04/15/24 07:08 PM
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Joined: Aug 2007
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Howdy, Neil.
Clearly a great hook and a solid idea.
I really like the direction you went with this.
One thought (and that took all the effort I could muster :0)
I like the explanation in the bridge as to why you called her your "get up and go", but by the time I got to that explanation, I was already "assuming" you were talking about your physical condition. If I had understood earlier in the song, I would "get it" the first time you hit the hook.
As folks around here will attest, I'm no pro, so I could be totally off the mark on this, but the way I see it, If you have too much food for thought, you can always put the leftovers in a ziplock and keep it for another day, or just throw it away.
Good Song! Good Luck!
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