Dear airun,

Thank you for drawing attention to Eventually
people can hear the

piano vocal at:
http://www.songramp.com/mod/mps/viewtrack.php?trackid=12739

and the

pop demo at:
http://www.songramp.com/mod/mps/viewtrack.php?trackid=12740

I cowrote the song in 1999 - 2000, I started writing songs in 1998. In 2000 "Eventually" won grand prize in the ASG Bare Bones Song Contest. (around 150 songs were entered)

I think it's a great song, people tell me it's a great song, but it's good to know there are those who don't like it.

3 artists have cut it, many artists have asked to record it.
It moves people who are suseptable to it.
Ask someone who's recently been dumped to have a listen.

When you cowrite a song with 2 other people you don't always get your way on every line.

Marc Alan Barnette wrote:
"A weak lyric can be rescued by a strong melody,
it never goes the other way around."

I am a student just like everyone here. I know what I did to accomplish what I've done so far in songwriting and I'm happy to share what I know with others.

These guidelines are tools that I use. Some I wrote, some I paraphrased from many songwriting books I've read and workshops I attended.

I share much of my songwrting journey at
www.SongWriterBlog.com
click on messages and browse through the archive of previous messages,
I often share things at jpf before I put them in my ezine.

It may not be sensible to critique songs in one genre with the criteria of another.
IE critiquing a pop song using country lyric writing guidelines

I wish you the best with your writing
Thanks for sharing Eventually with the readers of this thread.

Ande

Originally Posted by airun
Let me post your song "eventually"

This is not just one little tiny cliche as you have mentioned
It's a song based on lines we have heard since forever and I am only pointing this out because you deny it
I can post other songs too if you want?
Not being a narc or anything I'm just very critical over lyrics
And you think you're some kind of songwriting mentor and to be honest this is like taking singing lessons from a person who got rejected from american idol auditions

Eventually
Written by Mark Oates, Donna Aylor, and Ande Rasmussen

verse 1
I lie in bed and wonder how you are
Little things remind me how we are now apart
No more talking on the phone
Or late nights with you alone
And tho I dont know why you said goodbye

CHORUS:
EVENTUALLY
I'LL FORGET ABOUT YOU
EVENTUALLY
I'LL LOVE SOMEONE NEW
THO ALL I DO IS THINK ABOUT
THE WAY WE USED TO BE
I'LL GET ON WITH LIFE
EVENTUALLY

verse2
I'm waiting for your memory to fade
I'm still holding onto the promises you made
You said you felt for me
A love that would always be
And I wish I could feel that love tonight

REPEAT CHORUS

BRIDGE
Somewhere between these walls of time
Someone will love this heart of mine
Though it hurts to know it wont be you

REPEAT CHORUS


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