Coming up with fresh words for a song of this subject will always be tough and HAS BEEN SINCE THE 50's....

BUT....You got line I really love AND IS FRESH..."When the moon forgets to rise"...Great line...

I think if you compare under a microsope all your lines to your "best" line while writing this song, you will be able to write your song "up to" this line....

That's all I got...Best to you


Steve Altonian---"I'll just do my best & let God do the rest"

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