I really enjoy the way that you write.
I think that we share some wavelength in the POV spectrum.
Cant say I'm crazy about the recording

My only negative comment on the lyrics is that the metaphors in the verse below seem a bit "drippy." I dont know exactly what I mean by drippy, but that's the word that came to mind.
It's not a knock on your writing, just a personal feeling about one small aspect of it.

And I just want to Thank you baby
for making me a wealthy man
Sharing the twin rubies
of your tender lips
and the golden touch
of your fingertips
and the sapphires of
your beautiful eyes.