You have good use of rhyme and progression of story

Got on board a big jet liner ...who did?...you or me/I ?
the personal pronouns in the rest are based on this...I suggest shortening it...nothing gained by repetitions.

Miss You Night and Day

Verse
You Got on board a big jet liner
Took off into the sky.
Left no text or Dear John letter.
No explanation why.

Tell me youll apologize.
You'll make it up to me
Make it up to me

Chorus
Im lonely, lonely, lonely;
Miss you night and day.
Youre my one and only.
Whyd you go away?
Im lonely, lonely, lonely;
Miss you night and day.

Verse

I've Got no way to reach out to you.
No way to say come home.
You Left no FUTURE DESTINATION text or Dear John letter *...avoid using this line again...
No working telephone.

Tell me youll apologize.
You'll make it up to me
Make it up to me

Chorus
Im lonely, lonely, lonely;
Miss you night and day.
Youre my one and only.
Whyd you go away?
Im lonely, lonely, lonely;
Miss you night and day.

Bridge
I never heard you cry.
Never saw a tear.
Dont know how I hurt you.
Why you disappeared.

Chorus
Im lonely, lonely, lonely;
Miss you night and day.
Youre my one and only.
Whyd you go away?
Im lonely, lonely, lonely;
Miss you night and day.

Last edited by Neil Cotton; 01/12/19 03:15 PM.