Gavin,

I haven't read the other comments before writing my own. I think you have a sweet tender love song, nice verses, and a great bridge.........I think your chorus needs tweaked. You lift on the opening chorus line, resolve with the 2nd line fine........but the 3rd line continues a "downward resolve," IMO, it needs to repeat the 1st chorus line melody and lift again, then resolve a 2nd time. You need this slow articulate song to have the chorus offer more lift and break from the strong verse establishment. The bridge works well to digress musically, but the chorus is your punch--that is where you will pull at the heartstrings and create empathy/interest etc.

JMO, use or lose. Definitely a good write here!

steady-eddie