Dave Rice does a decent critique of what you have so far

Best Of Luck With It

You could also write this song in First Person Narrative it's so

much stronger when the singer is involved in the romance or action

Incidentally I am reading this in France at this time , in a country villa

Far From The Madding Crowd

Just one other thing the vocals are fluctuating and the EQ if you are using one

needs a better setting for your voice , many words are muffled and un clear

Last edited by Cheyenne; 09/09/18 07:59 AM.

One of the most important principles of songwriting is to remember that a good song is a partnership of many different components, all working together to produce a satisfying musical experience.

In that respect, song components are either enhancing or compromising their combined effects.