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Mutlu
by Gary E. Andrews - 04/15/24 07:08 PM
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Travis,
I really like the opening. I actually like that you keep it introspective in the first verse; the second verse is more a view of the state of the world, and while justified, I think the lyric loses momentum. I guess I'm suggesting that you stay with the condition and prospects of the singer, rather than the world as a whole, which comes off less authentic. Not sure if that makes sense, but for what it's worth. As always, feel free to ignore--like most times in life, I'm more often wrong than right!
All the best,
Deej
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